Writing Feedback / All students need relaxation after hours of stressful study [8]

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Some students say that rarely spend time on leisure due to their studies and this always leads them under pressure. This situation was caused by two major factors.

Parental expectation is the first cause building pressure. Parents all want to see their children to do well at school and have a good career. This means they are willing to exert pressure on children to spend hours each day studying at home or centers. In my countries, young people usually spend at least three hours at private center after the school. As a result, they are always stressful and cannot get a good achievement on their studies.

The second cause is related to higher education system. More students desire to enroll into famous university that they want. Because of this, they themselves put a lot of pressure. They even study twice times so that they can have a chance of success. For example, In Vietnam, a large number of students attend the university examination each year. Many of them has passed the exam, some others has failed and felt depressed.

There are some solutions that can help students falling into in this situation. One solution to this problem is parents need to be aware of bad effects of pressure they put on their children. School and children should inform parents too much pressure can lead to anxiety, stress and depression. Parents had better make a suitable schedule with a justifiable amount of leisure time. Another effective way would be for the government to invest in creation of more university places. This could be done by expanding existing university or by building the new ones. Therefore, student can have more opportunities for university enrolment.

To sum up, students now forget the time for relaxation after hours of stressful study. It would be worse for their physical and mental health if students continue this situation.

Writing Feedback / University education is the only way to success. Agree or disagree. [5]

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In a few decades ago, a graduate from university could gain a high rate to get a good job. However, many students now consider universities enrollment might no longer the best choice for their career. Therefore, students should start working after a course and accrue the work experience.

On one hand, their career promotion would be earlier than the ones studying at universities. In fact, many people have been very successful without passing university period. Such people early seem to realize the importance of soft skills. Therefore, they tend to experience the real workplace in order to gain the valuable lessons needing for their future job. For example, Bill Gates, chairman of Microsoft Corporation, leaved Harvard University to start his own business while the curriculum is still incomplete. For his fearless decision, he now becomes the richest businessmen in the world.

On the other hand, studying at university is now not a prevalent tendency. First, the study period is too long. When students finish their syllabus, the employment demand might be changed. Hence, many students decide to start at intermediate school where they can both learn and work in real workplace. Also, students from the universities do usually not meet the job requirements because they do not acquire any work skills except the specialist knowledge. In addition, the unemployment rate of Vietnam is more and more increasingly with 72.000 bachelors each year.

In conclusion, although studying at university is a good opportunities to get knowledge, students are now more likely to join in the real work environment. It seems to be a good way for students to ensure their future.

Writing Feedback / Bar Chart which provide an usage of railway among different countries [3]

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The table shows details in 2007 for four countries concerning the percentage of population who used railway, how many kilometres each person traveled on average, and the number of tons of cargo was carried. In general, although USA travels least, they transport the largest amount of cargo.

It is worth noting that a few American used rail with only 0.3%, and they did not travel far (about 80 kilometres). However, USA strongly focused on carrying cargo, nearly 2,900 billion tons. This contrasts with Japan where 27% of people used rail, and they traveled far further than other countries (1,980 kilometres). On the other hand, about 23 billion tons of freight was carried.

The two other countries which are most similar are UK and Italy. Both of them had between 5 and 6% population using rail. They traveled from 770 to 780 kilometres, and the amount of cargo UK and Italy carried was approximately the same (22.2% and 21.9% respectively).

Writing Feedback / The rate of using internet between urban/suburban regions tended to increase rapidly over time. [3]

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The graph below shows percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had Internet access between 1999 and 2004.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features an make some comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares the number of urban/suburban and rural household Internet Access in a European country from 1999 to 2004. In general, the rate of using internet between two regions tended to increase rapidly over time.

The percentage of Internet access in urban and suburban was the highest throughout the period. There was a dramatic increase from 15% in 1999 to just under 50% in 2002. After that, the rate has more slightly risen, with 53% and 55% households had their own Internet approach respectively in 2003 and 2004.

Similarly, the degree of using Internet of each family in rural grew steadily during 1999 to 2002. However, that is a slight growth. From 2003 to 2004, it is easy to see that there were a larger number of people using internet network at home, increased from 27% to 35% in turn.

To conclude, although the percentage of internet access in rural is lower than in urban and suburban, people there have more chance to own the household internet.

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Writing Feedback / Differences of Life between in the city and in the countryside [3]

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People now have many options of their living destination. While some people would prefer a quiet and peaceful place such as rural areas, others love to live in the cities with noise and more facilities. In fact, the life between two areas differs from two major aspects.

The first salient difference is that lifestyle. In the countryside, the pace of life is very slow. People tend to be more relaxed because their work is simple. Every member can often enjoy the family life after a hard working day on the fields. Moreover, they are also less practical than people living in the city. In contrast, the city-lived in residents always seem to be faster. They spend most of their time working outside in order to make a living. As a result, they seldom have time with their family members.

Another important distinction is the job opportunities and living condition. There are poor job opportunities in countryside. They annually work on their farmlands and live in poor condition since the infrastructure is not as good as that in the city. For instance, the roads are degraded and the means of transport are restricted. In addition, children have fewer chances to present at school than those in the city. On the contrary, people settling in the city can land many new jobs in the city because many companies are operating there. Therefore, they can have different options to apply for different jobs. Furthermore, the standard of living is higher, and the building and transport system are improved.

To conclude, the way for living is differed from the rural areas to the city in many aspects. Although people who stay in the city have a better living condition, they often suffer from stressful situations.