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Posts by utsi
Name: Utsav Bhetwal
Joined: Nov 22, 2016
Last Post: Oct 16, 2017
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From: Nepal
School: pulchowk

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utsi   
Jul 20, 2017
Writing Feedback / Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern life is easier than life in the past. [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Modern life is easier than life in the past.
Use specific details and examples to support your answer.


nowadays people live an easier life



Contemporary lifestyle is more advanced than the lifestyle of the people in the past, and I strongly agree that the existing people are having relaxed and comfortable lifestyle than their ancestors had in the past. Mainly, due to the availability of many different kinds of infrastructures, the life of the people are being easier. I will explicate the different reasons to bolster my arguments in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, a plethora of facilities have already been introduced up to this 21st century and also are going to be discovered in this world. The facility like transportation helps people to migrate from one place to another very easily that could take many hours in the past. For example, I commute to work - takes more than two hours on foot - on a motorcycle that takes only 30 minutes that makes my life easier so that I don't need to walk a lot and even I can save some time with my family or I can entertain myself. The education, a basic need, is provided for almost all the citizens of all the countries in the world. The greater change in the health sector, availability of hospitals and doctors have helped the indigent people to access and cure all kinds of health related issues in no time.

Secondly, with the advent of the technologies, the life of the people have become easier than the people living in the past. The people, nowadays, in many sectors use different kinds of machinery types of equipment that can easily work faster than by the manual efforts. For instance, the robots which don't get tired can be engaged in the incessant production of the goods. Not only that we can order it to do any kind of tasks just by sitting in one corner of the room without physically involving yourself in that particular job. The electronic devices like laptops, desktops have helped people to create many kinds of job opportunities.

Thirdly, another important factor is the development of the communication sector which has made the world a global village. One can easily talk to their distant friends or relatives with a phone call or a video call in a cheap call rate. One can know each and every thing about the world. People can watch live games and get entertained due to the video conferencing which was not possible before a century.

To sum up, the invention of vehicles, the advancements in the electrical and electronics equipments, and greater change in the telecommunication sectors have assisted people to live a easier life than the people lived in the past who did not have any chance to consume such kinds of facilities.
utsi   
Jul 20, 2017
Writing Feedback / Practice IELTS Writing Task 2 - Advantages or Disadvantages of Information Technology Development [4]

@tsonga
Like Holt said, though your ability and the fluency in writing is good, it seems that you completely misunderstood the prompt given in the question. Your writings have digressions and can not gain a high mark as you expected. First of all be clear about the prompt, have some brainstorming about the topic and then only start your answer.
utsi   
Jul 20, 2017
Writing Feedback / Burgeoning economic growth effect. Problem and solution essay. [3]

@Sirojiddin
Your introductory paragraph is good enough to secure a good score in your examination.
Except for some problems in the sentence structure like crime rate is increased with high, others are convincing.
utsi   
Jun 2, 2017
Writing Feedback / Immigration has a major impact on the society. Main reasons of immigration and its consequences. [2]

Immigration has a major impact on the society.
What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?
Write at least 250 words.


People are migrating across the world



From the development of civilization, human beings --the supreme sociable creatures on the Earth-- are the most migratory species on the Earth. The causes and the effects of such migration is going to be discussed in the following paragraphs.

By nature, human beings don't want to remain in a single place. They want to explore for different novel kinds of things and in the process they move from one place to another. In addition, many people from the underdeveloped countries try to migrate to other developed nations because of abundance of facilities like job, education, peace and security. For instance, many people from Bhutan have been immigrated to USA as refugee and many Afghani are immigrated to neighbourhood countries because they are insecure in their own country. Similarly, the other factors like employment factors, health, transportation, electricity, communication, climatic conditions and so on are other factors that urge people to move from one country to another.

The immigration has both the positive and negative impact in the country where immigrants are going to be settled. However, there are always adverse effects in that country where the immigrants leave out. We can see the trend that mostly the adults have tendency to immigrate and this results in the decrement of the manpower in the country where they leave. This causes a huge scarcity of manpower in the society and country as a whole, if greater number of people flow out. On one hand, the immigrants can be a effective manpower to those countries where people thought to migrate. But on the other hand, immigrants can destroy the harmony of that society by bringing different kinds of riots like it may be cultural, linguistic, colour discrimination and so on.

