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Neeta   
May 27, 2011
Scholarship / The British Council to Help in my Studies? - IELTS scholarship [15]

Firstly, I'm extremely sorry.

About essay- I feel its not in a flow. Your 1st paragraph is not much connect with rest and visa versa.

Do you recall reading a short story or any article. If you do, read it again and see how each paragraph is well connect with each other. Moreover, I agree with A.Smith :-). He offered a wise advice, better make a use of it. :-)

Rest is fine :D
Neeta   
May 22, 2011
Writing Feedback / Good news vs bad news; What factors influence this trend? IELTS [5]

Hello!

To begin with linking words are also known as organising words and if you succeed in understanding it, then reading section will be a piece of cake :-)

Have a look at following (general) clusters below:-

Cluster 1 (purpose)
In order to
Aim
Purpose
Goal
Objective
to begin with
to start with
I will start by looking at
I will look at

Cluster 2 (problem)
Problem
Difficulty
Obstacle
problems....are the reason
that is the reason
be the reason that
which explains why
that would account for
the reason why

Cluster 3 (result/outcome)
Therefore,
Consequently
Consequence
Outcome
Effect
Result
as a result
resultant
this would enable/help to
this means that they would
by doing this
due to
result of
with the result that
a direct result of
effect of
have an effect/have no effect
effect on
consequence of
consequence for
the end result is that
aftereffect of
psychological aftereffects

Cluster 4(difference)
Difference
Discrepancy
In other words
to put in differently
to look at it from another angle/perspective/point of view

Cluster 5 (factor)
Factor
Influence

Cluster 6
Hazard
Risk

Cluster 7
Connection
Link
Relationship
Association

Cluster 8
Analysis
Explanation
Interpretation

Cluster 9 ( to demonstrate different side of one object or a human )
Characteristic
Feature
Trait
Attribute
Quality

Cluster 10 (helps in supporting idea/point)
Reason
Because
as
since
for the reason
that is the reason
because of
be a result of/result from
just because
owing to
due to
as a result

Cluster 11 (explaining with the help of exam)
for example
for instance
a good example
is a good example
such as

Cluster 12 (writing conclusion)
To put in nutshell
In conclusion
I would like to pen down

Cluster 13 (to add further information)
and
moreover
furthermore
addition
additionally
in addition
also
similar
similarly

Cluster 14 (to show condition)
if
provided that
condition
clause

Cluster 15 (to represent a change or different view)
Contrast
However
Nevertheless
but
in comparison
even though
alternatively
then again
rather than

Cluster 16 (ways of writing solution)
the obvious solution
the obvious answer
another method is to
last but not least
the best way is to
a good idea is
one possibility is
Neeta   
May 21, 2011
Undergraduate / Theme for the Day for my college Nite. [7]

"A night to remember"- too common. I understand why you looking for option.

Gala night theme will suit better if the event is concerning big festive.

Riddance night theme- hmmm yeah! it's one of possible solution. Unfortunately, not every attractive to me.

Flabbergasting- good.

I go with Flabbergasting day/night.

"A night to summon into mind and soul"
Neeta   
May 21, 2011
Scholarship / The British Council to Help in my Studies? - IELTS scholarship [15]

I will suggest to edit. There are a lot of good ideas. Try not to be wordy. For example- you mentioned about your accounting and then you simply went on. To me, it's not holding back audiences interest. :d

If you think my points are relevant then simply add to your essay to the bit you find it appropriate. However, usually the structure is one I recommended to you, but every author has a different style r call it approach- REMEMBER that :-)

Like I've been telling to everyone- use synonym words, a perfect coherence,display correct use of tense and a variety in sentence structure.

Edit and get back. I'll be waiting. :-)
Neeta   
May 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS - units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France [8]

try using words like "consumption", "usage" (possible synonyms)

Usually graphs and charts written in past.

Task 1 Structure
1- Introduction. Present tense (you did a good job.)
2- Main body. Past tense. Can be between 2-3 paragraph depending how do you agree paragraphs. I feel here you need to work. Similar trend with explanation in one paragraph and ones, which is/are dissimilar onto next paragraph and don't forget to explain. (you've explained but the comparison is missing)

3- Conclusion- summary. Highest and lowest and link between them.

