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Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "determination" - your favorite word an why? [6]


Determination has defined my life. A few years ago when hard work and a desire to win paid off, I discovered it is determination that led me to success. As I approached the stage to receive my award in writing, my heart pounded with anxiety and excitement. All year, my teachers had alluded to this essay and I was eager to be the student from the entire grade to gain this award. I desired to accept it in front of all my friends and family members. As the deadline approached, I continued to work harder and polish my essay as much as I could. From that day on, I strongly believed in my aspirations. To me, determination allows an individual to be goal orientated and strive for their ambitions. Whether through writing an essay or even defeating a friend while playing a game like chess, I believe it is through determination through which an individual desires success. It allows individuals like me to persevere in order to successfully reach my ambitions.
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "Catch! basketball game!" - common app [3]

i think i have read yours before.. i dont see any mistakes. I like the use of details and imagry it has.. good job!
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / playing guitar suprised me! uva supplement [2]

What work of art, music, science, mathematics or literature surprised, unsettled or challenged you?

As a twelve year old, when it comes to playing a musical instrument, "Guitar" is what most people respond. But for me, this was never the case. I had always underestimated the level of difficulty, sophistication and practice it required. However, my views changed when in eighth grade, part of our music curriculum required us to learn guitar lessons, I was truly surprised by how passionate I had become about playing this instrument by quickly becoming enchanted by those six strings. This instrument gave me a new perspective. I was able to tell apart the different feelings my friends expressed when they played their own work in the class. I discovered a passion by playing this instrument and learned that it wasn't just about strumming a couple of guitar strings. I enjoyed every moment of it.
Dec 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "I'm a girl." COMMON APP [12]

deff a unique essay compared to the ones ive read thus far

scale of 1-10.. id give this as 9

i really liked your concluding sentences..deff effective!
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "Cheerleading has helped me" - Notre Dame Supplement [21]

following the rhymths of the dance routines was easy for me, and flying through the air in stunts was actually really exhilarating.

thats better than the first one... but i dont know its still not flowing very well
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "the Human Rights Club" - extracurricular activities or work experience [2]

senteces i thought were awkk,

Instilling in me good values including being open-minded and understanding of people's customs, ironically enough I felt that it was my culture that was being sacrificed instead.

other than that..i think this is done!
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "the Discover Florence" - SU: why i chose to apply to SU essay + other su essays [4]

Please give me some useful feedback!!! i will return the favor!

Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?

Choosing the right college was a difficult task for me as I wanted to find a college that helped individuals experience beyond the classroom setting. My heart was set on SU the moment I learned about the Discover Florence program through a friend of mine currently attending SU. After hearing countless praises on this school, I researched the school more and more each day and discovered that this school is a perfect match for me. With its diverse setting, I will be able to experience my other interests as well. With its excellent education, Syracuse will provide me with a chance to join soroities, sports club, as well as volunteering organizations such as the "Say Yes to Education", giving me a chance to succeed in and out of the classroom. Coming from a family of software engineers, I hope to study challenging courses and work harder than ever before to pursue my interests. I am confident that the extraordinary programs offered at the orange campus will prepare me to become a remarkable individual for the future.

Who is the person you dream of becoming and how do you believe Syracuse University can help you achieve this?

The person I dream of becoming has always been my uncle. My uncle has inspired me to focus single mindedly, set goals in life, and strive to accomplish them with all grit and determination to achieve dreams and success in life. Born in a small village of India, my uncle was raised among seven siblings. He did not have the benefits back then like I do today. But he still managed to accomplish his dreams by studying engineering at IIT and by establishing his own company. My uncle has never been afraid of hard work as he has managed to establish a company which provides employment to talented engineer's along with technical and non technical professionals. He has inspired everyone not to lean on him but to develop their own individuality. Along with professional achievements, working diligently, and exploring new avenues is what he has influenced me the most with. He inspires me to draw the best from within me as a student, and an individual. Just like IIT helped him reach his goals, I believe SU will help me reach mine. With their exceptional programs and a university that promotes interactive learning and development, I hope to truly discover myself in and out of classroom at such a diverse and prestigious school. I believe with my uncle's influence, the orange campus as well will make me an exceptional individual in the real world.

If you have had work experience, what skills and/or knowledge did you gain?

I have never had any work experience, only unpaid volunteering experiences. My most meaningful experience of all was when I volunteered at an orphanage. It was a physical and a mental challenge. During a visit to India a few years ago, my grandmother asked me to volunteer with her at an orphanage for a week. The tasks were simple: reading to the children, organizing, and spending time with children. Among the orphanage children were also the deaf. However, communicating with the deaf was a difficult task. Because of it, my grandmother, whose job was to teach the deaf how to read, taught me sign language just so I could communicate with them. Contributing my time at the orphanage remunerated with a useful skill of sign language which I will definitely cherish forever.

Our mission of Scholarship in Action, education for the world in the world, extends beyond the classroom to include engagement opportunities with our campus community, the City of Syracuse, and locations across the globe. Based on your interests, tell us what real-world experiences you might pursue during your education at Syracuse as part of this mission.

I held back my tears as I watched a four year beg for food and water. Living in India, this sight plagued the providences. Witnessing these children, I dreamed of providing them basic life necessities. I don't believe that a student's dream should be deferred due to lack of a basic necessity. Because my family constantly relocated, I never could fulfill these aspirations, as my own life was deferred. As a student at Syracuse, I plan to purse my goal of helping others through the "Say Yes to Education" and "Syracuse Center of Excellence in Environmental and Energy Systems", among other programs I have yet to fall in love with. This involvement will allow me to refine living as well as human health conditions in hapless providences around the world. Attending Syracuse University will help me accomplish my mission of improvement and equal opportunities for families around the globe. I hope to realize these deferred dreams, of both them and myself.
Dec 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "Key Club" - commonapp personal statement [2]

prompt: elaborate on one of your ec (150 words or fewer)

As an active member for three consecutive years, Key Club has taught the conspicuous impact I can have in one's life simply through volunteering. Though the club participates in several activities such as collecting clothing for the neglected children, fundraising for UNICEF, and making Christmas-spirited cards for the ill, my most touching memory stems from a Thanksgiving can collecting task for the homeless. It required hours of door knockings, hanging posters around school, and assisting officers in organizing events to collect canned goods. It had given me the satisfaction of knowing that my hard work resulted with a blissful impact on somebody's life. As a committed member, I profoundly understand why this club is cherished as it allows students like me the opportunity to impact the greater cause. And I feel greater for it.