alextloft28
Oct 14, 2013
Undergraduate / I have been playing soccer since I was four; Duke University ; Extracurricular activities [9]
PROMPT: Please discuss one of your extracurricular activities that has required a particularly significant time commitment or that has played a meaningful role in your personal development. (Please limit your response to no more than 150 words.)
Response: Out of all of the extracurricular activities I'm in soccer has most significantly impacted my personal development. I have been playing soccer since I was four, so saying it is a major time commitment is an understatement. Through my time playing soccer my personality developed for being egocentric to selfless. That development also taught me to appreciate the value of teamwork. . Once I realized that it was teamwork that set apart the great teams from the average teams I began to look beyond myself and become more focused on my team's success. Now I didn't perceive teams as just a collection of independent players but more of a singular unit; winning and losing as a group. That development made me change to way I acted on and off the soccer field.
Notes: First of all thank you for taking the time to read my essay and give me constructive criticism. Also my essay is 132 words and the limit is 150, so i can add a a sentence or two. I have a 31 on the act and I'm in the top 15% of my graduating class so I really need to do well on this essay to have a shot at getting accepted. Thanks again!:)
PROMPT: Please discuss one of your extracurricular activities that has required a particularly significant time commitment or that has played a meaningful role in your personal development. (Please limit your response to no more than 150 words.)
Response: Out of all of the extracurricular activities I'm in soccer has most significantly impacted my personal development. I have been playing soccer since I was four, so saying it is a major time commitment is an understatement. Through my time playing soccer my personality developed for being egocentric to selfless. That development also taught me to appreciate the value of teamwork. . Once I realized that it was teamwork that set apart the great teams from the average teams I began to look beyond myself and become more focused on my team's success. Now I didn't perceive teams as just a collection of independent players but more of a singular unit; winning and losing as a group. That development made me change to way I acted on and off the soccer field.
Notes: First of all thank you for taking the time to read my essay and give me constructive criticism. Also my essay is 132 words and the limit is 150, so i can add a a sentence or two. I have a 31 on the act and I'm in the top 15% of my graduating class so I really need to do well on this essay to have a shot at getting accepted. Thanks again!:)