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Name: huyen
Joined: Nov 18, 2020
Last Post: May 28, 2021
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From: Viet Nam
School: CSP

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huen   
May 28, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1 - two charts demonstrating a research about adult education [3]

''There are two charts demonstrating'' should be ''demonstrate'', cause it always demonstrates, not only at the moment
You have some mistakes with ''the'', like ''the studying''=> ''studying''
'' wanted to achieved'' => achieve
It can be seen that you have difficulty with grammar, then you should practice more about it and try again
huen   
May 28, 2021
Writing Feedback / Writing task 1: household car ownership in Braitain from 1971 to 2007 [4]

you should be more careful to not have some critical mistake like ''illustrious''
''The number of families owned one car and two or more cars were prefer '' if you mean this is subject, then it should be ''owning'', but in this case this sentence was wrong. I think the way you analyse the graph quite good, but you have a problem with your grammar.
huen   
May 26, 2021
Writing Feedback / Writing task 1, line graph, 4 catalogues, change over time [2]

cinema attendance statistics



The chart describes how many people of different ages watched movies in the cinema once a month in Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.

Overall, there was an increase in the proportion of people going to the cinema, with the most significant rise was seen in the figure for teenagers and was the highest number throughout the period.

The percentage of adolescences was about 18% in 1984, after which it sharply increased to around 55% in 1999 and kept growing gradually to reach a peak at just under 60% in 2000. The figure for people 35 and over years old witnessed a similar change, which rose gradually before ending the period at roughly 15%.

Approximately 10% of kids watching in the cinema in 1984, with a subsequent increase to nearly 40% in 1999, but later dropped to 32% in the next year. Similarly, the figure for those who were 25-35 age saw a rapid growth in the first decade, followed by a leveling off in the next five years and a final rise to 32%.




huen   
May 26, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 and 2. Task 2: Studying chosen occupations in high school [3]

''get bad marks in their record'' I think ''in'' should be ''on''
''... because they are rusty on their knowledge in high school.' in this sentence I think it is ''in their knowledge''

But it's just a small mistake, also, I think you should change the structure you used to explain in body two
huen   
May 26, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1: DRIVING TEST PASS RATES [3]

task 1 does not require ''A driving license is one of the most important identifications ...'', instead you should paraphrase the introduction
huen   
Dec 9, 2020
Writing Feedback / Is it true that even not talented child can be taught to become a good sport athlete or musician? [3]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like sport or music but others are not.


However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both the views and give your own opinion. give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Nowadays,there are many views considering that some people are born with certain talents.
On the other hand, it is supposed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. I think these views reflect the fact in our life.

To begin with the first view, it is true that many people were born with their own talent that we might not have. It comes with the fact, since a person is an individual personality, it is not weird if there are some special ones and some are not.In particular, Beethoven was an extremely talented musician when he was 13 while there were many musicians who had to try day in and day out to get success. Even if we have the same appearance as twin brothers , It is not mean that we have the same in common. For example, In a family sister might have a completely different personality from her brother.

On the other hand, kids can be taught or practice to enhance their ability to be good at something that they are interested in. If people are trained and have their motivation and inspiration, they could significantly improve their skills.Besides, it is not true about some people who do not have talent, I truly believe that everyone of us possess a potential talent that we did not find out. As we can not appreciate a fish by how far it can run. For example, Leonardo DaVinci is a genius artist whereas Mozart is good at music.

In conclusion, there are many people think that someone might have talents and some might not. In my opinion, these views have its lack because I suppose that everyone has their own hidden talents and they are good at other aspects.

Pls help me with my essay, my english is not good. Btw hope you can give me my score in you viewpoint.
huen   
Dec 9, 2020
Grammar, Usage / Simple Sentences_written by Patrick Alexander [4]

If you want some advices you need to give more information that you need. Such as your sentences was quite simple and you should use more complex grammar to expand your sentence. It's my opinion. Sorry if my english is not really good
huen   
Nov 18, 2020
Undergraduate / Freedom - the right to choose. What is most important to you and why? [4]

I think your essay is quite good with interested thesis. But you should demonstrate you example such as freedom is relative to wealth or status. You did not answer the question ''Why do freedom relative to wealth or status?'' . Anyway, you build an impressive overview and good ideas.
huen   
Nov 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / The figure of male and females who have studied full time or part time education in three periods [3]

provide the summary for the graphs



The figure of male and females who have studied full time or part time education in three periods is indicated.

Overall, most male and female prefer studying full time to studying part time. At the beginning, the number of men who studied part time reached a lowest point in 1970 and 1971.

In 1970 and 1971, about less than 200 thousands male studied part time while there were about 1000 thousands who studied full time. After that, the figure of people studying full time witnessed a slight dip by about 200 thousands to 800 thousands and oscillated between 800 and 900 thousands.

On the other hand, about 700 thousands female studied full time in 1970 and 1971 leap slightly to 800 and reach a peak at 1100 thousands. When the amount of female who studied part time education increased minimally from about 50 to nearly 200 and fluctuated between 200 and 220 in 1990 and 1991. It seem that the amount of female was less than male's at the beginning but higher in final