Writing Feedback / Ielts line graph-percentage of population aged 65 and over [7]

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Cambridge ielts 5, page 29)

The line chart describes the percentage of elderly people whose age is 65 and over in Japan , Sweden and the USA . Overall, the figure indicates an upward trend in all three mentioned countried.

The USA started at just below 10%, which is the highest porportion in comparison to that of Sweden and Japan, 7% and 5%, respectively. The percentage of the old in the USA first witnessed a rapid increase to precisely 15% in 1980. Following a similar patern , the Sweden figure rose to just under 15%. There is then a low period of stabilazition in the porportion of population aged 65 and over in The USA, not until the year 2020 is it predicted to rise dramatically and hit a peak of below 25%, though it is the lowest one compared to the others. On the contrary, the percentage in Sweden fluctuated with an upward trend , overtook that of the USA in 1999 with just under 15%, after that, it is anticipated to rocket to a quarter in 2040. At the other end of the scale, Japan's porportion of the elder remained the lowest in the first 70 years of the period, but then is expected to suddenlly rocket to 27% in 2040, which makes Japan become the country with largerst percentage of people aged 65 and over in 3 countries

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Writing Feedback / Ielts-Tables : Students'results in a math test [3]

The tabe gives an overview of how students in different sex groups and school levels have performed in a standardized math test in the percentage scale. It can be clearly seen that the point level between 34 and 66 has been achieved by a majority of students but only a small proportion can score higher than 66 points.

School girls have proved to be better than boys at math as 9 out of 10 female students score higher than 33 points and 15% of them has the results between 67 points and 100 points. On the contrary, there is only 75% of male students can score higher than 33 points and a mere 1% score between 67 and 100

In consideration of school levels, Upper Secondary School has the largest proportion of student scoring between 67 points and 100 points, which is exactly 50% , followed by Lower Secondary School with just over 40%. Notably, the greatest percentage of student having the result of 34 - 66 points, which accounts for more than a half, goes to Primary School far higher than that of Lower and Upper Secondary School, which make up 19% and 37% respectively. At the other end of the scale, Lower Secondary School has the highest figure of student score the lowest- between 0 points and 33 points (39%), which is considerably higher than Primary School (28%) and triple that of Upper Secondary School.

Overall, female students perform better than male students in math and the proportion of student scoring in 3 different point levels varies significantly across genders and school grades.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS-TASK1-Describing changes taking place at an island [4]

TOPIC: The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelents.

The maps show the development which took place at an island in an attempt to turn the area into a tourist attraction.
Before the alteration, the island was a much greener area with more-opened spaces . There was a beach in the west shore of the island , a few trees distributed on the east and west parts and no buildings. After a myriad of changes, although the number of trees remained, the island had converted into a modern area with many tourist facilities.

There were two accomdation groups erecting in form of huts with footpaths coming within each. In terms of beach, it had been built into a swimming spot connected to the western accomodation units also by a footpath. Futher constructions were a restaurant emerged in the north of the area and a reception built in the island's centre. A vehicle track ran from the restaurant to south , surrounded the reception on its way . It can be seen that sailing boats were also put into use after the construction of a pier on the south shore of the island.

Overall, a comparion between the two maps reveals a transformation from a large rural area to a luxury resort.

Maps: englishwithyeasir.blogspot.co.uk/2013/04/ielts-writing-part-i.html

Writing Feedback / Compare and contrast: home-cooked food vs fast food [3]

The controversy of whether fast food is superior to home-cooked food has been long in question. This essay will elaborate on the similarities and dissimilarities of these aforementioned types of food.

There are many commonalities between the two. The first noticable similarity is that they both provide a variety of choices. There are a number of selections available in fast food restaurants as well as at home since we can't eat the same things on a daily basis. In addition, both types of food are often very delicious. It is a fact that fast food has become more popularized all over the world as more people are taking their favours of it. Home-cooked meals can certainly be yummy since they are prepared and served in regards to individuals' taste . Lastly, each types of food can be relatively inexpensve. Fast food are usually very cheap as it is intentionally made to be available for all levels of income. Home cooking cost will also be resonable as long as the ingredient prices are carefully considered.

Despite the similaritires, they also have some striking distinctions. One major difference concerns the speed of production. Fast food are clearly much faster than home cooked food as it is prepared by a lot of staffs at the same time. Secondly,home cooked food is greatly healthier than fast food due to frequent use of oil in the latter. It has been proved that uncontrolled use of oil in daily meals is the major cause of obesity , diabete and many other kinds of diseases , it is also undoubt that home meals usually contain more good nutritions than fast food. Another difference is convenience. Fast food is always already made and able to be carried everywhere while home cooked food can't be portable.

To put it in a nutshell, fast food and home cooked meals are similar in many ways but very different in others. Personally, I prefer home cooked meals as I like preparing my own meals and can be sure of the ingredients. In addition , enjoing a meal at home with my family is a great way to end my busy day.

Writing Feedback / International and traditional music should be treasured and respected equally. [7]

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

There is little room to doubt that music has been playing a privotal role in our daily lives.However, the debate over whether traditional music is superior to international music has long been in question and worldwide music lovers are deeply divided over this controversy. This essay will elaborate on these aforementioned issues.

First of all,music is the food of our souls.It provides tired minds with a healthy entertainment and opens a way for us to escape from all the hustle and bustle of lives. Nowadays people can't live without music.It's such a magic pill to cure bad moods and heal emotional wounds. Secondly, music can be a stimulus to encourage us to go through the ups and downs of lives. In addition, there are meaningful songs that teach invaluable life lessons and speak up for things that words are unable to describe.

Turning to which kind of music is more essential. I am convinced that although traditional music should be preserved as national belongings, mordern music also plays a significant part in bettering our lives. On the one hand, traditional music represents for a region's identity as it undergoes momentus changes in one's history.Traditional music also contributes a great deal in passiong down cutural heritages to the next generations and helps buit their pride in their mother country's uniqueness.On the other hand, international music brings worldwide citizens closer as through music, mutual understandings and friendship can be attained across cutures and global peace is also developed.

To sum up,music has had a fundamental impact on man kind since the begining of our story and each kinds of music has its own merits which I believe should be treasured and respected equally.

Writing Feedback / Adult Education; Bar chart and pie chart illustrations [5]

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart
shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people
think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The bar chart describes the various reasons for adult's decision to study further.The pie chart illustrates the result of survey about how the education tuition should be shared.

The main reasons for this decision lie in having interest in subject and gaining qualification,accouting for 40% and 38% respectively. About one fifth of adults decide to study further because it is helpful for their current job or they want to improve propects of promotion or enjoy learning. In contrast, there is only a minority of 12% making this decision in order to change their job and a percentage of 9% wants to meet new people by studying.

The pie chart points out that 40% of people think that students should pay for their own tuition fees. Nearly similar, the proportion of people wants employers to help fund education tuition is 35% and a quarter believes it is an obligation for taxpayers to pay for it.