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Aug 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / Heroes risk their reputation and their lives [2]

OtherAnother example is,Elvis Aaron Presley.
H is novel versions of existing songs - don't forget capital letters, and another important thing is that you should put space after commas and periods.

The last example is Opera Winfrey. H er parents...
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Aug 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Eating at hove vs. eating out (my recommendation) [9]

Writing topic: Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer?

Being as crucial as breathing, eating is not constant and we can choose places where to have a meal. Some people like to eat in restaurants or food stands. Others always eat at home and do not like to eat in public places. As for me, I prefer to eat out and below I'll try to explain why.

It is pleasant for me to eat in restaurants because there I can have a meal with my friends, discuss all the current affairs and we can always visit different places. Me and my friends usually meet in a restaurant for a dinner. The evenings for us are the most beautiful hours of the day and the views from restaurants windows or terraces is always fascinating. We always try to change locations and get together in different restaurants. Eating at home for me is boring. There I eat just to not be hungry, and restaurant is a place where I can enjoy talking to my friends and watching a picturesque views of streets or gardens.

Another benefit of eating out is that you do not need to cook for yourself. In a restaurant, you choose a meal from a variety of things in the menu and a chef will cook it for you.

Food stands are not so spectacular, but for me they still have some advantages which my kitchen does not provide. If I am in a hurry, I can visit a fast food place and get my meal in two minutes. If I try to eat at home, it will take me up to an hour to cook something.

Some people still prefer eating at home. They do not like the noise of restaurants and want to eat in silence or with relatives.
In conclusion, I would like to say that people should choose whether to eat at home or in the restaurants according to their desire. But my personal preference and recommendation is to eat out .
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Aug 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / Education is long life task. Do u agree or disagree [3]

Education is not only to go to school for learningstudying in school . It also means that people may learnlearning from their familyrelatives , friends, work or by themselves.and personal experience .

Nowadays employers are looking for people who are well educatedwell-educated people
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Aug 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Small town vs. Big city (opportunities, entertainment, job places) [8]

deepakbaniya, thanks for corrections!

dumi....Let me ask you why you use so many dots?
I disagree with you. When I finish a university, I will have opportunity to choose whether to work in a big city or in a town. I will choose where to live, not the job would demand me to choose a place for living
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Aug 7, 2012
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Small town vs. Big city (opportunities, entertainment, job places) [8]

Writing topic: Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in big city. Which place would you prefer to live in?

In a few years I will finish my studying in the university and I will have to decide whether to live in a small town or a big city. As I am eager to get a good job and explore different places, I think I would prefer to live in a city.

Big city life provides many opportunities. First of all, it will be easier for me to find an engineering job in the city. Electrical engineering deals with problems concerning electricity supply. Therefore, a big city can offer me many more vacancies than a small town.

At the weekends, there is a great number of things to do in the metropolis. There are numerous bars, cafes and restaurants where I can go with my friends. Multinational cities have restaurants with different national cuisines. I am fond of Italian food, and if there is an Italian restaurant in the city, I will definitely visit it. .

A night club is an interesting place to visit for young people. There a person can listen to music, make new friends or enjoy a a drink alone. Cultural life of a metropolis is always an entertaining one. I am keen on museums and it would be a pleasure for me to spend several hours a week in front of famous paintings, sculptures or artifacts. On special dates, city offers free exhibitions which are available for everyone who is interested in art.

What's more, cities have better medical facilities than in the countryside. This can at least assure me that if I feel bad, city can provide a high quality help.

In conclusion, while small towns have picturesque nature and pure air, big cities offer countless amount of opportunities and entertainment places. Considering all the benefits, I would choose to live in a big city.
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Aug 7, 2012
Writing Feedback / Studying alone vs. with a group - both sides of the story [6]

Ok, to my mind, studying alone is when you hire a teacher for extra individual studies and group studying means sitting in a classroom with classmates. What does chit-chit mean? I also don't think that we ever "wasted time in cafes to refresh" while studying, that was only at the weekends.

Why should I write about disadvantages of group studies? I already have more than enough(300) words for TOEFL essay and I just explained there while people choose to study in groups.
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Aug 7, 2012
Writing Feedback / Are relationships between people and pets good? [TOEFL] [6]

1) one of the most popular domesticated pats animalS - the dog.
2) such A close relationship. I've actually left it as it was because in the writing topic asks: "Are such relationshipS good?"
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Aug 6, 2012
Writing Feedback / Studying alone vs. with a group - both sides of the story [6]

@amitt, there are two sentences which express my "individual view". here they are:
1) Other people, including myself , believe that it is better to study alone with a teacher and have opportunities to get more teacher's attention and individual approach.

2) From my point of view , there are many advantages in studying individually.

I didn't actually understand the rest of your reply because of numerous mistakes
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Aug 6, 2012
Writing Feedback / Has junk food changed the way people live? [6]

Thanks everyone!
@sophienguyen92v If you read this, tell me whether it is clear for you now :) If not... say what you don't understand.
I revised the essay, green color stands for corrections:

Food is the main source of energy for a human. Throughout the development of human kind, people tried to make their meals tastier and healthier. Nowadays, food companies produce precooked food which can be prepared in a short time . In my opinion, this modern development of food has changed the way people live because it doesn't take much time and skills to be prepared. However, some people are against the easy-to-prepare food because they consider it unhealthy.

Precooked food can help people spend less time on preparing meals. Busy people save time on cooking and have some extra time when they are free from work. In my case, easy-to-prepare food helps me to save time before going to school. For example, for breakfast I eat cereal which does not require any process of cooking. That allows me to get up later and not to waste time on cooking some other food.

