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sush2   
May 7, 2014
Writing Feedback / GRE Issue Essay: Kindly check the response and advice accordingly. [6]

In industries, automation has helped to increase the growth of products

the productivity.

My correction is not mandate, you are still right in your sentence. I just made it more clear. Throughout your essay you have maintained consistency. Its very impressive.
sush2   
May 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: Problems encountered by students in abroad [9]

Topic: Many people choose to study at university in another country.What kind of problems do you think they would encounter and what are the positive aspects of a decision like this??

Nowadays, Many students are interested to study abroad. Studying in foreign countries is not easy and is quite expensive . Aside of being costly, studies in other countries has its benefits as well as drawbacks of its own kind.By analyzing the problems faced by students in foreign universities will show this.

First of all, Many of the young people who study in another countries will face the problem of language barrier because there would be always a difference between native and nonnative speakers. As a result, it sometimes may lead to alienation of residential students from nonresidential students. This in turn will make the students feel that they are a threat to each other.For example, recently there were news frequently in a news channel that there were clashes occurring between Indian and Australian students more often in Australia.

Secondly, there will be cultural differences among students who hail from various countries and backgrounds. Thus, students who hail from same country with similar backgrounds try to form as a group. This will further worsen the healthy environment in a class and would tend to create a rift among students. As a result, the main qualities of students such as unity,friendliness and cooperative to each other will completely dissolve in their meaning.However, Being educated in abroad will provide a chance to youth to explore multiple cultures and learn different customs followed by foreigners and spread the importance of their own culture.

To conclude, though students may have to face few concerns related to language and cultures, they certainly get benefits from studying abroad.I strongly believe that, one can have international standards of education facilities, which is the main purpose of students for going abroad.
sush2   
May 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Government investment in the arts to make better their country [5]

investment several money

It can't be several money, you can mention it as "huge money".
I can see your ideas in your essay, which are pretty good. But you have to organize in a proper manner without grammatical and spelling mistakes. Try practicising these areas
sush2   
May 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2:Dressing appropriately is important or not?? [7]

Hi pahan,

I am in consummate accord with the people, who prefer to dress on situation basis . ----- it means "I agree with those people, who prefer to dress according to occassion." .

Can you pls tell me how is it wrong, so that i rectify it. I am really not good at writing.
sush2   
May 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2:How important is it for students to have homework?? [5]

Topic: Why do you think teachers give homework to students?How important is it for students to have homework?Are there any other ways of revising school lessons?Perhaps homework should be abolished?Give your opinion about this?

Many people are of the opinion that homework is essential for students to keep them in touch with academics effectively, where as others hold a view that children's association with studies should be restricted to school and may not be carried out to home. I completely agree with the statement that home assignments are crucial for any child to practice and memorize their knowledge.It would be further analyzed in detail below.

In my view point, teachers give exercises to students to complete at home so as to make sure that they focus on studies even after school and to improve their efficiency in academics. Also, this practice will let parents to observe how their children are performing in studies and to know their weak subjects if any. As a result of this, parents can take special care of those weak subjects and arrange separate tuition for that subject in order to improve it.For instance, I was weak in Mathematics at school days and my parents came to know this while I was doing my home work. Then they sent me to tuition which helped me to improve myself.

Further more, assignments are helpful for self assessment. Each student would come to know where they stand in their progress, if they take up these exercises at home without assistance of a teacher or other students. So that, they would understand how much effort they need to put to be on par with rest of the class.For example, a student can easily ascertain his abilities by working at home everyday and can get necessary guide from teachers the next day itself if he is unable to replicate what he thought at class on that day.This will enable them to better understand future lessons,which are dependent on previous topics.

Though there are other forms to revise lessons like monthly exams and yearly exams, these are not as effective as daily practice at home.It is not possible to an instructor to examine each student on a daily basis whether they are following the lessons or not.So it is our own responsibility to self evaluate ourselves and of course this duty lies with parents too.This can be achieved be having home works.

