Writing Feedback / ielts do you agreewith the private companies support science rather than government [3]

hi ,guys , i am not quite sure my article , could you give me some suggestions about grammers or other advices, thank you so much!

In today 's world, it is private companies rather than the government who pay for and carry out the scientific research.To what extend do you agree or disagree that the advantages overweight its disadvatages?

In the recent days, a more popular phenomenon was coming up with instead the private companies always pay more investment for the science rather than the government who should do this.To explore why this phenomenon would occurred, we need to considerate both rewarding issue and for what kind of role did the government or companies play.

Obiviously, it is no doubt that the companies do that is because they can get a profitable rewarding as the result, which is the best incentive for reviving those companies. The companies, such as Google or Microsoft, have invested in reasearch increasingly as a big part of their cost. The kind of behaviour would not only guarantee its own immaculate productions but take a benefical occupancy in the various and competitive market.

Moreover, we must admit that the government would be lost burden if the companies could take much of investment. It seems to be, not surprisingly, a win-win situation.In addition, the saved budgets for the government could be taken as to fill its financial deficit or invested in the other part of essential, for instance, the infrastucture, elementary education and so on.

In another aspect, what the companies donate to the scientific research is not merely limited to money. It concludes other resources, like intellects, advanced management and well-equipped lab.All the efforts by the companies, in some sense, will be considered as an effective way to value its greatness. As we know, a successful enterprise is not only related to how much profits it made but also links that how many contributions and responsibilities it undertaken.After all, a notable company has profoundly affected to the whole society.

Writing Feedback / IETLS; In China, all the kids have to learn English when they are very young. [3]

Hello,everybody, it is long time to see you. During these days , i made a couple of essays of ielts, could you indicate the problems that exists in my article . Thank you so much.

The first one Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a forengn language at primary school rather than secondary school? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In China, all the kids have to learn English when they were very young. So when is the most appropriate time?Begin with the primary school or when they are getting older?It is a controversial debate over this issue.Some experters,such as linguists suggest it is better for starting at the primary school.I do believe so.

However, there may exsits some problems,such as whether is reasonable.we all known when kids were 3 or 4 years old, their mother language systems are not stable.In other words, a kid can not understand the outside subjects in his or her own language-there may be some graphs or pictures for aiding.Definitely, forced them to remember another language will occur which kinds of centain effects is unknown..Eventually, it may be interrupted their mother language system and made them accomplished nothing.Even worse, they may be lost their own interests to learn a new language.

Neverthless, I still prefer to learn languages in the primary school rather than secondary suchool.Why?I think I can be setted as the negative sample who learn English from high school. Before I started English , I have the stable mother language system which led when I saw a cat, the first reflection in my mind is the word of cat in Chinese. Then I have learned English, how I remember the word of cat in English, the key point is that I always translates it from a Chinese term, completely depending on recition.-the mechanic repeation. I learn other English words in the same way too.What can we see from that? Yes, I almost added the third process-connecting the foreign language with my mother language, rather than the subjects themselves.

In a word, I reclaim my point, one of the benefits you learned foreign language at young ages is you can connect the images with the language itself, regardless of one's mother language. That is very important point for language learning.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL;Should we let children manage money to make them financially responsible adults [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:In order to become financially responsible adults, children should manage their own money at their young age.

In the modern society, some people believe that it is better for children growing while they attempt to earn their own money at a very early age .As oppose that this behavior do some bad effects on the forming of their personality,especially in their adolescence.Indeed , earning at early age can bring some experience of the real society, which can made a real practise about how to living independent .It may also establish a concept of money in case that the young people will save money in their future life when they knew how hard to earn money by themselves.However, base on these positive sides , I still believe that the bad sides which have effect on children are larger than those seem postive.

First of all ,earning at young age will miss something important in your growing. Although we all heard some stories of great man who earned in their childhood and then became succeeded eventually. Yet it is not a rule adapt for everybody. Most of us are ordinary ones, the adolescent time should be utilized in school in order to get some useful knowledges, and then to decide your own future according to our interests.If you leave school for creating a career or pay much attention on earning , this may ocuppy the time you need to wasting in study. Although Bill Gates leaved Harvard as creating Microsoft at his age of 19, he still admitted in a interview that when he looked backward, the most regretful decision he has ever made in the past is leaving school ,because afterward he has gradually realized his knowledges are so limit that he has read a lot of books for compensating.

