Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Posts by jaikrishna
Name: Jaya Krishna
Joined: Aug 14, 2016
Last Post: Feb 22, 2017
Threads: 5
Posts: 7  
From: India
School: Working

Displayed posts: 12
sort: Oldest first   Latest first  | 
jaikrishna   
Jan 12, 2017
Writing Feedback / Internet opinion from a common user [4]

People have different views about the internet is a good means of connecting people. Others believe that it may not a best place to search information. This essay will discuss both of this view and give my opinion.

Internet is a great source, but reliable enough?

In the twenty first century, internet playing a prominent role in human's life. On one hand, internet gives a useful information related to education, business, and entertainment etc., which help humans to get the required details briskly. On the other hand, adolescence imagination is at jeopardy as we are completely depending on the internet for any information. Often students and youngsters addicted to internet and spending lot of time over the internet.The dichotomy of openions for and against views on the internet usage will be discussed in the next paraphrase.

Internet has created a revolution to software industry for the past 2 decades. Now a days, most of the appliances like Mobilephone, Laptop, Tabs enhanced the humans lifestyle. For an instance, carrying a message from one location to another used to take days, and often months but now with the help of internet via Mobilephones transferring a message in seconds. Social media like Facebook, Watsapp connects the friends across the globe and able to share their happiness/sorrows with the friends.In addition, it acts as a medium of source with abundant information. It's an opportunity for the student to gain the adequate knowledge over the internet and execute in their daily life.

Internet also have its own demerits similar to the merits. Most of the youngsters and students spend their active life over the internet for browsing outrageous websites. Recent researches endorsed that many students dropping out from school and college as they spend most of the time over the internet. Also, most of the information provided in the websites are not trustable infact abhorrent people quote unfavorable comments on the celebrities and become rivalries on each other.

In conclusion, predominately internet is a great source of medium of connecting people and gives abundant information. At the same time, we need to make a thorough review for getting the right information from useful websites.
jaikrishna   
Jan 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / Given pie charts compare the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000 [5]

@ayuriska

Introduction paragraph is not appropriate. the adolescence and middle-aged population will increase in both of countries. these points should come at the end.

Given areP ie charts are comparing the number of inhabitants

at 46,3%

with just a mere 2,1% increment. = merely incremented to 2.1%
jaikrishna   
Jan 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / Too much of financial dissonance in this world [4]

by facilitate them with electricity

by facilitate them with electricity = by facilitating them with electricity.

Should repeated multiple times.

government of poor nations should look after the pupils themselves

There are grammatical mistakes in forming sentences.

As the citizens of one's country, being need in food and education is ... = Being a citizen of one's country, food and education are the fundamental necessities. Either the nation is poor or rich, government has the responsibility to fulfill the basic needs.
jaikrishna   
Jan 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house and forgot your coat containing some belongings [2]

Write a letter to your friend telling him that you left the coat. Tell him what the coat looks like, where you think you left it and what was inside it. Make some suggestions about how to get it back.

i need my valuable coat back



Dear Stevens,

I reached home today after that stupendous weekend that we have spent at your home. Thank you so much for putting me up.

Unfortunately, I have left my coat at your home and didn't realize about it while leaving from your home. Do you remember the black one that I wore when we went to Multi cuisine restaurant for the lunch on Saturday? It's a memorable gift that was presented to me by my wife at wedding anniversary day. It's black in color with white buttons.

I have kept my wallet in which valuable credit cards and driving license exist. So, it's important for me to get back the coat as soon as possible. I have friend who is passing through your town on office work. He can come and collect the coat from your office location as it is nearest location for his office. Could he please collect it from there. I have given your phone number to him and please be reachable on Thursday morning to collect the coat.

Anyways, Thanks again for a wonderful weekend and look forward to see you soon.

Regards,
Jaya Krishna
jaikrishna   
Feb 17, 2017
Writing Feedback / Our life is very different from this life that our parents and grandparents used to live [4]

our life is very different from this life that our parents ...

