Writing Feedback / Writing task 1, line graph, 4 catalogues, change over time [2]

cinema attendance statistics

The chart describes how many people of different ages watched movies in the cinema once a month in Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.

Overall, there was an increase in the proportion of people going to the cinema, with the most significant rise was seen in the figure for teenagers and was the highest number throughout the period.

The percentage of adolescences was about 18% in 1984, after which it sharply increased to around 55% in 1999 and kept growing gradually to reach a peak at just under 60% in 2000. The figure for people 35 and over years old witnessed a similar change, which rose gradually before ending the period at roughly 15%.

Approximately 10% of kids watching in the cinema in 1984, with a subsequent increase to nearly 40% in 1999, but later dropped to 32% in the next year. Similarly, the figure for those who were 25-35 age saw a rapid growth in the first decade, followed by a leveling off in the next five years and a final rise to 32%.

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Writing Feedback / Is it true that even not talented child can be taught to become a good sport athlete or musician? [3]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents like sport or music but others are not.

However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both the views and give your own opinion. give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,there are many views considering that some people are born with certain talents.
On the other hand, it is supposed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. I think these views reflect the fact in our life.

To begin with the first view, it is true that many people were born with their own talent that we might not have. It comes with the fact, since a person is an individual personality, it is not weird if there are some special ones and some are not.In particular, Beethoven was an extremely talented musician when he was 13 while there were many musicians who had to try day in and day out to get success. Even if we have the same appearance as twin brothers , It is not mean that we have the same in common. For example, In a family sister might have a completely different personality from her brother.

On the other hand, kids can be taught or practice to enhance their ability to be good at something that they are interested in. If people are trained and have their motivation and inspiration, they could significantly improve their skills.Besides, it is not true about some people who do not have talent, I truly believe that everyone of us possess a potential talent that we did not find out. As we can not appreciate a fish by how far it can run. For example, Leonardo DaVinci is a genius artist whereas Mozart is good at music.

In conclusion, there are many people think that someone might have talents and some might not. In my opinion, these views have its lack because I suppose that everyone has their own hidden talents and they are good at other aspects.

Pls help me with my essay, my english is not good. Btw hope you can give me my score in you viewpoint.

Writing Feedback / The figure of male and females who have studied full time or part time education in three periods [3]

provide the summary for the graphs

The figure of male and females who have studied full time or part time education in three periods is indicated.

Overall, most male and female prefer studying full time to studying part time. At the beginning, the number of men who studied part time reached a lowest point in 1970 and 1971.

In 1970 and 1971, about less than 200 thousands male studied part time while there were about 1000 thousands who studied full time. After that, the figure of people studying full time witnessed a slight dip by about 200 thousands to 800 thousands and oscillated between 800 and 900 thousands.

On the other hand, about 700 thousands female studied full time in 1970 and 1971 leap slightly to 800 and reach a peak at 1100 thousands. When the amount of female who studied part time education increased minimally from about 50 to nearly 200 and fluctuated between 200 and 220 in 1990 and 1991. It seem that the amount of female was less than male's at the beginning but higher in final

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