Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: The Men and Women Attending Various Evening Courses at an adult education centre [2]

The bar chart shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adults education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Overall, it can be seen that women comprised the majority of the numbers of people who attending the courses and the ages of participants was highest for participants in 50 or over.

The bar chart indicates that drama and language class the proportion of female students was twice the number of male pupils, 20 women against 10 men in the former, while 40 women in comparison with only 20 men in the latter. The number of women participants was also higher than the number of men joining the painting class, with figures at 30 for women and 25 for men. In contrast, the trend was reversed in people enrolling for sculpture course, the figure for men doubled than for women, respectively at 10 and 5.

Turning to the pie chart the majority of people who took part in these courses was aged 50 or over. While the people who under 20 was the lowest proportion at 5%. The percentage of people who aged 40-49 was nearly double as high as those who was 20-29, respectively at 26% and 11%.

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Writing Feedback / Downloadable and printable clothing may be coming to our closets soon. [2]

TED Summary: Forget Shopping. Soon You'll Download Your New Clothes.

Downloadable, printable clothing may be coming a closet near us. It start when designer Daniel Peleg's fashion school project turned into a collection of 3D printed clothes designs that have the strength and flexibility for everyday wear. She designed clothes on her computer and loaded the file on the printer. Then it just printed the pieces overnight.

With 3D printing, the designers had freedom to make the dresses look exactly like they wanted, but still hard because of big and expensive industrial printers that were located in their studio.

The main challenge for this 3D printings is the material that you feed the printer for printing clothes. The material is hard and breakable.
Music was a very physical but nowadays it's become a digital thing which people just can download it. Fashion also a very physical thing, so the designers hope that clothes will be digital too. So there's no need many tool and machine for the designers to make the clothes like they wanted.

Writing Feedback / Article Summary: One of two lions that escaped from an enclosure in Leipzig zoo in Germany [3]

There are male lions, Majo and Motshegetsi, in Leipzig zoo in Germany damaging the fence and jump out of the cage before the zoo opened. Although one of the lions was back to the cage, another lion that is outside the enclosure should be shot in this case because of the personal safety had to take priority. They succeeded in returning one of the lions three hours later with the aid of a fence, but the other lion became agitated as they tried to calm it. Local media said Majo had survived, but Motshegetsi had been killed. The director said that the enclosure had been at the zoo for 15 years. They never had a problem before, but now they will review their security at that zoo. Crowds built up at the entrance to the zoo, but it was closed on Thursday because of the lions' escape. The last time lions escaped from their enclosure in Leipzig zoo was in 1913, prompting a widespread hunt that ended with all six lions being killed.

Writing Feedback / Ted Summary: The Single Biggest Reason Why Startups Succeed [2]

There are some findings by Bill Gross about what makes companies succeed the most, what factors actually matter the most for startup success. There are 5 essential elements that lead to success such as Idea, Team, Business Model, Funding, and Timing. He did a survey of 100 idelab companies and 100 non-idealab companies to look what factors actually accounted the most for success and failure across all of these companies. The result is the number one thing was Timing. Timing was accounted for 42% of the difference between success and failure. Team came in second, the Idea actually came in third and the last two are Business Model and Funding. For example, one of the 100 non-idelab companies; Uber; came out with an incredible idea, business model, and great execution likewise the timing was so perfect for their need to get drivers into the system whose looking for extra money. The conclusion from this findings are for all startups that want to success have to do the best way to really assess Timing to really look at whether consumers are really ready for the companies have to offer them.

Writing Feedback / People have different views regarding the best age to learn new languages [2]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

People have different views regarding the best age to learn new languages. There are many people believe that students at primary schools should start learning other languanges and should not wait till secondary school. However, this view may bring some advantages along with some disadvantages. This essay will further discuss if include foreign language study to the primary stages is beneficial and if disadvantages may occur in the later stages.

On the one hand, picking up a foreign language enables children to develop a better foundation in a foreign language. They are more likely to speak it more confidently in front of the crowds. It is evident that children who learn a new language tend to make fewer mistakes in writing an essay. To mention that, they will have the ability to express things more clearly as they have a better vocabulary than those who start late. In addition, they may come across with foreign cultures when learning a foreign language. By knowing the culture of others, they may not facing the cultural shock and able to adapt well when staying in other countries for the purpose like studying. Obviously, they are become more knowledgeable and more open-minded which help them to look at a specific issue from different perspectives.

On the other hand, graders studying only three or four years in the school even at that moment do not properly concentrate on the lessons. It could be difficult to push children to learn something else besides their curriculum subjects. For instance, my little brother always wants to play, even if there are loose ends. In addition, students of a primary school firstly should learn the fundamentals of exact science such as Mathematics and Physics. Otherwise, they might not understand them later. Furthermore, if a student does not know his native language perfectly, it is useless to learn a foreign dialect for him.

In conclusion, I believe that teaching a foreign language would be more appropriate at primary level as its advantages clearly outweigh its disadvantages.