Writing Feedback / TOEFL: 'career preparation' - reasons why people attend to schools [6]

people attend college for several reasons like experience, carrer, knowelge. why do you think people attend college.give reasons?

Most of us go to college or university to get higher education after high school. Each human is unique and so do their reasons for going to college. Some attend college to get new experience or for carrer preapartion while others go there to have increased knowledge. The ultimate reason for attending college is to have a better bright future with a promising career.

First of all, universities or college helps us a lot in moulding our character and makes us a better human being. For instance, collages may be far from our home , so we need to stay near the college like college dorms or hostels. And there we have to share our room with other people. This makes us to adapt and cooperate with other people as it is necessary for our proffessional as wellas personal life. Now a days most of the children are from nuclear families and are tend to be more selfish. Living in these college hostels will help us a lot in changing our selfish behavior and become a better person. Next, I think of my college days are the best days of my life as it had gifted me with very good friends. Colleges are best places to built up healthy human relations.even some of my batchmates have found their life partners from there.Colleges arrange cocurricular activities like arts or sports fests. This helps the students in building up their academic as well as non academic skills. Further more, while studying in university we can even do some part time jobs, this helps us in future as we can familarize with working enviornment. Moreover , we can earn some money as well.

Secondly, inorder to have a promising future we need to have good education. The present day world is quite competitive and is very hard find a job. We need to be the best or else we will be rejected. Good educational background is really a good assest for us. In high school we learn about differnt subjects but in university level they fousess on a particular subject as it is necessary for a professional jobs. For example every one knows that all human beings have 32 teeth, but if we want to be a dentist we need to know several aspects about teeth. We need to have increased knowelge as it is the key factor in our professional life. Human always have a never ending quench for knowelege. University education might help them in fulfilling some of their desires. Theses colleges or universities have a libraries with a wide collection of books.

Thirdly, Career oriented education is the most important reason for people for going to college or universities. In india we have different educational institutions for differnt proffesions like dental , medical ayurvedic, enggineering and seveal other fields of study. I wanted to become a dentist , so I went to dental school to have dental education. Inorder to compete in this world we need to have a better educational background. These universities plays a key role in our life.

To summarize, people go to college for differnt reasons , among them the most important reason is career preparation, Without that we donot get a to chance to compete in this world.Better education promises a prosperous and fruitful future.

Writing Feedback / Toefl: you have received a gift of money - jewelleries are always a asset for us [4]

Everyone loves to have gifts. we had gotten many gifts in our life, some may be money while some others are objects or things.In everyway gifts are always special to us. If I had recieved a sum of money I would defintely get a jewelLary than getting a concert ticket.

Frist of all , jewellaries are always a asset for us. For instance, if there is an emergency need of money we could sell or mortgage our ornament and can have some money. But we cannot sell or mortagage a concert ticket, so in ebery way jewellary are a valuble gift.

Secondly, being a girl I love wearning ornaments. I always like to get dressed wella and wear ornaments that suits me well. I enjoy wearing it and will be happy to show them around. Ornaments especially gold and diamonds, they will get damaged over time and I can give this oranaments to my kids or even grandchilidren.

Finally, I cwn keep this piece of jewellary as a souvenir, esepically if he money gifted me by someone special For instance, my husband gifted me some money for our first wedding anniversaryand I bought a diamond necklace with it. so that it will always a souvenir of our 1st weddi g anniversary

More over , I can go to concert anytime or I can even watch tne concert on the television or on computer.To conclude, buying jewellary is the best thing to do with the gift money, as it will a great assestas wellas a souvenir to hold back our memories

Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Employers should provide smoking areas for their employees [4]

Smoking cigarettes has become a common habit among people. .As we all know that smoking is injurious to our health. It not only kills the one who smokes but also others around them. It is said that passive smoking is even more dangerous than smoking. So I think it is better to probode a seperate area for the employees who smoke.