Being a bad cook is not a problem anymore. Anyone can have a tasty meal for a fair price these days. In grocery shops you can buy a half prepared meal which you only need to prepare in the microwave oven. For example, I like buying a pizza which I can prepare at home in 15 minutes. Moreover, it is does not cost much money and the quality is very good.

Some people have negative opinion about easy-to-prepare food. They say that we cannot see how this food is prepared on the factory and therefore it can be unhealthy. People who are against precooked food often join an organization which is called "slow food". The members of it protect food biodiversity and traditions of cooking.

In summary, some people do not think that easy-to-prepare food has changed the way we live, but others, including myself , believe that this food has many advantages and soon it will change our lives even more.
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Aug 5, 2012
Writing Feedback / Has junk food changed the way people live? [6]

Food is the main source of energy for a human. Throughout the development of the human kind, people tried to make their food tastier and healthier. Nowadays, the food companies produce which has become easier and faster to prepare. In my opinion, this modern development of food changed the way people live because the cuisine is changing and people spend less time on cooking. However, some people are against the easy-to-prepare food because they consider it unhealthy.

I think that it is really convenient that there appeared new type of food which is easy and fast to prepare. This can help busy people to save time on cooking and have some extra time when they are free from work. In my case, easy-to-prepare food helps me to save time before going to school. For example, for breakfast I eat cereal which do not require any process of cooking. That allows me to get up later and not to waste time on cooking some other food.

Another reason why I think precooked food changed the way people live is that a person nowadays may not be a good cook but still have a tasty meal. In grocery shops you can buy a half prepared meal which you only need to prepare in the microwave oven. For example, I like buying a pizza which I can prepare at home in 15 minutes. Moreover, it is fairly cheap and the quality is very good.

Some people have negative opinion about easy-to-prepare food. They say that we cannot see how this food is prepared on the factory and therefore it can be unhealthy. People who are against precooked food often join an organization which is called "slow food". The members of it protect food biodiversity and traditions of cooking.

In summary, some people do not think that easy-to-prepare food has changed the way we live, but others, including me, believe that this food has many advantages and soon it will change our lives even more.
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Aug 5, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Aunt Caly' - someone that influenced my life [3]

Sometimes, it's hard to line up everyone, since we are so different and quite youngquite young and so different
She respected us. Therefore, sheand demanded respect from us. therefore here is used improperly
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Aug 4, 2012
Writing Feedback / Are relationships between people and pets good? [TOEFL] [6]

Nowadays, having a pet at home is very popular among pairs and lonely people of young and old age. Special parks and playgrounds are organized for one of the most popular domesticated pats - a dog. However, there appears an opinion that such close relationships between people and animals are bad because pets cannot replace children.

In my opinion, domestic pets are justified. First of all, an animal can become a friend of a lonely person. People who have, for example, a tamed dog at home, have to devote much attention to their little friends. Dog owners walk their pets two times a day, buy them food and keep them clean and tidy.

Secondly, I believe that people who take an animal in their home do a good dead. It is a well known fact that there are many homeless dogs. Not all the pet owners bought their pets in a shop. I know many people who gave shelter to homeless animals who could die from starvation.

Nevertheless, some people state that pets are no good. They think that an animal cannot substitute a child and therefore there is no reason to have an animal at home. Some people also say that when animals are tamed, they are deprived from their freedom and always have to obey their master.

To sum up, some people believe that relationships between people and pets is a good thing, while others consider them useless. From my point of view, keeping an animal at home is a generous act and it also provides you with devoted and faithful friend.
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Aug 4, 2012
Writing Feedback / Should companies use young people for work? - [IELTS ] [2]

I will try to express my own opinion and show advantages, disadvantages of this type of policy. - It would be better to write advantages and disadvantages

From one side, from another side. - I don't think this phrase is correct. On the one hand, on the other hand is more common.

To sum up it is something so important to find the way to avoid unemployment and at the same moment increase the number of young employees. - sometimes, not something ?. At the same time, not moment
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Aug 4, 2012
Writing Feedback / Studying alone vs. with a group - both sides of the story [6]

There are many ways to study nowadays. You can study alone or with a group of students. Some people prefer to study with a group because there they can make friends and share their ideas. Other people, including myself, believe that it is better to study alone with a teacher and have opportunities to get more teacher's attention and individual approach.

From my point of view, there are many advantages in studying individually. Firstly, a teacher pays more attention on your work. When there is a big group of students, a teacher is not able to answer all of the questions. But if you study alone, the teacher can help you to eliminate all your misunderstandings. When I study alone with my physics teacher, I always ask him some questions which help me to clarify the topic and even give me some extra information.

Secondly, studying individually allows you to have an individual studying program. That is what group lessons can never provide. It often appears when you need to study one topic more intensive and for a longer time, while another one is well-known for you and you only need to shortly review it. i remember studying with a maths teacher to learn the material which I missed because of the illness. It took me only two weeks to catch up with the school program estimated to be learned in a month. That proves that studying individually is also faster than in a group.

However, many people still like to study in groups. They explain their choice by saying that while studying in a group you can find new friends. People in these groups may have the same interests as you. Another reason why people choose to study in groups is because they can share ideas with other students. For example, while studying in group, students can have discussions and debates on the topic of the lecture they heard. Everyone is allowed to express their opinion, agree or disagree with other students.

To sum up, students who are eager to make new acquaintances and learn other students' points of view choose to study with a group of students. Those who need more teacher's attention and individual approach usually prefer to study alone.
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