For pie chart, use superlative and comparative words like good-better-best.

Make sure each sentence has a different structure. Examiner want to see how good are with sentence structure to present your analytical views with some good vocabulary.

Hope this helps :-)
Neeta   
May 21, 2011
Scholarship / The British Council to Help in my Studies? - IELTS scholarship [15]

@Nhug- I'm so glad to see a thread by you.

Lets come to feedback. :-)

1 - key words in this essay are "IELTS", "scholarship", "studies", "help", "you".

2 - Deal with this topic as SOP that is Statement of Purpose with few changes.

3 - 1st paragraph- define "IETLS" and "scholarship", talk about importance of IELTS (here you can write that IELTS boosts up confident among students aspiring to student in English speaking countries) , how it has helped foreign students (do your research well, and give references of article, websites, books. Also, make a reference page and write the same there and if you need help with reference format google or ask moderators)

4 - 2nd paragraph- your history and reason for studying abroad. Achievements and target goal. (this will show your are very focus on what you are doing. Thus, leaves a good impact on the readers or the body who are responsible for short listing candidates)

5 - 3rd paragraph- Reason how IETLS can help you achieve your expectations besides, being a big support in bearing accommodation and fooding, tutition fees etc., Why you are the most eligible candidate to be offered scholarship. (write your strength and how and what are you doing to turn weakness into strength.)

6 - 4th paragraph- summary, a polite note to the readers saying that "thanks for going through my essay"

7 - Last but not least, pay attention to grammar and vocabulary. Show various type of sentence structure

Oh yeah! you can write gaining a scholarship is an achievement that you can write on your resume because this is highly acknowledge by employees. It shows, I'm result driven, confident, determined blah blah blah (google/search for references to back up point)
Neeta   
May 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / Good news vs bad news; What factors influence this trend? IELTS [5]

@Nhung Quynh-great work!

@lastielts- You are quick to grasp things :-)

Compared to previous essay this one is much better. However, I would like to mention that although you convey message or idea easily but some what lacks coherence and reasoning. For example- When dealing with situational essay, you must explain the situation in the 1st paragraph but don't mention your opinion.People should try to give more importance to the good deeds that is occurring in their neighborhoods and in the World. ---- This is as an opinion as the question asked for "Would it be better if more good news was reported?"

2nd paragraph-listed influences. Good work. But you forgot to mention reason and its impact/resultant. IELTS essay questions always ask for reason and relevant example if necessary from your experience. Make a point to reason. Let me show you how reasoning helps. Firstly- you support you idea. Secondly, in this question, reasoning automatically answers to the second question in sequence that is Do we become used to bad news?

If I were you my brainstorming would be based on format mentioned below:-

Influence--->reason---->result---->impact-
sensationalism and target rating point are the two most important influencing factors that make a television channel to telecast a program or a news-----influencebecause fear and insecurities are building up due to rivalries among corporations and countries.----reasonAs a result, media world is required to telecast the most latest report with a hope to keep their country and its men a step ahead of enemies----result but such news are not always guarantee to leave a good impact on people because psychology of people differ from each for example, many terrorist use those information in destroying the nation. On the other hand, such information may cause violence on global base if its not of their interest and a good example is riots concerning religious practice.----impact

For coherence between paragraphs use linking words. (do let me know if you wish to know about linking words).
Neeta   
May 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS- Resist making changes-problem and solution associated with it. [9]

@Kevin- You've no idea, how happy I'm because after a long time somebody called me "awesome". :D

Btw, I wrote IELTS paper this month and I cleared it in one attempt. Scored overall 7 band. Honestly, I've no clue how did I manage to score as my exam went horrible. But all I can say, this forum helped me alot in little time. It won't be possible without the guidance of Aria, Real fog, you and a few more people, whose name probably I'm missing out.
Neeta   
May 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / "practical skills for the well-being of society" - IELTS Band 7 essays [4]

Although,academic education is vital in an individual's life it is essential that a student has the capacity to apply the knowledge gained ---- should be "gained knowledge" efficiently in his job

Personally, I feel you have missed out the second question "Should schools should start giving more importance on this?". Secondly, reason your point to suffer your idea. You have mentioned a lot of good words such as teamwork, time management and interpersonal work but, how does it help individuals at work.

