Writing Feedback / divorce: Causes and effects on children [11]

"...Till death do us apart" This is not longer true. Nowadays the divorce rates are continually increasing all around the world. Statistics show that, In the United States, one out of every two marriages ends in divorce. This rate is so high due to several reasons that lead people to divorce and this result affects the children involved because they suffer the loss of a parent which may cause psychological and sociological problems.

Divorce is the consequence of many reasons, yet the most important are women's changing roles, infidelity, financial problems and immaturity. Women are becoming professional in modern times which can be good if you know to prioritize, but it can be a problem if you neglect your family. Infidelity is another reason. Spouses seek out comfort somewhere else if things are not working out in a marriage which results in infidelity and very few marriages recover from it. Financial problems can be another important reason. Statistics suggested that more than fifty percent of divorced couples cited money problems as the cause of their divorce. Finally, immaturity is also a cause of divorce. Most people have childish marriage expectations. They think that everything is going to be easy and that they will be always happy. So, if marriages become hard, it is easier for them to give up than to try their best

to solve their problems. All these issues are undoubtedly contributing to the rising divorce rate.

Divorce is causing many children to grow up in a single parent home. They have to suffer the lack of one of the role models they need; hence, they will receive less guidance an attention from their parents. Usually the adverse effects of growing up in a single parent home are felt in later childhood and adulthood.

Growing up in a single parent home may cause some psychological problems. Substantial research evidence shows that, on average, children who have experienced parental divorce score somewhat lower than children in first-marriage families on measures of emotional well being. That is, many children present maladaptive behavior, difficulties with peers, depression and low self-esteem following their parents' divorce.

Those psychological problems are usually the reason for some sociological problems
such as, juvenile delinquency, teen pregnancy, unmarried couples living together, etc. Adolescence is a very difficult time and it can be even worse when adding divorce. Teenagers have less control, allowing them plenty of time to possibly hangout with the "bad influences" of the world. Furthermore, children, especially girls, feel the need to seek out the love and comfort that is missing at home. In many cases, this results in premature sexual activity which leads to teen pregnancy. There are more unmarried people living together; they do not want to get married because they are afraid of repeating their parent's story or they just think that marriage is no important.

To sum up, there are many causes and effects of this alarming rising divorce rate which mostly affect children since they are forced to be raised in a single parenthood and as a consequence they are affected in both psychological and sociological aspects. Therefore, before getting married you must be realistic because a successful marriage takes a lot of work and commitment of both parties, and if you are married think it twice before you get divorced due to the long lasting negative effects that it can have on your children.

This is the cause and effect essay that I presented.My teacher told me that I should have written only about effects or causes. So I have to re do it again.Hoever, I decided to post this one because I want some comments and feedback!!! I hope to receive some different opinions,thanks :)

Writing Feedback / Required attendance in college or university classes. [6]

WITE AN OPINION ESSAY ABOUT REQUIRED ATTENDANCE IN COLLEGES OR UNIVERSITIES CLASSES

One of the most common areas where classroom practices of colleges or universities differ is attendance policy. Some universities require their students to attend all classes, while others leave it as an option. In my opinion, attendance should be optional because it encourages students' responsibility, gives them more flexibility and contributes with the learning process.

The first reason for this is that optional attendance encourages students to be more responsible. Research indicates that at the ages of 18-21, personality and brain development has already reached a stage of maturity. Consequently, students can make rational decisions about prioritizing what's most important in their lives, and learn that there are consequences to their choices. It is said that, "If you treat people like children, they may act like children." Furthermore, Universities are supposed to be the educational institutions that prepare students for real life. For instance, if you were responsible enough at university to make good decisions, you will most probably be responsible at work.

The second reason is that it gives students flexibility. Sometimes students cannot express their abilities and skills in other University Activities because they have to attend classes, and they miss important events in activities such as Sport, drama, etc. For example, a talented basketball player cannot participate in the final game of an important tournament because he is compelled to attend a class; he would have missed a great opportunity in his sport career; hence, it would not be beneficial for both students and universities. Besides, 75% of students have other obligations. Each student is a person who has a totally different history with different experiences in life and different issues to deal with. For instance, students that have to work long hours to pay their studies are sometimes unable to attend classes, or parents who have to take care of the family, work and also study, may miss classes for reasons that are beyond their control.

Finally, it gives meaningful contribution to the learning process. Students can concentrate more. Evidence shows that learning is more productive with more concentration. If a student had an important business but was forced to go to a class he would be thinking about that all the class and will not pay attention. Moreover, students do not benefit from forced attendance. Forced students do not give a significant contribution to a class; on the other hand, they may cause disruption in the classroom by distracting other students or sending text messages with their cell phones. Students easily focus on what the teacher is explaining when the classroom is quiet and everyone is willing to learn.

On the whole, Universities should make attendance optional so that students can learn to be more responsible, have a more flexible schedule and also learn better. I strongly believe that students who are really interested in studying will definitely attend classes without being forced.

THIS IS AN ESSAY I WROTE LAST MONTH BUT MY TEACHER JUST CORRECTED THE GRAMMAR MISTAKES ASKED ME TO RE DO IT BUT DIDN'T GIVE ME SOME HELPFUL FEEDBACK. CAN YOU HELP ME OUT WITH YOUR COMMENTS AND SUGGESTION PLEASE!!! :)

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Essays / Living at home and living away from home [15]

Write a comparison/contrast essay about Living at home and living away from home.
This is my essay, I hope you can give me some feedback.Thanks.

Most Young people think about living away from home as the best part in their lives because they will have more freedom and that can be really exciting for them; however, they do not realize that living at home has more benefits compared to living away from home.

The best thing about living away from home is that you have more freedom. You can set your own rules, stay up late, invite friends to your place and have parties whenever you want; hence, a parent- free environment is awesome, but you need to be mature enough to handle it. A drawback is that you may feel homesick. You may miss the moments that you used to share with your family, or even those familiar things such as your neighborhood, your bedroom, your pet and so on. A study in Neuropsychiatry states that people get higher mental health scores if they lived in their family home. Another disadvantage is that you will have to pay a rent, pay the bills, and buy your own food which will definitely affect you in the financial aspect. Finally, another aspect is convenience. You will not have many of the things that you used to have at home. You will have less free time for other activities because you will spend more time doing housework, balancing the budget and organizing things by yourself.

On the other hand, living at home can be frustrating because you always have to obey rules; Your parents will control you most of the time, but this can be a benefit because it can prevent you from being lazy and wasting time doing things that are unproductive. The emotional aspect is also a plus because you would definitely feel better at home. There is nothing like family. They can support you when you need them and cheer you up. Moreover, you can save a lot of money because you do not have to pay a rent neither do you have to buy your own food because your parents will do that for free or sometimes charge you just a low rate. Another point in favor is convenience. You have almost everything you need at home; furthermore, your mother usually does all the housework, at least of the common areas, and organizes everything; consequently you will have more free time for studying or just going out with your friends and having fun.

In conclusion, Even though living away from home can be good since it gives you a feeling of freedom and autonomy, living at home has more advantages contrasted with it. Therefore, if you are planning to leave your house, think it carefully because you can find emotional, financial and convenience disadvantages which will affect you.