FireTiger
Nov 26, 2009
Undergraduate / Moving from Chinatown to So Cal - prompt #1. [6]
I don't really remember much about the move because I was so young at the time. I want to focus on the shift, the shattering of one community as I knew it and then the beginning of another.
I guess I could do a narrative and then reflect, but that seems so typical.. is there any way I could make it more original?
By the way, I'm aiming for about 300-400 words. Maybe 400-500 if necessary.
So far I have:
"We're moving."
How could a naïve first grader understand the significance of these few words? Little did I know that my entire community as I knew it would change dramatically.
...
[By the way I hate this second sentence, it has the concept but it doesn't have at all the power that I envisioned it to have, can anyone help?] :/
or
A little girl is playing with her friends. She is pulled aside, and her mother tells her something that she is too young to fully understand. ...
I don't really remember much about the move because I was so young at the time. I want to focus on the shift, the shattering of one community as I knew it and then the beginning of another.
I guess I could do a narrative and then reflect, but that seems so typical.. is there any way I could make it more original?
By the way, I'm aiming for about 300-400 words. Maybe 400-500 if necessary.
So far I have:
"We're moving."
How could a naïve first grader understand the significance of these few words? Little did I know that my entire community as I knew it would change dramatically.
...
[By the way I hate this second sentence, it has the concept but it doesn't have at all the power that I envisioned it to have, can anyone help?] :/
or
A little girl is playing with her friends. She is pulled aside, and her mother tells her something that she is too young to fully understand. ...