Writing Feedback / IELTS: There are many effective ways to motivate employees [4]

Topic: Paying more money is the only possible motivation to make employees work harder and to increase their productivity. Do you agree? Give reasons and include relevant examples.

Nowadays, many companies are seeking for various ways to encourage their employees to work harder and increase the output. Some people think that the only possible solution is to give the workers more bonuses. However, in my opinion, I disagree with this idea and believe that there are a number of more effective ways to motivate employees.

One of the possible solutions is to praise and say encouraging words to workers who perform well on their jobs. If this is done, those who have already given satisfied results for their jobs will feel more confident and put all their effort in their next work task. In addition, many other employees in the company will feel more challenging and work harder in order to perform well as their colleagues.

Another effective way is to reduce working hours of employees. In fact, most people are under pressure and stressed due to long working hours, which causes their productivity to decline. It is strongly believed that workers will work harder to increase their work output if they have sufficient time to relax and less stress.

The last, but not the least solution is to create a strong bond within a company. Generally, unity is regarded as an extremely important factor if a group of people want to achieve something. Furthermore, people seem to work harder and do better in a peaceful working atmosphere and there is no argument between staff or with the employer.

Taking everything into account, there are many effective motivations to make employe.es concentrate more on their jobs and do better in their work. If all these solutions are put into action, I feel certain that the result will be satisfactory.

All comments will be appreciated. Thanks in advance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Funding artists or spending money on other important subjects? [2]

Topic: Some people think that government should spend money on other important subjects rather helping artists. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, in order to save as much budget as possible and improve the economy of the country, every government around the world is seeking for some ways to spend wisely. Therefore, there is a suggestion that governments should not continue to fund the artists, but they ought to spend money on other necessary subjects such as medical research and space. In my view, I firmly disagree with this recommendation due to several reasons.

The main reason why I believe artists should be funded is because art helps to improve the quality of our lives as well as attracting tourists. For example, monuments that represent each city do not only illustrate the city's history and culture, but also make the city more beautiful and an attractive place for tourists. In fact, some countries depend on tourism as their main source of revenue, thus, the governments should help arts because their work crafts are very necessary to boost the tourist industry.

In addition, sculptures and paintings in the museums and art galleries generally reflect the culture and civilization of every generation. Therefore, culture and history of a country can be reserved and assured by art. Young people are also able to get more knowledge about their country's history and culture by observing various work crafts.

Another reason why artists should be helped is because talent in art is extremely precious and should not be wasted. Indeed, not many people are blessed in the talent of paintings and work crafts. Hence, this type of talent has to be valued as other types of talents such as talent in science or literature.

To sum up, art is a very valuable object for every country and the talent in this area cannot be discovered everywhere, so I think governments should help and encourage artists to continue their work.

All correction and suggestions are welcomed. Thanks in advance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: News editors are objective and have their own agendas on what to publish [NEW]

Topic: News editors decide what to broadcast on TV and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence their decisions? Have we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported?

These days, mass media such as televisions, radios, newspapers and the Internet has played a key role in broadcasting news and giving information about the situations around the globe. The news is usually chosen carefully by news editors before it is broadcasted on TV, radios or posted on the Internet or printed in the newspapers. There are a number of aspects that influence their decision on which news the public should be aware of.

The main factor for this decision is that the chosen news must be about new and unexpected situations, which the public are curious about. For example, a bank robbery is a rare situation that happens, so it usually attracts many people curiosity. However, some crimes such as burglary and theft happen almost all the time, thus they become uninteresting topics and news editors only publish such news once a while. In addition, news that can be used as a warning or to educate people is generally picked up in order to improve the moral or to notify people against any hazards. For instance, the news of a traffic accident caused by reckless and drunk driver is broadcasted or printed so as to warn those who are drunk and dare to drive or drive recklessly. Additionally, news of a widespread disease is a warning for people in the infected area to protect themselves from getting that disease.

It is believed that we used to get bad news such as accidents, economic crisis, disasters and crimes all the time. Although there are good news, the amount of bad news is much more than the good ones. Some people are having depression and stress due to the knowledge of bad news. However, if more good news is reported, people might be bored of them soon because everyone wants to hear or know about new situations, which are sometimes from the bad news.

To conclude, the decision of news editors what news should be chosen bases on a lot of factors. In my view, I think we have become use to bad news. If good news is reported once in a while, it will help to encourage people to be more optimistic in their life. However, good news should not be published too frequently or it will become a wearisome topic.

I welcome all feedback. Thank you in advance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Extra coaching classes [NEW]

Topic: Nowadays children are joining extra coaching classes apart from their school studies. Some think it is important for their future, while others think the extra time should be spent for playing. Do you agree or disagree?

In order to improve their education, children are participating in extra classes after school instead of spending time playing. This has raised a heated debate around the world whether it is a positive or negative development. Some people believe extra coaching classes lead to good job prospect, whereas others hold a distinctive view and think that children should spend their spare time on leisure activities. In my opinion, I believe that students should join extra classes if they are poor in particular subjects.

In fact, many students have difficulty to keep up with other students in their class, so going to extra classes is an ideal way to fill in the part of lessons they do not understand. In addition, as extra coaching classes generally specialize in a particular subject, the teaching method is much more better than at school and students are able to practice solving exercise problems from a variety of resource. Although self-study is also an effective way to improve their study, some students find it hard to practice this method because the lack of resource for practice problems solving and someone to explain to them.

Furthermore, in the extra coaching classes, students can also improve their social skill, which is very important in their lives and usually requires in almost every career. Even though spare time after school studies should be spent on playing or other leisure activities, children can also do these activities at the weekend and spend the weekdays studying hard. Besides, the break time between classes allows students to play games and do some leisure activities such as reading books or listening to music.

To sum up, participating in extra classes can help students in their study a great deal and they will get result after studying extra time. However, students should not overwork themselves and should spend the weekend on some leisure activities apart from study so as to refreshing their mind and relax.

Welcome all kinds of feedback. Thank you in advance.