In Conclusion, I insist that giving students home assignments is a way of providing a chance to self assess them and in long run encouraging them to outperform in the class by overcoming their own drawbacks. Thus the idea of removing homework completely is not supportable.
sush2   
May 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / The prons and cons of the Internet [7]

Apart from above suggestions, it would be great if you make your paragraphs almost equal in size.. :)
sush2   
May 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: PAYING TAX OR NOT [6]

I do not see any problem with the essay except that the introduction and conclusion are very short where you need more attention. Hope this helps.
sush2   
May 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2:Dressing appropriately is important or not?? [7]

Topic: Do you consider that dressing appropriately is important or are you of the opinion that everyone should be able to wear exactly what they like??

Many people claim that it is their right to choose what to wear and there should be any compulsion on them in this regard.However, others are of the opinion that people should dress according to the situation, so as to look appropriate of it. I am in consummate accord with the people, who prefer to dress on situation basis. Lets analyze the advantages and disadvantages of following dress codes in our daily life.

To begin with, dressing formal is very essential in a corporate culture and every employee should stick to this rule while working with others as a group.If a person violates this, it looks awkward that he(she) is going against the rules of organisation and may lead to disciplinary actions toward him(her). For example, In many companies wearing suit is essential, especially when it is a business meeting or board meeting with supervisors. And if you do not follow this, it will adversely affect the career growth in professional life. So, It is recommended that you should follow dress code in your work life.

Even in personal life there are times, a person has to follow this rule. For example, in cultural occasions like festivals and marriages people are not encouraged to wear what they like, indeed they are forced to wear only customary clothes which are approved by all sections of people. These festivals are inherited from our ancestors and it is our responsibility to preserve and continue to our next generations.From this, it is evident that dressing according to situation is crucial, else it would to lead to criticizing from others and alienation.

In contrast, wearing a dress which we feel more comfortable and quite good is a privilege one should really feel. It allows a person to enjoy their freedom in choosing clothes as per his(her) tastes. For example, when you go out, you feel more relaxed by wearing modern dresses like jeans and shirt than wearing ethnic dress, which is tough to carry.

To conclude, selecting dresses with respect to situation is vital, especially when you have to impress someone in your personal and professional life. And it is appreciated by many people around us and in some cases it is definitely a strict condition to obey . Though, one can feel pleasure to wear what they like to wear, it is not always inevitable and consequences could be devastating.
sush2   
May 5, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: introduce new technology or free education [4]

in research and development new technology

You started your introduction with great phrase, but in the above line, in research and development of new technology is appropriate. And as said above, you have to keep gap from paragraph to paragraph.
sush2   
May 4, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: Common Problems if both parents are working [4]

Topic: what problems do you see when both parents work? How does this affect children and family life??

In today's money driven world, we can see quite often that both parents work in a family.The reasons for this situation could be differ from family to family.It might be because of their financial constraints which force them to work or it could be their personal choice to work.

However, the decision to work by both the parents is associated with advantages and disadvantages too.To begin with concerns, this decision certainly bothers their children, especially when they have no body else to take care of them.For instance,my cousin had to sit alone for hours after her comeback from school,because of her parents were out on their job.This lead her to become a reserved and shy person.By this we can say that if atleast one parent is not available at home to take care of their kids,it creates negative impact on their child's behaviour.

Moreover, if both husband and wife are working they leave no room for their personal enjoyment for the reason that they have to work on weekdays and take care of household things like shopping, cleaning and washing on weekends.For example, my parents were both employed and I hardly gone with them for any holiday and picnic.In effect, it created a unfilled gap among us gradually.So,employed couple has no choice but to sacrifice their happy moments with their family and friends.However this situation poses a threat to their healthy relationship with others on whole.

In other hand, there are benefits if both parents have jobs. They can earn huge money and can provide all the facilities to their children in all aspects. To cite an example, my friend, whose parents are both employees, used to wear costly dresses and come to school in a luxury car, though not driven by her parents. This created a kind of special status to her for being rich among other students.

To summarize,there are pros&cons if both parents are employed in a family.Although,the children of employed parents may get benefits of having rich life,they must be certainly deprived of their parents love and care. By this, I personally feel that parents should have to think well before taking any decision in this regard than being regretted later in life.
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