To begin with, diseases caused by smoking kills more people than road traffic accidents every year. Cigarettes smoking causes deadly diseases like cancer, heart and lung diseases. Incidence of lung cancer has been increased over the past several years. This points out towards the increasing usage of tobacco as well as cigarette smoking. it is being said that smoking over a year reduce our life expectancy by 5 years. Passive smokers also gets affected by lung cancer. Many deaths have been reported. It is really unconvinient for a non smoker to smell the cigarette smoke. So providing a seperate smoking room will satisfy smokers and it will save the life of non smoking people.

secondly, it is not fair to ban smoking as it is a violation of democracy. But prohibiting public smoking is a must. Smoking is not a easy habit to stop, people get addicted to smoking easily. Nicotine is responsible for this addiction. These people get irritated or they will feel some kinds of discomfort if they donot smoke.This I turn affect the productivity of the company. If an employee cannot work properlythe company will not progress. Providing seperate rooms wil satisfy both smokers as well as non smokers.

Finally, if the companies ban the usage of cigarettes, people will reduce buying them. Tobacco industry is a booming business in our country. It contribute to economy of our nation by providing a good revenue to our government. Other than that these indusrtry provide empolymnet to a number of people, if these companies are shut down they become unemployed.

To sum it up, smoking rooms at workplace is a must. It makes both smokers and non smokers happy And can work there without any inconvenience.

Writing Feedback / In some countries teens have jobs while they are students.is it good or not? [6]

hi all, iam preparing for toefl, plz help me with my essay

Teenages are the happiest period of life. We should study as well as enjoy our teenage days. Itis a common pratice in some countries that teens have jobs whilestidying. I think it is not a good idea. I have a few reasons to think like that.

To begin with my reasons , working while studying is quite challenging. Especiallh for teems as they are in the growing period and are not able to withstand the stress at work. This can affect them in future. Some students even take night shifts. Diseases caused by sleep depriviation are very common now a days. Studies have shown some of the diseases like diabetes and hypertension can be caused due sleep depriviation.

Secondly, talk7ng jobs along with studies is very difficult to manage. students willnot get enough time to prepare for the test and that ultimately affect their grades. As all of us are studying to get a better job we should have a good educational background. itis very essential to thrive in this competitive world. So the priority should be given to studies than jobs in teenage days. Like the proverb , too many cooks spoil the di ner, too many tasks at a time can ruin our life. It is necessaryto put our full potential to our during those days.

Thirdly, teen age is the colorful period of our life. We should enjoy that time of our life or else we will regret later. If we have a busy schedule we wont have time for extra curricular activities at schools or colleges. once we are done with colleges there wont be any chance for these. When I was in college I used to paricipate for all the activities there. I really miss those colorful and joyous days of my life.

Even though I stick to my view that teens neednot work while studying. Icant always say that it is not a good thing. Doing jobs while studying has its own merits too. Students will be able to pay for their tuition fees than depending on parents. Jobs act as a guildlines for the future ventures.

To summarize , teenages are the happiest period of our life. We should enjoy these happy days and concentrate on studies rather than going for jobs.

Writing Feedback / Decisions that are made quickly are always wrong. Do you agree or disagree? [6]

We have to make a lot of decisions in our life. Whether personal or professional decisions are hard to make. I strongly believe that decisions made too quickly can cause problems. I have a few reasons to support my view.

To begin with my reasons, decisions made in hurry can cause problems. We won't be able to analyze the problems or think about its long term effects. For instance, personal decisions say about marriage , the results will be devastating. Quick decisions can be end a marriage in a matter of weeks. We should always think twice before taking these important decisions.

Secondly, most of the cases decisions made in a hurry is considered as poor decisions. I have many instances to qoute from my life itself. One is that when I played chess, one wrong movemnt caused me to lose that game. Another example is regarding our professional life. We should think over and over again inorder to choose a job that suits as well.

The downfalls of quick decisions are still there but we cannot say that are always wrong. There are certain times we should act quickly. For instance, if we are stuck on a building on fire, there is no time to waste as it is a life or death decision.

To summarize, eventhoug there are certain times when we need to take quick decisions, but most of the times decisions made quickly can problems.