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Name: Hardy
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Hardy_tom   
May 26, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1: Lifespan of salmon [4]

I think you should illustrate both stages individually. You should've explained lifecycle differently and salmon size differently and please focus on your punctuation. Thanks
Hardy_tom   
May 25, 2020
Writing Feedback / The bar chart delineates the number of imprisonments in five different countries [2]

The table below show the figures for imprisonments in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.



The bar chart delineates the number of imprisonments in five different countries from 1930 to 1980.
A glance at the graph reveals that during the fifty years the highest figures were held by the United States and Canada, with the United states dominating all the years, except for 1930.

Particularly, the number of prisoners in the United States started from 100,000 in 1930 and after several fluctuations reached at 140,000 in 1980, the highest figure in all years and in all countries. On the other hand, Canada witnessed 20,000 more imprisonments than the USA had in 1930 but followed a downward trend and stood at approximately 90,000. Simultaneously, New Zealand began from the same level of imprisonments as the United States, although in 1940, dropped dramatically to only 58,000 prisoners and the next forty years saw an upward trend reaching at just above 90,000. Similarly, Australia followed the same pattern as New Zealand but in 1930 the prisoners were at about 70,000 and by the end of the fifty-year period, with some fluctuations in the meantime, it increased to just under 80,000. Interestingly, Great Britain had the lowest figures of imprisonments, although it saw a steady rise.




Hardy_tom   
May 25, 2020
Writing Feedback / What's better for students; to attending online classes or studying at traditional schools? [3]

Online or traditional learning?



In the future, students may have the choice of studying at the home by useful technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice?

Whether it would be better for students to attend online classes from their homes or whether they should continue going to traditional schools, given that they have the choice to pick, it is a debatable issue that has sparked a great deal of controversy. Nobody can deny that computer technology has offered a range of advantages in education. However, I am an avid adherent of traditional education for the following reasons.

To begin with, going to school provides a wide range of benefits to a student. First and foremost, school has always been described as the micrography of society. School is the first means of socialization, as a child has to face a new environment that might trigger difficulties and of course, it might contribute to the pupil's maturity. For instance, students have to meet other peers every day. They have to find ways in order to establish friendly relationships and get along with people that they might not like. Therefore, through this process, children develop their temperament and this is a process that cannot be accomplished with the convenience of home and in front of a screen.

Furthermore, it seems to me that the process of learning is more efficient through attending traditional schools than watching online lectures. It is commonly accepted that the role of the teacher is vital for the transmission of knowledge. To be precise, it has been proven that the learning process is mostly an emotional procedure. As a result, the connection between the students and the teacher affects the educational outcomes significantly. This is another critical factor that cannot be provided by online schooling.

To sum up, although online learning may offer conveniences that seem attractive, I firmly believe that the future impact of that will be detrimental to students' formation.
Hardy_tom   
May 25, 2020
Writing Feedback / Diverse type of families living in poverty in Australia - Cambridge 4 Test 1 Writing Task 1 [3]

Shouldn't use more than 160 words because in The exam you get only 20 minutes to write the task 1 . Try to attempt this task in less words. Little bit grammatical errors otherwise the whole task is good. Moreover, don't forget to upload picture with task. It would be difficult for examiner to check the task . Thanks all the best for future endeavours.
Hardy_tom   
May 25, 2020
Writing Feedback / After birth what will play a major role in one's personality and development. Nature or Nurture? [2]

What's important in the growth of a person?



After birth what will play a major role in one's personality and development. Nature or Nurture? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a controversial debate as to whether nature or nurture plays a vital role in the personality and development of an individual. I think that nurture is really important factor in judging the human perspective. I will elaborate in upcoming paragraphs to support my view point.

Nourishment is an integral part in life of human beings. Even if the nature of a person is not good then it can become better by nurturing the goods habits in them. For example: if a plant is becoming wither then we can give back shinning life to plants by nourishing it with pesticides and water then it starts blossom again so is the same case with people. Moreover, it is generally seen that if a child has been adopted by other family and later on if anybody compares that child with the sibling then we hardly find any similarity between them due to the difference in upbringing of a child. Thus, it is the nurture which is important in development.

Furthermore, various researches have evidenced that children emulate the footprints of their parents, whatever they will see in their family they will always follow the same way. Therefore, it is significant to act sagaciously in front of the kids otherwise it will ruin their life. Parenting is quite crucial if they will inculcate the good habits in their child then nature of the kids would definitely will become fantabulous on its own.

All in all, I believe that nurturing is important in the growth of a person but indeed a difficult step to implement and parents need to act cautiously while developing their child.
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