Thirdly, Conclusion paragraph is a summary of the main body. Do not introduce new idea.

Let me brief you out the structure.
Introduction- 1 paragraph. Try to define the problem if its situation topic and if argument state both the end.

Main body- 2-3 paragraph. Support your ideas by reasoning (can write a very small example) and then its outcome.

Conclusion- 1 paragraph. Summary. Do not introduce new idea.

Hope I'm clear to you :)

Good Luck

Neeta
Neeta   
May 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / IETLS-Importance of history and effects if not taught to children [6]

Dear All,

I'm having trouble identifing whether this particular essay topic is of hidden argument type. Also, am not sure of my writing in terms of contend and grammar. :(

Please comment to what extend I have covered the question.

Thanks & Regards

Neeta

To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to do so? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.


History is losing its significances as many people failed to understand its benefits. A lot many consider history as a module that should be learnt by heart to pass exam and later it is as easily forgotten. However, history has a pivotal role in moulding law, societies and in the revolution of science, maths and literature. Therefore, this essay will throw some light on the importance of history and the consequences if children at school are not taught history.

First of all, history serves the purpose of achieve and give essay access to individuals for reference that is available in form of events and facts. As a result this information can be either used to predict the consequences and resolve matters before it is too late or to make changes and adapt as per modern generation needs. For instance, India's law is highly inspired by British law but due to new scenario, there are new amendments in law to serves its people. Furthermore, the old inventions such as electricity, car engine, train engine etc., are being modified to meet new demands. On the other hand, history preserves tradition that helps in bridging relationship between two nations by avoiding unnecessary situations due to lack of knowledge and communication gap. Additionally, it helps in wiping off unnecessary customs from societies. Earlier labours were treated as slaves but today, they have right to quit their job and find a new one.

Nevertheless, if school students are not taught history then a number of problems may arise concerning with economy and social behaviour of humans because history talks about experiences encountered by our ancestors and if they do not learn the moral lessons then the world will produce egocentric, immodest, corrupt humans who will be responsible for leading their countries into darkness because increase in the rate of hunger, poverty and unemployment rate will eventually shoot up crime rate. Thus, literacy percentage will fall down dramatically.

To put in nutshell, history preserves country's tradition and serves in forming or improving human's life and if advantages are neglected then it will not only affect the world economy but also, human race.
Neeta   
May 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Should we ban all forms of advertising? [7]

Betsy, I felt there is no room for correction when I read your essay.

I read online that hidden argument essay topic usually ask for "to what extend", "in what way", or "how has something change" and you must reveal hidden question. For example from "to what extend something affects" TO "does/whether something affect"

FROM "in what way globalization affects young generation..." TO "does/whether globalization affects young generation...."

FROM "how does something...." TO "does/whether something..."

Hope I'm making sense :(

Take Care

Neeta
Neeta   
May 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / When money speaks , Truth is silent [6]

It should be "the masses".

Did you write that?

btw, are you preparing for IETLS paper? If, yes you have to work on structure. Otherwise, you are pretty fine.

Take Care

Neeta
Neeta   
May 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS- Resist making changes-problem and solution associated with it. [9]

Hey Kevin,

Good to hear from you after a long time. Hope all's fine with you. :D

IETLS guideline says, not to copy same words from the essay topic and to use synonym words. But you are right. "Culture" is inappropriate word as nothing is mentioned is the main body

Can you comment what band I'm likely to score if my writing pattern is similar to this one.

And thanks for providing relevant feedback.

Neeta
Neeta   
May 17, 2011
Dissertations / Dissertation topic MSc investment banking..... [5]

Greeting Javier,

I remember writing dissertation. My tutor told me, hypothesis usually in form of question/s that help in investigating.

Relation between fixed income trading and investment banking- could be one possible hypothesis.

A good selection of methodology should answer hypothesis.

Well, finance is not my subject so, I'm afraid can't help you much. :D

Wishes!

Neeta
Neeta   
May 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Should we ban all forms of advertising? [7]

Dear Betsy,

The essay topic no doubt asking to present both end views but I feel if you pose a question in introduction, it will be even better. for example "The question is whether imposing ban on all form of advertisement will serve its purpose to society?"

