Writing Feedback / About me and my big dreams [2]

Task: write a short paragraph about a topic of your interest.
I like to write about myself. Please comment and correct my grammar.

My name is Suhartini and I come from Johor Bahru. My English teacher in secondary school was named Tini my toddler so he can call and remember my name easily. This is because there are three people named in the class Tini. Now I work at Park School Friends, Kajang. I had three years there. I will tell a bit about myself.

I was born in the town of Kota Tinggi which has many historical remains of the past. But my parents live in the coastal area that is surrounded by towering palm trees. This village is located 30 km away from the town city tinggi.Sekarang my parents still live there and it is a beautiful village. The famous village with the results of its waters and pristine beaches that draw tourists.

I teach in the afternoon. My school has many pupils. Subjects are taught English and physical education and kesihatan.Saya like to learn English and I want to speak English fluently because I know that English is the language of many countries in the world. Now I am currently enrolled in teacher Graduate Programme in English studies at UPM. I expect myself to do well in every class. I improve my English skills by listening to music and watch movies in English subtitles. I really want to go overseas to study in countries with good education, such as: United States, Singapore, England .. and so on. Malaysia has one of the best educational systems in the world. But I want to pursue and find the experience of studying in the country my father always encouraged orang.Ibu sayadalam anything and they hoped I would win a scholarship to the beautiful country. I always try my best to complete my self every day.

My hobbies reading novels, listening to music, watch movies, and shopping. I spend a lot of my free time reading novels. Many collections have my novel collect either from within or outside the country. My favorite food is spicy sour relish the tradition of the state of Johor. I do not like to play facebook or twitter as a hobby by people as nowadays. For me, it's just a waste of time and not all things necessary in the public report.

I do not have many achievements. Maybe I'm young and I have enough time to make more progress, but I always wanted to experience things a lot different in my life. No one is perfect. Of course, I also. I never fail, stumble and fall but I know that when I could stand I will learn many useful lessons in life. Among the achievements that made me and my parents are very proud

the highest score in the final examination in Form Two students then topped the category of Best Form Two, became Johan representing Teachers College Volleyball competition between Teacher Training Colleges in Malaysia.

I will try something new and get more achievements to make my parents proud of me.
I have big dreams when I was growing up, I will travel around the world, studying in the country and has his own business empire. I want to be a successful businessman. One day when I was old enough to have an adventure to me, when I can stand on my own feet, I would have my big dreams.

Writing Feedback / Songs and chants are useful learning materials for teaching listening ad speaking. [3]

Songs and chants are useful learning materials for teaching listening ad speaking. Explain why you choose the song and how you would incorporate in the lesson.

Please help me to correct and improve my essay.

I use this song because it is familiar to students. Since kindergarten again this song is always played. By reason, students are exposed to song lyrics. It is a song that easy to understand. From the song "Old McDonald Had a Farm" the students can learn the names of animals and they were able to know how the sound of the animals . For example (Cat = 'Meow', Cow = 'Moo', Bird = "Chirp" and etc.). The song "Old McDonald Had a Farm" is also very fun to be heard and increase the students' vocabulary. Besides that, this song will capture the attract of the students beginning the learning process and continuing until the end of the lesson. Through this song also students can perform variety movements of animals found in the song. Singing songs with the movement known as creative movement. No offense to combine it with creative movement.

Writing Feedback / 'the head of English language Panel' - important event in my life [4]

please comment my essay...
I have a lot of important events in my life That changed me significantly. That there wasone event made an enormous impacted in my life. it all began in the past eight years, Ihad been ordered to report at a rural areas school. far from the mainstream of alldevelopment and progress. but I am so happy and excited to go there. stepped on the first day at school, I had met many wonderful people. teachers here are very friendly and helpful in every matter. The only thing I enjoy most meaningful is to be the head of English language Panel. Without the experience and knowledge in this field I have many difficulties to adapt in this field. But with the help of my colleagues, had succeeded in raising the achievement of students there with many awards and recognition in manycompetitions and examinations. I am very proud of this achievement being able to raise the name of the school and the people here are very grateful.

Writing Feedback / 'By travelling I will be able' your favourite leisure activity, an expository writing [3]

please help with me with grammer and sentrence structure...im poor in this language
write an expository paragraph (a topic sentence, 3 supporting sentences with supporting details and a concluding sentence based on this topic:
My Leisure Activity
Many people prefer to spend their time with benefit things.The purpose is to fulfill the interest and their leisure time. We can use the Internet to find informations, participate in the forum and write blogs as our leisure time. Many people still prefer reading is a lack of interest in them. They assume that reading is boring because sitting quietly without doing other activities. But for me reading is fun. Because I get a lot of useful information.My inherit hobby, reading, provides me with the ability to insert such an interesting anecdote into the normal introduction. Likewise, reading itself is alluring. When a book is in my hand, I can soon immerse myself into another world, the palace of the ancient east, the elegance of universe, or the emotion of an emperor. Through volumes of books, intellects of great people have nourished my mind and changed my ways of thinking. This interest I practiced since the school until now. The reading material that I love are novels, magazines, cookery books, motivation books and religion books.My reading material are not limited to magazines and books only, but with the internet facilities nowadays I can read the online Internet such as websites, blogs, forums, ebooks and much more.The second activity that I always do in free time is cooking. I am loved cooking. From the recipe books that I have read, I will practice cooking skills by trying the new recipes. I will request family members to try out my new dishes and comment on the food. In this way I will improve my cooking skills otherwise they will make us more closer. The last activity I like to do with my family is travelling. I will do this activity during the long school holidays and if there are enough budgets.By travelling I will be able to see interesting places, learn about the culture and try the new food.The conclusion is many activities that we can do in our leisure time. It depends to us to use the opportunities in front of our eyes on the present advanced facilities.