Writing Feedback / 'Game is imagination bowed three dimension'; important for adults and children [6]

Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children

　　Nowadays, games is very famous for youngster and mature. Moreover, adults play games for loosing stress and children play game for hobby. fun sometimes gives advantage and disadvantages depend on folk view about it. My position any middle about that statement.

　　
　　Games is imagination bowed three dimension. There are many people like games. Because it gives advantages and disadvantages especially for adults. Playing fun got advantages such as loosing stress, hobby and spend time. For examples, my friend who plays games at weekend has hobby and makes him enjoy and refresh. Disadvantages games make adults becomes game mania. So, he is lazy to work. For instance, my old brother who becomes obsession play games resigns from his job. This example clearly show, games which sometimes become important for living. gives good effect and bad effect.

　　
　　There is statement, games which influence develop children gives good an effect and bad influence. Almost children like games such as adventure, sports, racing. Furthermore, for children games which is playing enjoy make feel happy childhood. Bad effectually which hands out by games is youngster become lazy to school and study. In particular, there are many pupil truant and hang out in place rental game. On the other hand, games give good influence to others like sharpen brain so making pupil is clever. To illustrate, "onet" is game for sharpen brain, many pupil plays game it for practicing brain intelligence. This example makes it clearly that, games obtain benefits for children and mature.

　　
　　In summary, games give not only advantage but also disadvantages especially for adult and children. In this case, some people play game depends on requirement, whether is it good influence or not.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Children should begin learning a foreign language; 'every-day habit' [10]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Education is notable for human life that start from youngster. In addition, foreign language include schooling. There many levels to study foreign language like children level, teenagers and adults. There is statement that children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. I agree with the statement. Furthermore, my reason that language is habit and gives skill to children.

Studying language is habit because we should to repeat every-day. Practice is good a method which uses for studying foreign language. It should begin from children, cause it makes habit on children with way practice. In instance, nowadays play group has studied foreign language to children. Because, the teacher believe that learn foreign language from offspring. it is obvious that, implementation foreign language is better from children. Therefore, making be easy to construct habit.

Skill is ability someone about knowledge which more professional. To getting skill needs time. Therefore, if skill continue to use then increasingly expert. In this case, foreign English is studied from children then it skill increase to future. In particular, children who practice English different with pupil does not study English. Because, children who study English have skill. This example makes it clear that, if pupil learn English start school have more capability than others.

To conclude, youngster should inaugurate study English start from play group. Moreover, foreign language is habit and hand out ability to children.

Writing Feedback / Grievance is unsatisfaction about quality; complaint by writing more effective [4]

When people need to complain about a product or poor service, some people to complain in writing and others prefer to complain in person. Which way do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Grievance is unsatisfaction about quality. Usually, folk complaint about goods and poor merit. There are two ways grievance likes writing or face to face. Actually, the both choose it similar purpose to accomplish a complaint. I prefer grievance by writing. Therefore, it is economical cost and waste time.

Quality Assurance is guarantee about product quality, when customer gets defect product or poor service therefore QA receive about grievance client. In this case, customer sends complaint by writing because for thrifty cost. Sometimes, folk prefer writing because they have not tome for meeting face to face. So that, writing is alternative to complaint. There are two kinds send complaint by writing. Firstly. We send grievance by email which type writing prefer by almost people. Secondly, writing complaint by post. Usually, it grievance send document and things which relation with complaint. For instance. ADR group is company assembly oil filter. Everyday, it always receive writing about complaint defect filter and kinds of complaint writing and post. Because, almost people think send complaint by writing is saving cost. So, i prefer complaint by writing because saving cost.

I prefer complaint by writing because we do not waste time. Usually, we need time for complaint to person. Because, we should have enough time meet person. So, complaint by writing is more comfortable than another method and waste time. For example, Mr. Anton is manager QA at PT. PJM which is customer PT. XXX. He has many activity at company. One day, he want to complaint about his product but Mr. Anton does not time for meet person. After that, he always send writing. Because, writing is saving time. So, if we complaint to meet person is waste time.

In conclusion, complaint by writing more effective than meet person. Because, complaint by writing gives benefits such as economical cost and waste time.

Writing Feedback / 'culture of conserve'; company should give money to support the arts [8]

A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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There are many company ways rapprochement to society with give present. Otherwise, folk gives proposal to enterprise as donate to support arts traditional. Company is better choose give some money to support art. Reason, it gives effect positive to society such as increase of arts traditional, culture of conserve, and introduce culture to children.

Traditional arts is heritage ancestor that we should keep it and to conserve. Therefore, we not only keep and conserve traditional of art but also study about it. Reason, many history in traditional arts make we proud about culture of Indonesia. In particular, Bandung has many traditional of arts especially WAYANG. Otherwise, Folk of West Java is like its art. Cause, telling annals society of West Java like life and struggle about patriot. So, if company supports about arts be going to give good effect to society.

Culture of conserve is obligation to citizens of Indonesia. Therefore, if we do not to conserve it will extinct. Rather, civilization of traditional is important and a unique of Indonesia which becoming famous. For instance, World is know that Indonesia is country has many culture and it makes interest tourist from other country. So, company will follow to culture of conserve in Indonesia.

