Undergraduate / WPI supplement future academic interests and how attending WPI would fulfill them [2]

Hi all please critique this essay for WPI need it ASAP, thanks in advance!!!

It was during 9th grade that, for the first time, I found myself immersed in a textbook rather than a novel. Flipping through the pages, I discovered the remarkable world of economics. For the first time, I was fascinated by something substantive and possessing real world applications. Over the years, as my passion grew, economics latched to my daily life. Oftentimes people think that economics is the study of numbers and money, but it is the study of behavior. Economics is applied to any situation even if one is doing it subconsciously.

My dream is to come back to my country and help its economy and politics. To fulfill this dream, I need not only great knowledge but also a lot of practical experience. However, finding a college that offers both great knowledge and practical experience was very difficult. As a matter of fact, finding such a college really pushed my patience to an extreme and frustrated me out of my wits. That is, until I stumbled upon WPI. As its motto "lehr und kunst" implies, WPI emphasizes on theory and practice. This provides the students with numerous opportunities to engage in real world situations. From the Great Problems Seminars to the Major Qualifying Project, WPI help their students work with many societies and even nations in research projects and problem solving. This helps students mature and understand how to undertake problems that they will later experience.

The major of Economic Science interests me greatly as it provides real life applications to economics. I also want to focus my studies in sustainable economic development. The class that intrigued me the most and I am sure to take next fall is Everyday Economics. This course focuses on the economics of everyday situations and on real world application to the theory provided in class. WPI also provides many internships and work opportunities through its Career Development Program program. I plan on taking full advantage of that at WPI. WPI will greatly benefit me in the long run as I will be prepared to solve difficult real world problems and help my country.

Thank you !!!!!

Undergraduate / Lancaster as a capital city / Why Franklin and Marshall? Answers for F&M Supplements [2]

two Franklin and Marshall Supplements 150 words and 100 words

Hi all these are two f and m supplement please make me cry and find critiques

On September 27, 1777 Lancaster served as the nation's capital for a single day. If you could do anything or be anyone for one single day, what would you do? (150 word limit)

"I would like to be someone famous." Was the first thought that went through my head when reading this prompt. After I began mentally cataloguing through all of the famous figures and stars I knew, I realized that it was petty. Why would I want to be a famous person? That got me thinking and I realized that the person that I wanted to be for a day is not a famous person but an ordinary man. I want to be a homeless man for a day. I would go out in the streets and see how people treat me. I would want to feel the cold and pain that a homeless man feels and how he is shunned by society. I would want to walk in the streets and get stared at with looks of disgust. Society would not care about me. People always take their life for granted but on does not appreciate his life until it's gone.

Why Franklin and Marshall (100 words)

Becoming a Diplomat is the best thing that could happen to me. I think that I would be at home with like minded people who care and are engaged in their education. The Housing system is also very interesting because of the leadership opportunities it could provide. By talking to a parent of an F&M student, I understood how much the faculty care for the students. She told me that "the F&M faculty genuinely care about the students. The kids seem genuinely happy to be at F&M" That is why I believe that I would be happy at F&M.

Undergraduate / Brandeis supplement for internationals. What can you bring to the community of Brandeis [2]

HI all, this is a 250 word supplemental question from Brandeis. The prompt was what can you bring to the campus community.

It would be an honor to be part of the Brandeis community. Brandeis offers many ways to contribute to the community which results in a diverse and inclusive community. I would greatly benefit the diversity of the community as a Moroccan Berber. Berbers are the indigenous population of Morocco. They live in the mountainous regions where I come from. I have been a part of the Berber population of Morocco for all of my life. I would bring the Berber culture with me and be an ambassador for all the Berbers in Morocco as they are an underrepresented minority. I want to be an active member of the community by participating in many clubs and organizations. One club that especially grasped my attention was the Brandeis Debate Club. Debate has been an integral part of my life and I would like to bring my knowledge to Brandeis and its community. I have fallen in love with debate in my sophomore year and ever since, I have been debating at the national and international level. After many rigorous tryouts I was selected into the Moroccan National Debate Team to represent Morocco in the most prestigious debating championship in the world- the World Schools Debating Championship. Coming back from that enlightening experience, I intend to continue debating at the collegiate level. I have learned of the Brandeis Debate team through several college debate coaches in the United States and I intend to try to join to bring as much as I can to the team and to the community as a whole.

Thank you!!!

Undergraduate / Brandeis Supplement Essay for what is your dream 250 words or fewer [3]

Hello this is my supplement for brandeis on the subject "What is your dream"

Is this too cheesy and generic

Are there any style or gramamatical errors in this

Thank you in advance!!!

In Morocco, my home country, people think that the system is too corrupt and is impossible to change. The wide majority of people have given up on politics and the voting process which is why the voter turnout is 45 percent as opposed to the 85 percent that was present in the 1970s. My society believes that all the politicians in Morocco are there for their own gain. While many politicians are corrupt, there are many who are actually trying to help the country. The reason that many politicians are corrupt is because many people don't participate in voting processes and therefore these politicians can buy their way into their desired positions. My dream is to change this mindset in my fellow Moroccan citizens. After my studies, I want to come back to Morocco and implement these changes. The main barrier to having political activism is education. Education has been historically correlated to democracy and political activism in a country. Unfortunately, Morocco is not a very educated country with a literacy rate of 67 percent. When I come back from my studies, the first thing that I would want to change in the society is the education. Our education is horrible with national high school dropout rates at a record high. My society does not believe that these changes can be implemented to have a democratic government and proper elections. I beleive that with an education from Brandeis I will be able to accomplish my dreams and implement such changes.

