FrankZheng
Dec 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS task two essay about job satisfaction [3]
Please POST THE QUESTION with your essay.
1,
Give a reason why we are more cautious.
2, The usage of the verb 'contribute'.
Something contributes to ....
3,
The second sentence just repeats your previous idea. Perhaps , it is better to give a reason or result.
4,
5,
I am not sure with the word 'mismatch'. But, 'imbalance' is not appropriate here.
6,
7,
Restructure it to emphasize the result.
I believe that thefar distance between the reality and the employees' requirements expectations could becomewould be lessen, if governments or any one with superior position, start to consider the mentioned factors.
By the way , I don't think that the fact can be changed with the government's involvement .
Please POST THE QUESTION with your essay.
1,
Admittedly, people are nowadays more cautious about choosing a job.
Give a reason why we are more cautious.
2, The usage of the verb 'contribute'.
Something contributes to ....
3,
Generally, the amount of salary which employees are paid, can be contributed to job satisfaction. To explain it more, employees tend to be more satisfied with their jobs when their wages commensurate their knowledge, skill and experiences.
The second sentence just repeats your previous idea. Perhaps , it is better to give a reason or result.
4,
sounds disappointing and can affectsaffect the employees satisfaction withfrom the job.
5,
because of the imbalancemismatch between the salaries and employees experiences, skills and knowledge
I am not sure with the word 'mismatch'. But, 'imbalance' is not appropriate here.
6,
although things in reality differ from things incould not meet the employees' expectation
7,
I believe if governments or any one with superior position, start to consider the mentioned factors, the far distance between the reality and the employees requirements could become lessen.
Restructure it to emphasize the result.
I believe that the
By the way , I don't think that the fact can be changed with the government's involvement .