Take Care

Neeta
Neeta   
May 16, 2011
Undergraduate / Work or travel for a year between high school and university? 'wise descision' [5]

Salima,

I believe essay topic- "discuss advantages and disadvantages." if it so, then you've not mentioned both the ends.

The points are not very clear. Why don't you link one point with next. This will give essay a good structure and rhythm to flow for readers.

For example-When students go out to work they meet different people and learn social behavior that helps in exchanging ideas and concepts and doing so, they learn to differentiate between right and wrong, which will prevent big losses in later part of their life.

I hope this will help.

Take Care
Neeta   
May 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS- Resist making changes-problem and solution associated with it. [9]

Hello,

Your suggestion will be highly valued.

Neeta

Topic- "People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?
Give reasons for your answer and include any examples from your own knowledge or experience. Words-least 250

In the fast moving world, there are few people, who continue to believe a small change can either damage their reputation or traditional culture. Furthermore, they encourage people to practice same method and forget problems it can cause to individuals and society.

Those people, who develop resistance to change often suffer from monotonous and lack of enthusiasm because they are trapped in their work and lifestyle that advocated to worship repetitiveness and so, their health deteriorates and as a result their quality of life may be no better than before. A good idea would be to encourage them to take some time off for new activities of their interest such as sports, reading, traveling. By doing this people would feel energetic and improved concentration will eventually make them efficient and productive.

Moreover, these people are highly dependent on others as they lack adequate skills to complete a task. This happens due to fear and hesitant of accepting advanced technology. Consequently, their self-esteem is high suffered, which is reflected in their social behaviour. For instance, these people may withdrawn themselves from society considering others as crowd or may lack to built up conversation because of limited knowledge. The obvious answer is to help these people to be more self aware. This can be done either by communicating with people from distant land or traveling. Other possibility could be promoting benefits of advanced technology and guideline on usage. Additionally, support people with good library resources that has access to relevant articles, journals and books. Thus, this will lead them to be more knowledgeable and confident.

Last but not least, if people avoid changes, then the entertainment, hospitality and tourism industries may witness a downward trend as these industries largely depend on leisure time of people besides, unemployment will grow sharply, resulting slow down in the local economy. To avoid such situations, first of all, government must fortify public to take vacation and secondly, accept new ideas and fundamentals from the locals. This way, economy will bloom and country will have a good leader with a sharp realistic vision.

To put in nutshell, monotonous, unenthusiasm, lack of social awareness and a slow economy are some of the problems related to individuals or masses, which should be handled with a lot care. Therefore, government along with individuals should understand the goodness a change brings with itself to help transforms their lives.
Neeta   
Apr 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS: technology versus traditional skills and life [5]

About essay-Personally, I do not agree with later half of your 1st example because Parisian rugs know for its traditional and hand weaving rugs. Rather machine makes hand-made products expensive. High income people prefer hand made products because it's expensive and linked to status symbol. Therefore, you will find availability of these products in the list of "luxury products".

In my opinion technology has two side. One side it is making consumer products easily available to every individual and on the other side pushes up the cost of natural goods. Take example of human made fiber and natural fiber. Polyester is a human made fiber common among people at a reasonable price but silk not all that common because it is expensive. Now, both of them popular for its texture-that is softness. Creative people are again an example of rarity. There is no need to keep it alive till the time there is a demand for high end goods and rare people.

Technology makes traditional skills rare and more expensive. I feel talking about hospital, doctors and surgeons, hospitality, advertisement and campaign could be good examples to link how technology washed out traditional method of practice and people are happy. Here, there is no point to hold tradition back.

To keep traditional alive-you gave a good example. 2nd example could be cooking. We should eat fresh home cooked meals rather than processed/frozen food for heathy eating :d

P.S- I'm not a writer.
Neeta   
Apr 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK-2 (some avoid changes and others believe changes are good) [4]

This is my first discussion essay, pls be free to comment.