Apart from that , another bad effect is that way may give you an impressive conception of money.Aldult 's personality is formed based on what they felt when they were young. If a teenager contact the real world too early, the modes of reality will be embeded in their innocent world and their activities also blend with a certain of intensive purpose.Due to that , their behaviors also has some utilitarian conservation and lack of the spirit of social service.If such kind of utilitarianism is expanding , we can imagine that how cool of the community we lived in the future.

Based on these reasons discussed above , I suggest that young people should not manage their money at their young age instead of doing something meaningful.

please give me some advices about opinion and grammer mistakes and some other aspects , thank you so much.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL; 'A man 's manner is a mirror that reflects his virtues' - people to be polite to others [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: In a busy and crowded world, we should not expect people to be polite to others.

Once a celebrity said: A man 's manner is a mirror that reflects his virtues. Recently, the social enviornment we lived with busy noises and crowded spaces in case that people pay less attentions on their behaviors and manners. They are being rude towards others.Due to this phenomenon, someone suggests that we should not expect people to be polite to other. Obviously, I do not agree with such kind of altitudes , the explanations I explored would be stated as following.

First of all, a person with good manner will give others a fine personal impression. Through those impressions , a person was easily to get acquired with others and blended with the community that surrounded him as soon as possible. For example, I worked in a new company, if I am a guy with good manners and treating everyone well, my new collegues will accept me ,even then I will be approved by the employers. In opposite situation if I am being rude, I can not get along well with each other.Finally , I will be fired and have no other choice but lost my job .

Secondly,people will get respect from politeness within each other.Politeness and tender words not only can help the speaker to earn a good reputation but also that encourage the listeners who were in need.A successful corporation must have a relationship with respect and pleasure.There are many more facts have improved that people with politeness are easily to be succeed,because from their behaviors ,they made their partners or opponents to find their own individual dignity.

Finally,the society needs a civilized environment and orders.And a degree of social civilization depend on its people 's qualities.In order to creat a better living environment for ourselves and our offsprings,our behaviors must be asked with politeness and good manners.Benefit from those effective measures , there may be an obvious effect on the reducing of criminal rate.

All in all , I suppose that people should be polite to others in a such busy and crowded world.

Thanks for all of you who give me advices and instructions! Sincerely littlekid986

Writing Feedback / toefl test The place you choose to live has a greater effect on you overall hapiness [5]

The place you choose to live has a greater effect on you overall hapiness than you job does.

Today ,more and more people choose a place to live in relation to a lot of conditions.Generally , most people will considerate the first condition is the distance between the workplace and residence . Apart from that ,others believe the most important condition is depended on the happiness of their lives. I really agree with the latter view ,the reasons would be stated as the followings.

Admittedly , there is a certain advantage of living nearby. If not, it costs a lot of time to drive on the road. For example , if I lived far from my workplace, I would get up early with sleepy eyes and perhaps bear heavy rain in the summer and severe cold temperatures in the dawn of winter . But if I lived nearby, I can get up until ten minutes on the working deadline and walk to my office with eating a sandwich or hambuger.Of course ,it is not my actual working attitude but just giving an extreme example to demonstrate the point as the advantage of living nearby.Besides that, we may have breakfast with our family members sometimes and even have time to bid them before we have to work.

Although it has perfect excuses to live near the workplace,a few people choose that indeed.But why? In my opinion , firstly , job is just a part in our lives but not the whole.We take more considerations on the other sides,such as our health or our family members'hapiness. A place fits to work maybe not a place fits to live.Let us take an example , the place we worked may sit in a big cities where have severe pollutions in the air and lack of clean water.In order to get a better living environment ,we may choose to be settled in the suburban or rural areas although it gets a long distant from the workplace.

In another side,we must admit the life in a serious of variations, and we expect to get what we want. Maybe there is a job of which we were fond but it has some disadvantages including it is located outside our hometown. Would you give up this job for the excuse "oh, it is far from my home." The answer is "NO ,we won't." Obviously,we will choose work we loved and follow our own dreams.

