Undergraduate / great culture and location; University of Michigan - Supplemental Essay (#2) [5]

prompt: (Required for all applicants. 500 words maximum) Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests?

response: Well to start off I am attracted to the University of Michigan as a whole because of its great culture and location. Out of all of the college towns worldwide Ann Arbor is consistently ranked among the best so the prospect of possibly. Another one of the reasons why I was attracted to the University of Michigan was its unique learning community's philosophy. When I was looking at colleges initially on of the few requirements that I had was the college needed to be bigger than my high school (around twelve-hundred students). So the University of Michigan definitely fit that standard, however initially I was a little bit cautious of jumping to that big on an extreme. However when I was able to tour the campus my guide pointed out all of the different communities that you can join and inadvertently be a part of. She also brought up a very good point that it is a lot easier to make a big cool smaller than the other way around. Another reason why I am so attracted to the University of Michigan and specifically the college of literature, science, and art is the many reheard opportunities. In this current day and age one of the most important things that you can do during your time in college is do influential research and get published. Research is also especially important when Research is also especially important when you're looking to go into medicine like I am. At Michigan there is even a learning community that you can join soul to help in finding research opportunities. One of the last qualities of the University of Michigan that I plan on taking of advantage of would be the dual degree program. Currently I have a fairly good idea of what kind of job I could see myself having but the ability to try multiple areas is very comforting. Also I plan on taking classes in many different areas of study just so I can make sure that I am majoring in the right field of study, and since University of Michigan offers thousands of classes to underclassmen that will be very easy for me to do. The final aspect of Um that I would take advantage of is the sprawling recreational teams system that is in place. Growing up I always had a passion of sports which eventually led me to play varsity soccer for two years, so having the ability to still play informally is very exciting to me.

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*Please be as straight forward as possible, I don't need people to lie to me to build up my self confidence. I know that I suck at writing so it would be much more useful to list 1,000,000 things I need to change rather than.... Oh thats a great essay. I wont be offended I promise!:)*

Undergraduate / 'My time in highschool' - University of Michigan - Supplemental Essay (#1) [3]

prompt: (Required for all applicants. Approximately 250 words) everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it.

Response: Societies' High school years are almost universally defined by an intrinsic yeaning to fit in. Due to that intrinsic nature of pubescent young adults many diverse communities or cliques are created. During my time at my high school I found myself with many of the same people period after period, year after year. Eventually that group that was drawn together by similar course loads, mostly A.P. and honors, fragmented into two sub groups. One group was equally fascinated with academics and extracurricular activities; the other was more interested in electronics and academics. I eventually drifted towards the group that had an affinity towards sports. Many of the kids in that community, including myself, were varsity level athletes that still had a passion for knowledge and self-improvement. That unique blend of athletics, community service, and academics made that community especially desirable to me because it covered most of my interests. The other nice thing about that community is the sports that the athletes play was very diverse. I played the role as the only soccer player and Mock trial participant. Almost every major sport was represented n our group, almost serving as a UN of the sports world in our school. Having comfortable mixture of all the major sports which really allowed this community to be eclectic and unique from many other communities that the participants could have otherwise been a part of.

I was a unique piece of patchwork in the quilt that was our community. (where should I insert this?)
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*Please help me, I am a very smart student. However I SUCK at writing so feel feel to be blundt or critical, just then please help me fix my essay! Thanks!*

Undergraduate / arts and sciences - Northwestern application essay (250 words) [6]

Prompt: What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying - that make you want to attend the University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified? (250 words)

Response: Throughout my high school career I realized a couple of things that I am looking for in a college. Since I grew up in the suburbs I have gotten fairly accustomed to a fairly diverse cultural scene so the aspects of being within a stone's throw of the cultural epicenter of the Midwest excites me a lot. Chicago has everything from the best restaurants in the world to world class sports teams, so I really couldn't expect anything more out of a city. It also helps that Northwestern is located in Evanston because I know that even though big cities are full of excitement they can also overwhelm you at times. The campus at northwestern is also another big draw for me. It lake front location and perfectly manicured buildings make it feel like the nicest campus in America and the perfect place to retreat from when returning from a busy day in Chicago. That perfect mixture of culture and seclusion is something that is very rare in a college and an aspect of northwestern that I would very much look forward to utilizing frequently. Also the Weinberg College of arts and sciences provides an innumerable amount of possible classes. One of the things that I most enjoyed during high school was the ability to choose my own path so the possibility of choosing between more than two-thousand classes really excites me. I will use all of those choices to really explore my career choices and experiment with what I like and don't like.

Notes: this is not heavily edited, but i want to take a different approach to this essay. Normally I spend hours ans hours editing my essays then have someone give me a couple of good ideas which causes me to tear my essay apart. This time I want to get feedback first! Thanks in advance.

Undergraduate / I have been playing soccer since I was four; Duke University ; Extracurricular activities [9]

PROMPT: Please discuss one of your extracurricular activities that has required a particularly significant time commitment or that has played a meaningful role in your personal development. (Please limit your response to no more than 150 words.)

Response: Out of all of the extracurricular activities I'm in soccer has most significantly impacted my personal development. I have been playing soccer since I was four, so saying it is a major time commitment is an understatement. Through my time playing soccer my personality developed for being egocentric to selfless. That development also taught me to appreciate the value of teamwork. . Once I realized that it was teamwork that set apart the great teams from the average teams I began to look beyond myself and become more focused on my team's success. Now I didn't perceive teams as just a collection of independent players but more of a singular unit; winning and losing as a group. That development made me change to way I acted on and off the soccer field.

Notes: First of all thank you for taking the time to read my essay and give me constructive criticism. Also my essay is 132 words and the limit is 150, so i can add a a sentence or two. I have a 31 on the act and I'm in the top 15% of my graduating class so I really need to do well on this essay to have a shot at getting accepted. Thanks again!:)