Undergraduate / "The Day I Caught a Thought" LOL sounds like Dr. Seuss (Cornell App Essay) [22]

Merry Christmas Eve! I would appreciate it if you could critique my supplement essay to Cornell.
It's 343/500 words, and I'm not looking to cut/add a drastic amount..
I want to major in Psychology.
Thanks for your time (:

College of Arts and Sciences:
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.

At 13 years old, sitting cross-legged in my living room, I thought about the brain. The catalyst for this seemingly random event was a documentary about Alzheimer's disease that I watched a few minutes prior. The documentary, one about a woman battling Alzheimer's who was surprisingly young and spry, changed my life. It made me appreciate my brain, my memory, and all that life has to offer. But it also left me wondering and questioning: What would my life be like if I could not remember so much of it? These questions were sparks that ignited the passion I have for the human mind.

What could possibly be more exciting than the brain? My brain, allowing me to articulate my thoughts into these typed words, also allows me to feel deep emotions ranging from elation to despair. My brain allows me to keep up with the complicated plot in a book, but also lets me enjoy the simplicity of a song's melody. The human body cannot function without the brain, and it is this significance that makes the brain so fascinating to me.

A made-for-TV documentary about Alzheimer's disease was where my interest in the brain and psychology budded, but it will surely flourish at Cornell University. With the help of Cornell's faculty, current students are conducting experiments, finding answers to questions that have befuddled many for years. The brain, once the enigma of the body, is now, with the application of knowledge gained from courses taught at Cornell's College of Arts and Sciences, becoming better understood. I have a drive fueled by curiosity and persistence- I want to join this exploration. As a Cornell student and Psychology major, I would love to participate in conducting research that yields enlightened discoveries about human behavior. There is something about Cornell's nurturing atmosphere, both upheld by the competent faculty and abundant resources, that assures me that I can turn my hopes into realities, achieving something beautiful. Being blessed with the luxury to study under autumn's vibrant foliage in idyllic Ithaca wouldn't be so bad either.