There are many children have forgot about culture especially traditional of arts. Moreover, we should introduce about traditional of art from a little child. Further, youngster has loved to culture. In this case, needing supports from parents, teacher, and government to acquaint culture. To illustrate, Keraton of Jogjakarta gives knowledge about culture especially traditional of arts to children is free which has purpose youngster never forget about their civilization. It is clearly that, company will help society to introduce about culture to children if they give support to folk.

To conclude, Company should gives money that gives benefits to society such as develop of arts traditional, culture improve, and introduce culture to children. . So that, present has used for support civilization around society.

Writing Feedback / 'People need food, fashion, and health' - advertisements may improve our lives [6]

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Other say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Advertisement which is information to some people is related with need people. Advertisement gives much information to people such as food, fashion, and health. I agree advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

Firstly, everybody needs food because some of people necessary food to energy. Television often shows promotion about food such as noodle and meal consume for a living. For example, if we are watching television usually there is a promotion offer about food product like a noodle. It clearly that advertisement gives information about new product. So, we know it useful for our lives.

Secondly, Advertisement not only promotion food, but also it promotion about fashion. It useful for people because it needs style. There are many kinds about style such as T-shirt and veil. For example, television always advertising veil model. Where it wears to fashion in Idul Fitri. It obvious that advertisement which makes easy us gives many benefits.

Lastly, advertisement is an information tool for giving to people. Advertisement often promotion about health such as medicine and health tools. For example, television, radio, internet and magazine always promotion about advertisement health, the purpose promotion advice about health to people. It example clearly that advertisement encourages us to healthy life. So, advertisement useful to human life in the world.

In conclusion, advertising can improve our lives where all of people need food, fashion, and health. So, we know about them from advertisement. furthermore, advertisement gives the best product to need our lives.

Writing Feedback / I prefer to live in small town, big city is terrible and have much pollution [4]

Some people prefer to live in small town, others prefer to live in big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Everybody says to wish a life comfort and peace. Some of people say about living in a small town more too, but all of people say live in the big city more comfort and peace than inhabit in a small city. Why have people expectation occupy in the big city? The reason is on job field, big entrepreneurship opportunity. Actually big city is terrible and much pollution. I prefer living in a small town, because it is a little pollution and community friendly. Small city not only does not pollution, but also its much opportunity to entrepreneurship.

Society is friendly in a small city, they life based on to help one another. Otherwise live on the small town always near with neighbors, because they honor each another neighbor. For example, Bogor is a small town and it society is friendly because Buintenzorg of people always honor to another person. To help neighbors an person become habit usually does it in Ramadhan. Its is clearly that live in a small town is happy. So, inhabit in the big city is different because people always busy in the big city and they do not know each neighbor.

Jakarta which is metropolis has big pollution and it has a street of busy. It is the reason what I do not like living in the big city. Reside in a small town is not pollution because a small town seldom any vehicle. For example, Some of people Kediri use a bicycle for their activity such as they go to school, go to office, and they go to market always use a bicycle. It example clearly that people use bicycle in Kediri to decrease pollution. So, small town has polluted more a less than big city.

It conclusion that live in a small town is more comfortable than big city because small town has society friendly and the pollution is more a less than big city.

Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers? YES! 'mother always give you motivation, and love' [13]

As we know that role of parents important to growth youngster because father always give her adoration to her child which it never change anything. There are many factors about children of growth be better at around circumstance that its influence from father become the best teachers to children.

Everybody in the world will need parents because they always become the best educator and they hand out the study to walk, to talk, and study about love. That all studied based on their adoration because parents are the first teacher to youngster. For example, when the children have age ten months, he said "MAMA" or "PAPA". It is clear that the parents' always hand out more study to their children other that they can growth become a success and he has good attitude. So the statement about parents are the best teacher is right because everybody feels about it.

Attitude is important to youngster because it determinant future of children. Father always hand out study about attitude to her child, however attitude is important to children. For example, my friend has a bad attitude because he is naughty but their parents keep adoration. All mothers think that children are award. So father always to advise if children are naughty. It is example clearly that the roles parents also important for determining child's attitude and the parents influence youngster's attitude.

Some of people said the parents are friend to juvenile because they near with her mother. There are many kinds why are parents as friend to children? Because they discuss place if children got trouble, parents play friend, and sometimes study together. For example, If you who got trouble can discuss with your father, because parents like an angel, and they become solved problem.

In conclusion that parents are the best teacher where mother always give you motivation, and love. Parents not only the best teacher, but also friend to children.

Writing Feedback / Technology become Culture - big effect to our lives [7]

[b]Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reason and examples to support your opinion.

Now days, technology development in the world. Because with technology makes easy our lives. Modern technology becomes need life because every body need technology to business, communication and education. However if modern technology is creating a single world culture will give several effect to our lives.

When modern technology becomes culture then every body in the need technology and it becomes life style. There are many people agree about that statement because modern technology is very help human life to business, education, and life style. So if modern technology will create new culture and it makes easy life. There are many kinds modern technology such as Cellular, Note book, and Laptop. They become life styling and need to people.

However, i disagree about that statement because if modern technology is creating is a single world culture will give negative effect to our lives. If modern technology is creating culture in this world then people will depends on technology and it will give bad character effect to people. For example there are many students of elementary school have bad characters because they influence from modern technology like they watch blue film. So modern technology is creating bad culture to human life because technology gives negative effect.

In conclusion that statement about modern technology gives negative effect and it is creating bad culture and modern technology changes mindset people who is better become bad character. So modern technology can not say create a single world culture because it broke our lives.