huyentrang
Sep 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] For me the influence of my friends was more highlighted than impact of the school [17]
Would prefer to do st rather than (do) st else
Would prefer to do st rather than (do) st else
huyentrang
Sep 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; you have enough money to purchase a house or a business. Which one you buy? [5]
I think that your examples are not common
Your conclusion is not ok
I think that your examples are not common
Your conclusion is not ok
huyentrang
Sep 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] A/D The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits [6]
the word they in the second sentence should be change into it.
the content of your writing is very good
Try your best!!!!
the word they in the second sentence should be change into it.
the content of your writing is very good
Try your best!!!!
huyentrang
Sep 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Students should be organised into groups or study alone [4]
need to consider====>need to considering
i think you should have another paragraph to answer the question: which one do you think is more effective
need to consider====>need to considering
i think you should have another paragraph to answer the question: which one do you think is more effective
huyentrang
Sep 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / Should we learn about the country & the cultures and lifestyles to learn a language? [7]
i think you should express that understanding culture can help you use this language more exact. You talk about culture too much.
hope these can heelp you
i think you should express that understanding culture can help you use this language more exact. You talk about culture too much.
hope these can heelp you
huyentrang
Sep 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] the ability to relate well to people is more important. [4]
ability to relate well to people and studying===>study
i think your writing is not good. the introduction and conclusion are not good. the content is not really satisfy and some sentences are not clear.
Try your best!!!!
ability to relate well to people and studying===>study
i think your writing is not good. the introduction and conclusion are not good. the content is not really satisfy and some sentences are not clear.
Try your best!!!!
huyentrang
Sep 4, 2013
Writing Feedback / Ielts-Tables : Students'results in a math test [3]
In consideration of school levels, Upper Secondary School has the largest proportion of student scoring between 67 points and 100 points, which is exactly 50% , followed by Lower Secondary School with just over 40%(and the least is...)
I think your writing is rather good. Try your best!!!
In consideration of school levels, Upper Secondary School has the largest proportion of student scoring between 67 points and 100 points, which is exactly 50% , followed by Lower Secondary School with just over 40%(and the least is...)
I think your writing is rather good. Try your best!!!
huyentrang
Sep 4, 2013
Writing Feedback / People are not paying attention to environmental protection [3]
QESTION: people are not paying attention to environmental protection. What is the cause and suggestions to deal with this issue.
ANSWER:
Pollution is becoming an extremely serious problem, which takes effect people all over the world. Iroically, however, people are not paying attention to protect environment.
There are some reasons to explain why people are unaware of invironment. First of all, due to the shortage of media and knowledge, many people do not understand how important the invironment is. They really do not know that littering, especially nilon can have bad effect to their environmet, even their health. In addition, people concentrate on profit too much to think of environment. As a result, many companies discharge wastewater into lakes to reduce cost.
Therefore, some sollutions should be given to cope with this problem. Government should help people understand about the importance of environment, propagandize them to protect the environment and fine heavily everyone who damage the environment. Especially, all people have to rise their sense of environmental protection to help improve the invironment.
In conclusion, invironment plays an important role in our life so everyone should try to protect our environment as well as our life.
P/S: my writing is very bad. please help me correct: grammar structure, use of word and the content of my essay. thank you very much
QESTION: people are not paying attention to environmental protection. What is the cause and suggestions to deal with this issue.
ANSWER:
Pollution is becoming an extremely serious problem, which takes effect people all over the world. Iroically, however, people are not paying attention to protect environment.
There are some reasons to explain why people are unaware of invironment. First of all, due to the shortage of media and knowledge, many people do not understand how important the invironment is. They really do not know that littering, especially nilon can have bad effect to their environmet, even their health. In addition, people concentrate on profit too much to think of environment. As a result, many companies discharge wastewater into lakes to reduce cost.
Therefore, some sollutions should be given to cope with this problem. Government should help people understand about the importance of environment, propagandize them to protect the environment and fine heavily everyone who damage the environment. Especially, all people have to rise their sense of environmental protection to help improve the invironment.
In conclusion, invironment plays an important role in our life so everyone should try to protect our environment as well as our life.
P/S: my writing is very bad. please help me correct: grammar structure, use of word and the content of my essay. thank you very much
huyentrang
Sep 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Studying the past can help us better understand present or not [4]
successful ==> success
i think you should have one paragraph to talk about your own opinion.
successful ==> success
i think you should have one paragraph to talk about your own opinion.
huyentrang
Sep 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS letter ; Changing the booking of travel abroad [3]
i think you should put your purpose of this letter on the first
i think you should put your purpose of this letter on the first
huyentrang
Sep 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / full time university students spend most of time studying or doing other activities [3]
It can not be denied that more and more student in univerrsity spend most of their time studying. However, in my opinion, it is very neccessary for them to do other
activities such as playing sport and participating in social activities.
First of all, if students in university concentrate only on studying without playing some sport games, their health will be affected seriosly. For example,students can become fat or even overweight. moreover, studying too much also make students become stressfull. As a result, even ěf students study extremely hard, they can not study as well as they want
In addition, beside studying,students in university should also take part in some social activities as doing volunteer works They can help the old and disable people to do their housework. they also can make our country more beautiful by clean streets and propagandize people to protect our environment. By this way,students not only contribute for life but they also study a lot, which will support them very much for their studying in university and in the future.
In conclusion, studying is very important for every student in university but it is not all. Students should do other usefull activities so that they can develop more perfectly.
It can not be denied that more and more student in univerrsity spend most of their time studying. However, in my opinion, it is very neccessary for them to do other
activities such as playing sport and participating in social activities.
First of all, if students in university concentrate only on studying without playing some sport games, their health will be affected seriosly. For example,students can become fat or even overweight. moreover, studying too much also make students become stressfull. As a result, even ěf students study extremely hard, they can not study as well as they want
In addition, beside studying,students in university should also take part in some social activities as doing volunteer works They can help the old and disable people to do their housework. they also can make our country more beautiful by clean streets and propagandize people to protect our environment. By this way,students not only contribute for life but they also study a lot, which will support them very much for their studying in university and in the future.
In conclusion, studying is very important for every student in university but it is not all. Students should do other usefull activities so that they can develop more perfectly.