Hi Van, You should not repeat the complete question in your answer. Also, for every 2 lines a new paraphrase was written and leading to cohesion problems.

Also, for every essay make sure you have effective introduction, main content and conclusion and prompt should be appropriate to the question. Please go through the existing essays and learn from it.

Good Luck.
jaikrishna   
Feb 17, 2017
Writing Feedback / Evolution on people's quality of life through the making of foods [4]

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?
Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.


doing appetizing meals quickly



Evolution of humans ideology has improved the standards of living and food habits. Preparation of delicious cuisine has become an easy process to humans due to their enduring consequent efforts. Eventually, communities of every country have adopted to the food habits based on the available sources and enhance the ways to cook food briskly.

Recently, humans have invented enumerated tools like Gas, and Electric stoves, Microwave ovens, toasters and so forth. These are helpful to prepare delicious items in quick time. In addition, plenty of spices, ingredients are readily available over the market to use in the favourite dishes which adds the taste to it. On the other side, although you are not a chef, you have a plenty of guidance given via online videos through which you can easily learn food preparation. Alongside that, inherited food lessons learned from our elders and ancestors at home is the primary reason through which continued, easier and enhanced food habits attained.

Every country has adopted to their food habits based on their available sources. Our ancestors have done enough research on food habits to have delicious, rich in nutrients and proteins. Humans are always fascinated and curious to try divergent feasibility to attain better quality food which has resulted to the effective lifestyle to humans.

In conclusion, Human instincts and ideology has improved the standards of living and has become easier for the next generations to prepare food in easier ways.
jaikrishna   
Feb 20, 2017
Letters / You took your family to a nearby restaurant. Disappointed with the meal and complain to manager [8]

You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager.
Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter:
ť explain why you were at the restaurant
ť describe the problems
ť write about the action you want the manager to take


pointing out issues in a restaurant



Dear Manager,

My name is Jaya krishna. I often visit to your restaurant at Banaswadi location. This email is to complain you about the food that was served to my family on 20th Feb 2017.

We often come to the restaurant because of the service provided, the quality of food served and the reputation which you have all over the City. Thus on the occasion of my wedding anniversary, I and my wife visited to your restaurant to have a delicious food. We wanted to make the day to a memorable one and ordered our favourite dishes. Unfortunately, the food served didn't meet upto our expectations and disappointed with the meal completely. Rice was half boiled and Chicken gravy was not cooked properly. I believe it was happened due to multiple orders and chef was in hurry to finish it off quickly. Although we have complained to the server, no action was taken and he responded with improper answers.

I would like you take an action against the server as well as the chef to ensure the food quality should not be changed under any circumstances. Also, the effective measures has to be taken from you to keep monitoring on the customer needs and resolve the issue by replacing the food briskly incase of any complaints. I would be thankful if the issue is addressed seriously and resolved on my next visit to your restaurant.

I look forward to hearing an update from you.

Regards,
Jaya Krishna
jaikrishna   
Feb 22, 2017
Writing Feedback / Minimizing the traffic issue - proposed ways [7]

same

As mentioned, your introduction paraphrase should give your opinion for agree or disagree questionnaire.
2 or 3 rd paraphrases should support the opinion with your examples.
jaikrishna   
Feb 22, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS - the grievance note about the noise from your flat [3]

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house flat.

Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter explain the reasons for the noise apologise.
Describe what action you will take.


grumbling about loud sounds in my flat



Dear Smith,

Hope you are doing well. This email is in response to your complaint about the noise from my flat and to seek an apology for the inconvenience caused for the last one week.

As you might be aware that recently my wife delivered a baby boy and discharged from the hospital last week. On this auspicious occasion, many of my relatives and dearest friends visited the house to congratulate my family. Thus there were instances where the noise was created by their children and I didn't realise that it reached till your home and disturbed to a greater extent. The situation was restrained from yesterday as most of them had left to their home already.

I sincerely apologize for the inconvenience caused for the last one week and would convey the message to the other visitors to ensure the incident is not repeated.

I hope you would understand the situation and forgive me.

Regards,
Jaya Krishna
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