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Name: Mai Thi Ly
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maily257   
May 8, 2017
Writing Feedback / Punishment on educating children [3]

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


learning kids by force



Teaching children is one of the hardest tasks that parents have to do. Beside a lot of effective methods, punishment is considered as an effective way to guide children learn right from wrong. However, in my opinion, punishment is a bad form of educating children because of some main reasons.

To begin with, parents cannot gain the desired results by using punishment as an educating method. It is easily seen that criticizing or yelling only can make children on fear and tend to oppose their parents. A survey conducted in 2015 in Vietnam showed that children who are punished, often commit more mistakes. Instead of admitting their own mistakes, they are willing to hide their faults, shift the blame on someone and worse, tell a lie to avoid being punished by parents.Obviously, in these cases, children cannot become a well- behaved and respectful individuals just by parent's punishment.

Another reason should be mentioned is that punishment is likely to erode the parent- chid relationship. For example, after being scolded, children are full of frightened and disappointed. Moreover, they also feel disconnected and hate their parents. Consequence, the child will defend and not want to share anything with others who always criticize and punish him or her. Thus, the further distance the child has with parents, the more difficultly they educate him.

The last reason is punishment clearly has a huge long-term negative effects on the child's behaviour. Parents who always come down on their child, set a bad example for the child to copy and imitate. As a results, the child might behave like their parents such as losing control, easily being angry and aggressive whenever he does not satisfied with others. Ultimately, he will be leaded to violence when he is teenager and adult.

In conclusion, punishment is the worst method of educating children and parents should not use or abuse punishment to help children develop. By doing this, they will give the correct direct in raising process and gain the expectations of their own children.
maily257   
May 8, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - SPORT ON TELEVISION [2]

some mistakes ^ ^
impact on st
some of them have
sport events
favourite teams playing
so they think watching sport...
instead of spending ....
maily257   
May 2, 2017
Writing Feedback / How to be a good mother or father - you can learn it! [4]

My comment:
- parents are the first school for every children in the world -----> clearly, parents cannot be considered as a school. maybe you should replace by the phrase "the first teachers"

- you should use the correct form of noun, tense. for example, "film" -->"films" . became ---> become in line 12, believe ---> believed in line 13,ect.

- your idea is not clear
maily257   
May 2, 2017
Writing Feedback / The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. [2]

looking for a long term solution



The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is the fact that in recent years, the world's environmental problems have drawn attention of every nation and the solution of these problems are given the first priority. It has been suggested that the best way to solve the worldwide environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. However, in my opinion, this solution is not effective enough to drive back these problems.

To begin with, we must have an all-round view about environmental problems that include pollution, global warming, overpopulation, deforestation and a lot of other problems. Thus, if the price of fuel is more expensive, it is only effective in the field of air pollution and global warming. It means that other environmental problems are not still solved. Obviously, for these problems, we need to find out a more effective solution.

Secondly, increasing the cost of fuel places the emphasis on governments, not individual responsibility. It is easily seen that each of individual is definitely part of the problem. The way we live, the activities we do drive ourselves to the edge of environmental crisis. Ultimately, the most effective solution is to educate people of all ages. As a consequence, the better education about this problem people have, the higher their awareness of protecting our planet is.

In conclusion, the increase the level of taxation on fuel is one of the short- term solutions to address environmental problems. If we have a desire to save the earth as well as our own lives, education is likely to take it come true.
maily257   
Apr 29, 2017
Writing Feedback / Causes why young people have not much time for their needs and are under lots of pressure to study [3]

Youngsters spend most of their time studying



It is undoubted that young people now have tendency to have little time and be under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. There can be some vital causes of this alarming issue, which are education system. parent's expectation and future jobs as well.

To begin with, the education systems in some countries are the main contributors to this problem. As we can easily see, students are judged their knowledge throughout a huge number of exams. It means that they have to study hard to pass exams with flying colours. Besides that, they also study many subjects varying from Math to Music. Clearly, the studying of these subjects accounts students a lot of time.

Another cause is the parent's expectation. From parent's viewpoint, the harder children study, the more successful they are in both studying and their own lives. Thus, parents often put extra pressure on their child to fulfill their own expectation. For example, many parents are willing to force their child to register a lot of courses and not allow them to take part in any activities. Unluckily, the overexpectation just brings back more unexpected results than positive ones.

The last cause to mention is the future jobs. Many people believe that having a good degree is the ticket to give a well-paid job, especially in today competitive environment. As a consequence, they put extra effort and spend most of their time studying.

In conclusion, the young must have an all-round view about this problem. It is advised that both the young and society should alter their mind to elimate this negative problem as soon as possible.