Writing Feedback / Author's argument on non-Palean woven baskets does not seems to make a cogent case. GRE argument [3]

This is my first attempt for argument task. I tried my best to make it good. Tell me if I answered the prompt correctly or not. I really appreciate the honest marking. Thank you.

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

While it is possible that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean but the author's argument does not seems to make a cogent case for this.

At the very first place the assumption made by the author regarding supposition that baskets to be made only by the Palean people seems vague. Archaeologists could have found the baskets in the vicinity of the Palean village but it does not prove if finding the baskets at one place makes the baskets originally from that place. Because later they got to find the same baskets across the river from Palean and it is possible that as far as they go and keep on searching, they may found more baskets apart from these two villages only. Author did not mention the data or archaeological survey stating that baskets were found only in Palean.

It is possible that the baskets could have been found in numerous places which author failed to gather the information.

Secondly, the author mentioned about the recent finding and assumed that it may not be uniquely Palean. However, it is possible that baskets were of Palean origin only and were carried along the river to other places or it is possible that the baskets could be of non palean origin and were transported to Palean. To substantiate this , more archaeological survey is required which can tell to some extent that which place they find the instruments or the raw materials of the basket. That could tell us the origin of the woven baskets.

Furthermore, if boats haven't been found that does not mean it might not be there. Many ancient things remain undiscovered because of being buried deep or may be destroyed completely. Plus there is no mention of transport between the two villages. Even if not by boat, there might be some other mode of transport for the ancient people which we are not able to discover here yet. So it is unwise to say that baskets are not uniquely Palean.

Conclusively, Archaeology works with history to find the source of the information. Apart from baskets author failed to mention the use of the baskets and we do not know from how long its been in use . It is possible that these baskets were used for transporting goods. In that case these are meant to be find in varied locations.

To know about the origin of the baskets , author need to find out the history first that for what purpose these were supposed to be? What kind of people used these baskets and what was the material used in the baskets. If it comes to be from a material which is neither supposed to be of Palean origin or its neighboring areas then again the whole argument is refuted here.

Writing Feedback / In any field-business, politics, education, government, rulers should concede after 5 years in power [2]

GRE issue essay on 'those in power should be required to step down after five years.

Help me with the grammar , sentence structure, coherence, essay being justified or not...thank you in advance.

In any field-business, politics, education, government-those in power should be required to step down after five years.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Change is the law of life and those who look only to the past or present are certain to miss the future' quoted by J.F. Kennedy. Change is inevitable and constant and it is good whether it is about getting a new place to stay or reforming the political or social system, it opens up a new era and new discoveries.

Another proverb to mention here in reference to the incumbents is the stagnant water which is same as the stagnant power in position that acts an omen to the no progress system. So with the business, politics, education and government there should be the change in the incumbents position so as to rejuvenate the system with a new psyche and new ideas with the change of time.

Relatively, everyone deserves a chance to show their mettle in today's diverse society where each human has different capabilities , thinking, ideas and beliefs. To abolish the discrimination and corruption , there should be the rotation or voting for the position held in authority after a certain period of reigning the system.

To exemplify it more let's consider the rule of the Congress as Indian government over the country for consecutively 10 years that eventually resulted in the huge descent of the government by the people because of the rage due to no progress in the economy for the last years. Society needed a new government with a new plan as the congress plan was not being more fruitful though it did good in first 5 years.

Same with the education system, the motive is to bring the best education for the society and that could only be achieved with the diverse ideas but not by a single mind. Education needs change as it progresses and so the authority so to ensure its development with the recent trends.

Thirdly like in business one holding the power may be having much experience than others and could be the reason for the status of the business. But at some point there is always a need to change and for new ideas may be a younger mind which proves an additional boon for the established business. For an example, consider the corporations like Goldman Sachs, one of the leading corporations run by different incumbents over a period of time.

Furthermore, everything takes time and the incumbent at least needs around 5 years to bring the change. Thus, it is essential for the system to adopt an approach where the ones in power should be required to step down after 5 years at least so to keep the system vital as per the change in the society.

Though change does not always bring good because experience is gained with time and is of paramount importance in the power but one cannot know what the change will bring until or unless the change is not there. As a proverb it is always known that 'To improve is to change; to be perfect is to change often', change is always required.