Thanks

Neeta


"Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing"

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Globalisation and technology has a major role in a civilised society, where children mind are trained to practice self-control in order to protect their family and themselves from unwanted situations. This phenomenon later turns into fear, which prevents them from bring in change in their lives. On the other side, changes are considered good and raise question- "what our present would look like, if our ancestors' never thought of amending old constitution or inventing technology, on which our life heavily depends on today."

Today, millions of people feel insecure due to easy available of skilled and non -skilled labour on market and believe that having expertise can enrich job performances, which is directly linked to income and security, and much needed to keep family running towards prosperity, for example-a family man with housing and car loan has to keep on working even during unfavourable working condition. These people continue to work in spite they suffer from boredom to avoid unwanted circumstances.

Nevertheless, changes are good to get away from a hectic life to relax mind, and do self-realisation, but many people wander from one place to another not because they are bored and wanting adventure but because they wish to learn various cultures and adopt good things from it for survival. Thus, it brings in awareness and affects psychology of a human. The best way to convey, what good changes brought in out lives is the fact that our ancestors are monkey. Another example is of a man, who decides to use public transport rather than his car, is more aware of global issues and taking measures to help society.

Personally, I feel everyone should transform their lives because insecurity develops fear and stops many people from bringing in much needed change. Where as, adequate change can benefit society and them.
Neeta   
Apr 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / US marriage and divorce in 1970 and 2000. IELTS Task [10]

A very warm greetings Vasiliy,

"2000 respectively , and comparison of the marital statue of Americans in 1970 to 2000"

In the second bar comparison is between 1970 and 2000 and not from 1970 to 2000. I personally feel, it should be"and comparison of the martial statues of Americans between the years 1970 and 2000".

Let me know your opinion.

Regards

Neeta
Neeta   
Apr 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / US marriage and divorce in 1970 and 2000. IELTS Task [10]

The two bar charts show the numbers of marriage and divorces in USA in 4 different years of 1970, 80, 90 and respectively 2000, and comparison of the marital statue of Americans in 1970 and 2000. As a holistic trend it can be seen that he[/i] the numbers of marriages in America slightly dropped during these years and a comparison between 1970 and 2000 shows that percentage of the [i]never married and divorce ]rate rose[/i]

I think rose means increase. Rise- rose-risen.

Other words for first and second- "above and below" or "former and latter"

According to the first bar chart, on one hand, the number of marriages ceremony during first period[i] remained
[/b] constant on 205 million marriages at year, then this number declined[/i] on the next two-time period from approximately 2.25 millions from 1990 to 2 millions in 2000. On the other hand, the numbers of divorces rose from 1 million in 1970 to 1.4 millions in 1980, then [i]decreasedto 1.1 in 1990, before[b] it settled at 1 million in 1990 and 2000.

P.S- I'm advise to write introduction in present tense and body in past. Please check with a teacher or somebody who is writing IELTS as I'm not very sure.

Regards,
Neeta
Neeta   
Apr 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / US marriage and divorce in 1970 and 2000. IELTS Task [10]

A very warm greetings!

I hold a hard copy, but right now, I'm not in a situation to provide feed back. Please wait, I'll sure get back to you in few hours. Oh! about the hierarchy layout I mentioned earlier- I'll try to upload :D

Ciao!

Neeta
:D
Neeta   
Apr 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / IETLS - advertising and consumer goods. What are the real needs of customers? [2]

Topic- Today, the high sales of popular consumers goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold

To what extent do you agree or disagree


The consumer goods can be described as basic necessity of buyers' to meet day-today life requirement and with the help of advertisement, the manufacturers are able to reach the potential buyers. Therefore, I agree that advertisement plays a key role in hiking sales and promotion of goods. However, I disagree that it ignores the right needs of the community.

Firstly, needs of individual varies from one another. The disposable income not only gives right to consumers to select a right commodity for themselves but also, to decide how they would like to spend their money. For example- average income family or a person will not exceed limit to purchase an item that does not fit into his budget . Here the role of advertising was to created an awareness among the mass. Advertising had least influence on that consumer in decision making process- that is, a decision of not purchasing an item.

Secondly, due to globalization consumers are informed and better educated not to fall in trap of advertisement. These days, consumers are shifting their preferences to social, environmental goods and often manufacturers of these goods have a reputation, that they would not risk by making a false marketing or letting unauthorized person access their name. Bodyshop is a world renounced example and first of its kind to support campaign that said no to animal products and testing. Here they showed a true picture about themselves which made them favorite. Thus, it proves advertisement does not ignores the needs of society.

