Writing Feedback / Global sale of fuel and electricity-based hybrid vehicles - IELTS TASK 1 [2]

The bar chart illustrates information about the global sale of fuel and electricity-based vehicles -hybrid vehicles- by taking Japan, US and other countries as the objects of observation. In which, this chart provides the information between 2006 and 2009. Overall, it can be obviously seen that US' global sale was always the highest among two other countries, except in 2009.

A closer look at the chart reveals that three preceding years witnessed US as the highest global rate with the average roughly at 300,000. However, in the last period, by having a gap by 60,000 more, Japan successfully beat US' global rate and became the highest. The development of Japan's global rate can be said that it was very surprising since it had an average at 70,000 from 2006 to 2008, but in 2009, there was an extremely sharp rise, at around 340,000 -having a difference by 245,000 with the previous year. While Japan showed an immense development, the other seems did not have a dramatical growth in its hybrid vehicles' global rate, where 2006 saw the fairly similar state with Japan, at approximately 55,000. Then, it continuously increased regularly in each year and finally reached 110,000 in 2009.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - Percentage of online shopping for retail sectors in New Zealand [2]

The pie charts give information about the percentage of online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand and are measured in 2003 and 2013. Overall, it can be seen that 2013 saw a gradual increase in the proportion of books and film/music, while others were in reverse.

A closer look at the charts reveals that not all of the articles experienced an increase. Books and film/music, for instance, in 2013, their percentage rose gradually. Where books increased by 3%, film/music had a gap by 12% more than that of in 2003. By far, the percentage of film/music in 2013 is the highest. On the other hand, there were a fell in the percentage of other retail sectors in 2013, such as travel and clothes. Travel, which was the highest online shopping of retail sector in 2003, had a proportion at 16%, showing a decrease of 8% compared to that of in 2003, whilst clothes' percentage fell by 7%.

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Writing Feedback / Percentage of diverse leisure activities chosen by Australian boys and girls aging from 5 to 14 [2]

IELTS TASK 1 - Preferred leisure activities of Australian children

The given bar chart shows information about the percentage of diverse leisure activities chosen by Australian boys and girls with the interval age from 5 to 14 years old. Overall, despite of their similarity, it seems that some challenging activities are dominated by boys while girls prefer doing an activity relating with art and craft.

Apparently, Australian children have a same interest in order to spend their time as about 100% of both sexes choose watching TV or videos as their most favorite activity. Then, electronic or computer games become the second most preferable activity with the proportion of 80% boys and 60% girls. Surprisingly, at fairly similar percentage, roughly 58%, girls prefer riding bike as well as doing art and craft activity when they have leisure time. While three-quarters boys confirm that they are happier to ride a bike, only the lowest proportion of them, at approximately 38%, who choose art and craft activity as their favorite. Having a gap around 15% lower than boys, girls enjoy skateboarding or rollerblading, although, 38% boys actually prefer to do it during their spare-time.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 - Process of changing sea water to drinking water [NEW]

The diagram presents the making process of drinking water from sea using conventional tools. Although the process takes a long time as it relies on the sunlight, it can be obviously seen that it is an extremely simple and cheapest way to make drinkable water.

The equipment consists of roughly a meter of clear dome-shaped plastic, a floating rim, which has been hollowed before, a rubber tube and a drinking water collector. First, the hollowed floating rim is placed on the surface of the sea and ensures that the sun exposes it. In the above this rim, there is the plastic that is tightly bound with it. Then, the rubber tube is set in the bottom corner of the plastic. This tube is actually the connector between drinking water collector and the plastic.

The process begins when sea water goes inside plastic through the hollowed rim. After the puddle can be seen in this rim, the sun evaporates it and change the water into condenses. The much time passes, the more condenses will be formed in the plastic surface. Then, this water condenses flows into the rim and enters to the rubber tube. As a result, there will be lots of water in the collector and eventually, drinking water is ready to be served.

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Writing Feedback / Fairmont Island Travel - attractive and boring places (IELTS) [2]

The two distinct pie charts illustrate the most common benefits and backwards of Fairmont Island based on a survey of tourists and are measured in percentage. Overall, it can be obviously seen that most of the visitors consider high cost of living as the highest disadvantage. However, they also think that its locals become the predominantly reason why Fairmont Island is truly attractive.

To begin, about 40% travelers agree that Fairmont Island inhabitants are the most impressive feature that this island has. The other plus point offered in this place is its scenery, in which almost two-fifths tourists, only has a gap by 3% lower than the first feature, choose it as the second most incredible benefit. Then, with the fairly similar percentage -12% and 11% respectively- visitors prefer the good accommodation and the culture as the other advantages which are obtained by visiting Fairmont.

However, virtually visitors feel that the cost of living there is extremely high, therefore roughly 45% visitors categorized it as the most common problems that they have to deal with if they go to Fairmont. While less than a third of the total tourists claim that they do not really enjoy the entertainment, the weather is what 20% of traveler thought to dislike about. The last, roughly one in twenty visitors say that the drawback actually lay on the quality of food.

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