To sum, immigration sometimes can be harmful to the country where immigrants are settling and always disastrous to the country where they leave.
utsi   
Jan 27, 2017
Writing Feedback / Minimum age limit for driving - Discussion [6]

@ahamad17
I think you are discussing about both sides of the argument and give your opinion at last. In that case your essay is good enough to get 6.5.
utsi   
Jan 21, 2017
Graduate / Statement of purpose for MS in electrical engineering in USA, the field of VLSI designing technology [2]

dreams of working as a researcher



Working as a website designer in recently introduced Habre Technology inaugurated by our team members, I would like to return to my academic career and continue my graduate study in electrical engineering especially in VLSI design in Wright State University.

My interest arose in hardware and software field since I was in class 8. We had to study a computer science book from class 6. Till the beginning of class 7, I didn't have proper concept about the computer system. Then slowly, I started grabbing the concept about computer system. I was surprised by the dramatic change in the shape and size of the computer due to the introduction of transistors and then integrated circuits. Similarly, the reduction of power consumption and the increase in the speed of the computer due to the introduction of VLSI technology fascinated me a lot. Then I pursue the electronics and communication engineering as a base point to reach my destination. As designing and fabricating the robust electronic devices is an enduring process, I showed my great interest in the area of VLSI design.

Since my childhood I was a haughty person. As years rolled by, my passion in science to undertake physics as my major from the reputed intermediate institution, St. Xavier's College in Nepal, came into reality when I was selected among 6000 competitors through entrance examination . After the fruitful completion of the high school, I knew I had to get into Engineering institution in my graduate studies and, possibly, in the best Engineering institution in the country. But getting into a prestigious institution is itself a challenge for me, and through 2-3 months of persistent preparation, I stood in 365th rank among some 14000 students in the highly competitive entrance examination and got admitted in Pulchowk Campus, a reputed Engineering campus in Nepal. This excellent endeavour brought me a partial funded government scholarship to study Engineering on the merit basis.

I chose Electronics and Communication as my major in Engineering. Among some 4-5 dozens subjects I studied, Digital Logic, Discrete mathematics, Embedded systems, Microprocessor and filter design were the most intriguing subjects to me. The well-equipped laboratories at Pulchowk Campus also provided me with deep insights at the principles of how electronic devices do at a fundamental level. I enjoyed in solving and teaching Boolean expressions using K-maps, designing the sequential as well as combinational logic circuits. All these subjects augmented my curiosity regarding the niche of VLSI design.

From the invention of the Bipolar Transistor by Shockley in 1949 to the latest 10nm Fab sites at Intel, the U.S.A has always been a epicentre for innovation in semiconductor and ASIC technology as the U.S.A is being a pioneer in research and development. For a student like me wanting to pursue a graduate degree in Engineering, there would hardly be a better option than an American university. The department of Electrical Engineering at WSU has a reputation of having good research facilities for Electrical Engineering student to specialize in the field of VLSI design.

I am confident that WSU is the right school for me and it is all my dreams of working as a researcher in the field of VLSI designing technology and implementation of my findings in the innovation of fast, cheap and reliable electronic devices is my professional goal which will come to fruition. I aspire to be a part of this institution and make some difference. I am equally confident with my hard work and my aspirations to be able to succeed in my graduate studies.
utsi   
Nov 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / We live today in an electronic information age. It is easier to be connected by technology [3]

we live today in an electronic information age. It is easier to be connected by technology yet many people seem no closer to feeling happy in their lives.

Discuss

With the tremendous development of the technologies, it seems as if people are having the quality life and they appears to be happy in their life as they are teemed with the technologies. However, the reality is different. The excessive use of such technology has hampered the life of people, and people are being despondent in this new era of development.

The advent of internet has created the excessive abuse of the resources. People are more focused in sitting in the computer rather than performing their work. It has not only created lethargy in people but also many mental disorder among the people. Prolonged sitting in front of the computer renders eye problem and also creates many more anxiety in the people.

Similarly, use of such technology makes people introvert so that they are only obsessive to the computer. The socialization of human beings is easily hampered with such technology. One can not be fully socialized when he sits at the corner of a house. Person must speak to other in order to be more socialized, they have to talk face to face, share their feelings at the time of meeting which makes some meaning. To illustrate this, let me take my own experience. I was totally infatuated with a girl, and I used facebook to purpose her, but she did not give any response. I planned to tell the same thing during our visit, she gave me the positive answer. What I want to show that head to head conversation is more reliable than the far distance communication.

The another more obvious reason is that the privacy of the person gets disclosed, which may creates different problems. The criminal activities can be easily pervasive in such case. The position, lifestyle, and any other everyday work can be known through such technology. This technology also brings stranger closer, and finally that vary stranger might hamper you by disclosing your private lifestyle.

In sum, though the technology has brought the people to feel closer, yet there are many more risk that the vary technology can seriously damage your good living life.
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