Finally,advertising is contributing towards society by encouraging common mass to buy those consumer goods which donates a small portion of their profit percentage to NGOs. In India, for every purchase of Whisper, Pantine (all products) contributes a small profit to NGOs to support education for those children who live in poverty. On the other hand media is more active ever than before, covering small details of every advertising and continuously pushing government and regulation to take legal action if an advertisement makes a false promises about the quality. A large number of legal case on the manufacture of Fair & Lovely is one of the example. Thus, encouraging manufacturers to use true evidence for the promotion of their good by the means of advertisement.

In my opinion, advertising neither effect consumers buying decision nor manipulates phycology of consumers's mind and not to forget it is helping NGOs. It only helps in making a product known and the sources of its availability. The government action even further guards the interest of common mass.Advertisements are more like an empty frame. You will see only what you want to.
Neeta   
Apr 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / Spending life time in a changing manner. IELTS Task 2 [6]

I'm glad I could help.

Well, I too have same problem. Today, I attempted my task differently. I made a hierarchy layout very much similar to bullet points that I would like to write in the essay. for example- on the same level mentioned advantages and disadvantages. Then, In the next level made bullet points of advantages and in further leveling of each bullet point I wrote key words, to use to explain the idea. Later, one more leveling to remind me what example to write. On the other hand, followed the same for disadvantages. Saved a lot of my time :D

Regards
Neeta
Neeta   
Apr 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / Spending life time in a changing manner. IELTS Task 2 [6]

Paragraph 1

I found a monotone life style is boring and like most of the time to change my job, places and even hobbies .- I found a monotone life style boring and most of the time, I like to change my job, place and even hobbies.

It can help in better way to get ride of a uniform of and usual life pattern and give you the chance to see and meet other place and peopl e- It can help in better way, to get ride off an uniform or usual life pattern to give you a chance to see and meet other place and people.

Paragraph 2

The first thing that a changeable mode of living does to you is that you leave a boring and repetitive rhythm of your daily life.

In second sentence, are you trying to say that it's not like every day routine. If you answer is yes- perhaps, you have to make some correction. I've brought in some chances, use if you like it -It is neither like drawing the same salary nor meeting same people and driving the same road to reach at workplace everyday.

Third sentences conveys a lot. I guess you should write an example.

Overall, Firstly, I think you essay talks more about changes and reasons. Least is mentioned about the reasons why some people still following the same routine and avoiding changes. Secondly, your opinion should be a part of conclusion.

P.S- I'm a beginner and know little about essay writing so, if you think you are right please stick to it.

Regards
Neeta
Neeta   
Apr 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS (task 2) A year break for traveling or work before joining university. [10]

@ARIA- Thanks Aria.

Can you please spare some minutes to see the correction I brought in. Pls

Refuter-used instead of "opponent"

"whereas...."-do you think "and" is more suitable

"Nevertheless, a year break broadens the horizon for young adults as they become more confident, knowledgeable, and productive. It also helps them to identity the right program at the university which eventually opens a gateway to new job opportunities, that was unknown to us earlier. Where as, many of them get a chances to save money not only for the university tuition fee but also to bear living expense during their stay at university."- Nevertheless, a large group supports the idea of a year break as it broadens the horizon of young adults as they become more confident, knowledgeable, decision-maker and productive. Young mind, which were confused earlier gets a chances to identity the right program before joining university and to prepare financial budget to bearing tuition fee and other expenses during their stay at university. Therefore, I believe reasons to seek a year break is justified.

"Although, there are undoubtedly some problems with the idea of youngsters taking a year break yet, I strongly feel, this approach is right. It gives young mind enough time to defuse confusion and think clear about future and giving us a better civilization generation."- Although, there are undoubtedly some problems with the idea of youngsters taking a year break yet, I strongly feel, this approach is right because this gives access to young adults, to think in right frame of mind about their future and plan accordingly.

Regards
Neeta

@REAL FROG- Thanks Turbina. I'll keep in mind to follow structure.

Regards
Neeta

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