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Nov 6, 2018
Scholarship / Mid-level management position - CHEVENING LEADERSHIP [4]
Hi @Paterne225
Firstly, I think you should keep the essay in paragraph format. meaning that you can rearrange the bullet point and made it into paragraph.
Secondly, I am unsure about the top paragraph where you mentioned your struggle on your introvert personality. Try to focus more on your leadership or organizational experience. I am sure that the jury will be more interested on the detail of your professional leadership skills. Try to explain more about your experience in detailsm such as your struggle you were faced and how you solved the problem. If you think that how you overcome your introvert skills is still worth mentioned, you can summarize it so that your experience in professional career is the focus.
Good luck!
Hi @Paterne225
Firstly, I think you should keep the essay in paragraph format. meaning that you can rearrange the bullet point and made it into paragraph.
Secondly, I am unsure about the top paragraph where you mentioned your struggle on your introvert personality. Try to focus more on your leadership or organizational experience. I am sure that the jury will be more interested on the detail of your professional leadership skills. Try to explain more about your experience in detailsm such as your struggle you were faced and how you solved the problem. If you think that how you overcome your introvert skills is still worth mentioned, you can summarize it so that your experience in professional career is the focus.
Good luck!