Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2: ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF TAKING A GAP YEAR [2]

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

There has been a considerable increase in the number of graduated students choosing to take a gap year. In my opinion, this matter has both pros and cons and my essay will throughly illustrate the points.

To begin with, taking a gap year can unexpectedly have positive impacts on students' skills and experience. Many teenagers do not truly understand their ownselves and have no clue of what they have interest in or what they want to do. Therefore, having some time off before attending higher education systems can encourage students to have a deeper insight into their dreams and hobbies so that they can be well-prepared for their futures. Secondly, this year off will be such precious time for teenagers to explore the world and gain more experience by themselves. For example, working as a part-time employee, learn a new skill or travel to a few new nations will broaden students' knowledge and create more new aspects of life. Indeed, going for a gap year is beneficial for students in many ways.

On the contrary, the period of a year off could counteract if it is not spent wisely. In other words, a huge number of students lost their motivation in working and studying after a few months from graduation. If they can not pull themselves together during this gap year, students will not gain any benefits from this time. More seriously, they can waste all those time in losing track of their original plans and goals.

In conclusion, taking a gap year has both advantages and disadvantages so that students should consider throughly whether they should opt for this decision or not.

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1: how bottled and canned gas drink are produced [3]

THE DIAGRAM OF BOTTLED AND CANNED CARBONATE DRINK

A glance at the given diagrams shows how bottled and canned gas drink are produced. Overall, it is patently obvious that there are six stages in this process, starting with filtering the water and ending with the distribution of carbonated drinks to the supermarket.

At the first step of the process, after the water is collected, it will go through a filter to eliminate germs or unhealthy things. The next step begins when the water goes through the heating and cooling pipe, the temperature of the water will be adjusted to a suitable level. After that, the water is carbonated in the third step and for the fourth step, the sterilized water is combined with the syrup mixture. Besides, color is also added in this stage. Then, the drinks are packed in either cans or bottles. In the final stage, the completed products are transported to supermarkets and are ready to be consumed.

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Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1/ THE MAPS BELOW SHOW THE VILLAGE OF STOKEFORD IN 1930 AND IN 2010 [3]

The given two maps show how the village of Stokeford changed during a period from 1930 to 2020. Overall, the village experienced a reduction in the size of farmland area as well as a significant increase in the number of new houses after almost a century.

In 1930, the village consisted mostly of farmland with a shop, a primary school, a post office and a few houses. Moreover, there was a large house built on the gardens located to the east of Stokeford.

By 2010, the village changed considerably by the total disappearance of farmland and a soaring number of new houses built along the main road. The main road running through the town was expanded into many routes and the primary school was also enlarged. The size of the gardens was narrowed and the former large house was turned into a retirement home. The only things that remained the same were the post office and the bridge crossing the River Stoke.

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Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1/ THE AMOUNT OF ELECTRICITY PRODUCED BY DIFFERENT ENERGY SOURCES TO SUPPLY NY CITY [3]

energy from coal, natural gas and petroleum

The given line chart illustrates the total quantity of electricity came from various types of energy sources, which was used to serve the needs of New York City during a twenty-year time from 1980 to 2000. It can be seen that while both the amount of eletricity produced by petroleum and natural gas experienced an upward trend, that generated by coal decreased slightly. More notably, the highest figure in the graph was more than 700 millions of kilowatt hours of electricity made by petroleum and the quantity of power developed by natural gas went through the most significant change.

From the starting point of the timeline, the amount of electricity formed by petroleum was approximately 350 millions hours, which was the largest figure. In another hand, that figure of coal was about 200 millions hours and the lowest figure went to natural gas of 100 millions hours.

After 20 years, the quantity of power developed by natural gas rocketed to more than 500 millions of hours, grew by 400 millions hours. The total hours of electricity profuced by petroleum also experienced a considerable rise to 700 millions, despite an dip from 600 millions to less than 400 millions in 1990. However, the hours of power generated by coal declined slightly to nearly 200 millions hours, after increased moderately to 300 millions hours in 1985.

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