For the two reasons dicussed above , I will choose to live a place with the overall hapiness than the job affects.

Thanks to everyone who give me the advice about this article.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL; We must admit young people in the past were more innocent [4]

This is an indepentent writing in ibt exams .please show me the errors of grammer and the weakness of the article.Thank you so much!And i want to especially thanks to the girl named Annika, thanks for your help!

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
Young people today are more likely to help others than young people were in the past

Nowdays, we usually think teenagers could receive a better education, their intelligence improved by scientific developpment,and they lived in a the modern society which has a great progress than its before.Through these comparisons ,it is naturally to conclude that modern young people are excellent in moral era than young people were in the past.It could means they are more likely to help others or set samples in some ways.However,this view ignored the disadvantages that occured in the highly developpment especially the bad fators which exert an influence on their personality formed, family educations and social impactions.So I do not agree with this view ,and my reasons will list as following.

First at all, although teenagers today are cleverer than that were in the past, they usually fistly focused is what they can obtain while they attempt to supplying their helps .They have their own standards to judge if it is worth to do or not.Meanwhile, the young people in the past would have remembered their duties as if they had tried their best to provide helps when others needed.For example,my order sister told me a story, while my little nephew got trapped in the kindergarten, there is no one stood out to provide help.His classmates were focusing their own things when they noticed him.Contrast to in decades before,when I was in trouble,my classmates dropped their own things at once and walked towards me for giving helps.

Secondly,parents today pay the most of their attention on the children's intellectual developping in order that they neglect the moral education which plays a crucial role in personality formed of their young kids in the early time.Because of this family educated deficiency ,a word"selfish"is as a new character that accurately described as of the new generation.Oppose that situation in decades ago,when we were young ,we have nothing but happiness in our childhood. Those happiness made of simple relationship and less competitions between each other.And we had been told the manner with most honorable is to be a hero, helping or saving others when they are in troubles. It is a period that full of heroic stroies.

Thirdly,I think a part of reasons which caused today's young people would not likely to help other is attributed to the developpment in the moral era has not so fast as those in the economy.Consequently, young people will pay their attentions on how to earn money ,but the good virtues once focused on how to become a good man is fade away.We must admit young people in the past were more innocent than those were in the modern society.The ethics is depended on the values and believes that conveyed by its society.Unfortunately,this priceless values was fading away.

To sum up, I think young people today are not likely to help others than young people were in the past.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Your boss needs to know your strengths for you to succeed; Do you agree? [6]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
Making sure that people such as the manger or your surpervior kown your strength and accomplishment can help you successd .Otherwise you cannot achieve anything.

I am not approved of the following statement which is acclaimed that to make sure the relevant person (better high levels) knows your ablity is the only path to access the success.I will mainly give two evidences which can support my position.

The acknowledge is well known unfortunately but as a brutal truth -every successd guy is talented ,but not every talented guy can success.There is no denying that aquired attentions of people who has already successed in a certain field is better to help us throw ourselves into the role that we have already practised for many times.It probably adds the proportion of success to a young man who has no special background but talented. However, this method also brings some negtive sides to the young men who have been exceeded expectted by their governor, in order to that they may burden a gaint pressure and lose their original creativities.

Firstly, those young people will undertake the gaint pressure from the governor who has already found their excellent capacity including the strength or the accomplishment they revealed.At the beginning ,they will be encouraged by those appreciations and expect themselves to achieve a futher magnificent goal.But as time goes by, the lightness of a beginer was replaced by heaviness of being successful.Finally, a little jeer will strike them down and lose their self-confidence to move on.

Apart from that, their ceations will be trapped by the fames.If someone is overwhelming in a certain field, he may be at a top of his career, he always look at everything as standing in the top of moutain and looking forward, which apparently there is no more progresses in his career.Steve Jobs ,the ackownledged genius, once said,"When I looked backwards,getting fired from Apple was the best things that could have ever happened to me while I felt nothing but frustrating through the course.I became a beginner again ,less pressure about everything.It freeed me to entre one of the most creative period of my life.I am already naked ,there is no reason to follow my heart." From these two reasons we dicussed above, I think making sure the people know your capacity in order that to get some extra help is not the only way to access success.