Writing Feedback / Is growth necessary for a happy life? [4]

SAT essay 1

"Golden Rules" that had its root in the primitive time enhance the disciplines of sharing and distributing equally. Consequently, the concept of growth was blurred by the survival of these rules - main factor setting the whole community out of the circle of life. And events went on its track until the distinguishing between wealth and poverty came into being, which formed the society.

Since the urge to search for resources became mandatory, human has been familiar to move and motivate. When we found woods for heating, new idea crossed our mind to hunt games for meat. When we had enough to use, we suggested to store food. And the process step by step moved forwards and thus, it means growth. Now take a step to our modern society, growth does not only confine to eating and surviving, but, to some extent, keep pace with the race of the globe to persue happiness. Why can it be? Cacmac told his daughter: " Happiness is a race". And the reason for racing is to maintain a happy and productive dwelling. We have to run on the road full of dust and obstacles, to motivate. An stationary particle can not control its own direction or choose its own destiny. As a result, provided that we choose to stand still, that means we choose to stay behind growth.

We do not constrain to any rules to render us develop in a fixed way. As a rule, people often refer it to the self-motivation. A CEO's role is to enhance to relationship and to force the income of his or her company, not others. However, it is sometimes self-fish and mean as the development of the whole has been put aside, even forgotten. The concept of growth should be further than its merely meaning. To live also means to togerther share and develop. President Ho Chi Minh said: " Development is at its greatest strength when we know how to step together". Put these factors into a unity and we will understand the true gift of growth.

Eventually, everything will have its end. An old bird will be exhausted and weakened until death and so will be human. But, will we accept inertness, accept a life like a stone lying in a harsh flowing of stream? We have to look at the bright sides to foster the aims, to set goal to meet up with and together, we are growing.

Writing Feedback / "It is better to be safe than sorry" - TOEFL ibt [4]

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to be safe than sorry
Use reasons and examples to support your responses.

In our life, safety and danger are two factors of human life. Sometimes safety brings more assurance but not all danger is simply danger, taking a risk means taking a chance. What is the better: safety or risk?

People in favor of security think nothing can be got unless there is an assurance. We should respect our life and risk may bring an end without anything. For instance, when driving on a big crowded street, people always say: it is better to be safe than sorry because a moment of carelessness will result in a loss of life.

On the other hand, risk is considered to be dangerous, but it is also a chance for anyone who would like to make a change of their own life. People think they can not stand living a tedious life with no harm done. For example, a student would like to get admitted to MIT. Although his scores are not too high, at average, he had better apply for it because the more you know how to take risk, the more you can get.

In conclusion, I think safety and risk should be coexistent and should not be separated as I would like to have a risky life as well as a secure one. If we know to to balance them, we can not only get success, but also we can enhance the preciousness of life.

Writing Feedback / Actions speak louder than words. TOEFL ibt writing [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Actions speak louder than words.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
In our daily life, actions and words are both reactions to any situation. Sometimes it is better to act but it is wiser to have a word with someone in some cases. There are many concepts about this saying, so what is better of all: actions or words?

People in favor of acting seem to feel like nothing can be done with having a mouth open. They think men had better act but ought not to be as talkative as women since this will have an impact on the strength and personality of a real man. Actions indeed make the surroundings admire you. For example, when come up with a robber or an murder , does persuasion really help you catch the stealer or save your life from the killer? Definitely not, so we have act in time to get a meaningful action.

On the other hand, some disagree that actions do not actually bring a matter to a happy ending. In some circumstances, for instance, when in a row with your best friend, what should you do get better off? Use your power to stop it or sit down and talk peacefully with yours? The latter one will be the smart choice because of your best friend, you can not treat like a gangster or a kidnapper. Words are really helpful if we know how to and when to use.

To sum up, I think if we solve a problem with a separate way: talking and acting, things will not be looking up. In fact, we had better try to apply actions and word in line and that will truly do because you become a skillful person who can get control of the situation and can get the matter out of your life perfectly, which is really a happy ending.

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Writing Feedback / "What famous place would you you like to visit?" - TOEFL ibt writing [5]

What famous place would you you like to visit ? Use details and reasons to support your response.

When I was a kid, I dreamed of having a chance to visit France, which is the center of fashion. The most fascinating thing about France is that it is both picturesque and historically important. There are also plenty of structures as well as buildings which were constructed long time ago. But what strikes me does not stop at that. Paris, the capital of France, is one of the world's most striking cities for fashion and style. My sister works as the officer-in-charge-of designers for a fashion company. When young, I possessed a basic understanding of fashion as my sister told me a lot of interesting things about Paris along with her career. From that time, she influenced the passion of designing in my mind. That is why I am into creating new designs and look forward to visiting my dreamland one day.

Thanks for all advice.
your faithfully,
Hugh