Writing Feedback / GOAL OF POLITICS - Idealism vs finding common ground and reaching reasonable consensus. [3]

Hi , I am preparing for GRE and I have just started practicing for the analytical writing part. I realized I need a lot of improvement. So correct me with everything grammar , sentence structure, vocabulary, etc. Thank you in advance:)

Some people claim that the goal of politics should be the pursuit of an ideal. Others argue that the goal should be finding common ground and reaching reasonable consensus.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Politics, as I make out of it, is one of the swampy system where in to clean the mess one needs to get themselves dirty. Also if ideology gets to infused with politics, it can lead to intimidating consequences.

A very old proverbial is apt in today's political circus 'A family that eats together stays together'. So with politics, which is a diverse family responsible for the whole world, should work together as a single unit operating on a common ground which would help to abrogate the differences.

The recent situation of the war going in Syria is the reflection of this. Mass killing is being carried out to satisfy the idealistic egos of the incumbents. Had the statesmen of the world negotiated on the matter, much less lives could have been lost and further massacre would have stopped.

Additionally Russia which deliberately used its VETO power and declined to support the UN against Syria eventually has led to internal war which is presently on the verge of escalation. Had the system of UN would have succeeded in finding the solution reasonable for all there would not have been the massive human casualty and migration crisis. This situation is clearly delineating the failure of reaching a common solution of the problem at its earliest rudimentary stage.

On the other hand, idealism works well for the individual growth but in case of politics sometimes it can lead to altercations and bruised egos. Idealism should be followed for a good cause but it brings more damage than good when the path is devious.

For instance, Gandhi Ji followed their ideology of ''No violence '' and protested against the Britishers during pre-independence period in India for which they were recognized and being consecrated as the true leader. He wanted the system to follow non violence as a measure for the salvation of the millions of slaves. Their ideology of a silent protest against Britishers along with the sacrifices of other freedom fighters gradually enfeebled the strength of the Britishers and India eventually was declared independent.

Conclusively, pursuit of an ideal can take the system to the zenith only if it intents to spread peace but pragmatically in today's diverse nation it is essential to find a common ground and reaching reasonable consensus which would be satisfactory to all rather than imposing the ideals on the opponents.

Writing Feedback / GRE practice essay on 'Restriction of waste disposal to check environmental problems' [NEW]

Hi , help me with the issue topics for the analytical writing section of the GRE . Please feel free to criticize.

The best way to solve environment problems caused by consumer generated waste is for towns and cities to impose strict limits on the amount of trash they will accept from each household.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and / or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

This statement about imposing the limits on the amount of trash being accepted from each household may limit the amount of waste for the municipal community but it hardly justifies if it could limit the trash as a whole. This solution may lead the uneducated customers to find other unethical ways to dispose the garbage.

To exemplify this consider how the indian society reacted on the restriction of the gas cylinders per year per family by the indian government. They tried to circumvent the restriction and did not hesitate to follow a grey route by buying the cylinders in black at marked up prices or by legally showing the 2 families living under a single roof.

To add to an adage: Do for me and I will forget, make me do and I will understand , let me do and I will learn and today's man says 'you impose on me and I will rebel'.

Therefore, this restriction may reduce the amount of garbage say by 1% but if we want to solve the environment problems which has invaded the area on a large scale we need to follow a multifold and more pragmatic approach which starts from educating and making the customers aware about the environment problems.

Educating and enlightening people about the correct waste disposal is necessary because most of them are not aware of it and dump everything at one place altogether deteriorating the quality of the environment.

Secondly, the use of plastics can be restricted with the re-usable items like cloth woven bags or jute bags. Plastic is the biggest enemy of the environment and its use should be limited to as low as possible. One plastic bag takes around 1 million years to be decomposed. Consider the amount of plastic which is used and thrown everyday!

Thirdly regular inspections by the authorities to check for improper use of resources at neighbouring areas which may arouse a fear of being caught while doing the unjudicious use of the resources.

Furthermore we can teach them how one can donate old books or reusable items to a charity instead of throwing them away. How one can utilize the peels of some vegetables and fruits which are edible too rather than throwing them. Some peels can also be used for cleansing action plus other beauty benefits like peel of an orange radiates the skin. Waste water can be used for irrigating plants and extra food can be distributed to needy.

At last , we cannot control the waste just by restricting the limit of the waste collected from the homes but by a more widely held multidirectional approach. We need to educate the humans that how the waste is affecting the environment and thereby deteriorating the quality of our life only.