Undergraduate / At Colgate we strive to foster an inclusive community; supplement 250 words or less common app essay [7]

This is my supplement for colgate on the subject

At Colgate we strive to foster an inclusive community. Please discuss how your life experiences, family background, and/or culture has helped to shape you as a person. It would be especially helpful if you would also reflect on an experience which demonstrated your character and personal values.

Can I please have some feedback and corrections as soon as possible. Thank you!

I always get asked the same question when I meet new people which is , " are you really a Berber?" Following this question I always proudly proclaim "yes!'. Berbers are and underrepresented minority in Morocco indigenous to the mountainous areas of the Middle and High Atlas. They were the original people of Morocco before it was colonized by Arabs. Being a Berber has truly shaped my life in a way that is truly indescribable. A very big component of the Berber culture is truthfulness. A Berber would never lie or deceive anyone and it is looked down upon very badly if a person is dishonest. My honesty was tested greatly in one situation. During the finals of Policy Debate My partner, which was my brother, and I were greatly tempted to be dishonest to win a debate. We knew that the opposing team's evidence was newer than ours and the only way to leave nothing to chance was to change the date on the evidence to a date that was newer than theirs. We were sorely tempted to change that evidence but we remembered our origins and the basis of the Berber culture. We then understood that we could not change the evidence because that would go against all that we were taught as children. I plan to add to the inclusive community of Colgate by not only bringing my honesty and integrity to Colgate but also bringing debate and trying to contribute to the debate community in Colgate

Thank you !!!

Undergraduate / "Team Wales has won this debate" Common Application essay about prompt number 2 - Failure [3]

Common Application essay about failure!!! Urgent please help!!!!!!

Here is my commonapp essay on

The lessons we take from failure can be fundamental to later success. Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?

pls have a look at it as soon as possible i need to send in my college applications soon! Thank you in advance!

I was sitting at the debate table huddled with my compatriots and teammates waiting for the verdict. It was our last debate for the day. We, Team Morocco, were debating Wales and if we lost, it would be all over for us. We sat waiting and hoping for a favorable outcome. After what seemed like hours of anguish, we were finally called into the room so the judges could give us their decision. The central judge started speaking and said, "First of all that was a very, very good debate. The clashes were present and we felt that both teams did extremely well, although one team did a better job at explaining their position." At this point I was too tense to utter a word; I started hoping and praying that we did the better job. The judge then said, "The decision was very hard for the judges, but we came to a final verdict. On a 3-0 decision." I saw her lean towards Team Wales and my heart sank. I knew what she was about to reveal before I even heard her, but she continued by saying, "Team Wales has won this debate." My heart sunk and I felt like crying. I looked at the expressions of my teammates and I saw the same look of frustration and disappointment on their faces. We were officially disqualified from the World Schools Debating Championship.

The World Schools Debating Championship is the biggest and most prestigious high school debating tournament. It is an annual international championship in which fifty nations participate. The selection process is very difficult and we were all proud to be there, but we had been brutally disqualified. The loss to Wales hurt us all very badly. We were inconsolable for the rest of the championship. We felt that all the time that went into preparation had gone to waste. For days afterwards, I resented everyone and was in a state of shock. We all felt that we could have done better. We then had a meeting about where we would go from the defeat and analyzed the loss. We were all to blame for the devastating loss. We did drop some important clashes during the debate, and we were not at our best. I wanted to stop debate after the loss. I felt that it was not the right thing for me and that all of the time that went into preparation and debating had been for naught. I was completely devastated.

As we were leaving the tournament with downcast faces, I started to reflect on debating and my experience with it. I then remembered why I had started debating in the first place. The rush and the clever exchange of ideas that came with it was why I had fallen in love with debate when I had started in my sophomore year. I started to reflect on the tournament and I understood that I had learned a lot from this experience. Debating in the most prestigious tournament in the world taught me a lot. I learned from the best debaters that the world offered. Every win and every loss in that tournament taught me something new, and I had acquired a very extensive set of skills from debating. I was ready to come back to my country and teach my countrymen the skills that I had acquired during the championship. During the trip back home, I finally realized that I was coming back not only as a better speaker and debater, but I was stronger and more resilient as a person. The championship taught me that nothing is impossible. I was ready for the new challenges that faced me. I now am ready to embark on a new challenge and return to the championship the next year, to again try my very best to make my country and my family proud.

I really need help as soon as possible

Undergraduate / "Most of the things worth doing in the world had been declared impossible before they were done" [5]

Brandeis Supplement Essay (250 words or fewer) number 2

Here is my essay on

Justice Brandeis said, 'Most of the things worth doing in the world had been declared impossible before they were done.' Tell us how you would implement change in society that others might think impossible.

In Morocco, my home country, people think that the system is too corrupt and is impossible to change. The wide majority of people have given up on politics and the voting process which is why the voter turnout is 45 percent as opposed to the 85 percent that was present in the 1970s. My society believes that all the politicians in Morocco are there for their own personal gain. While many politicians are corrupt, there are many who are actually trying to help the country. The reason that many politicians are corrupt is because many people don't participate in the voting process and therefore these politicians can buy their way into their desired positions. I want to change this mindset in my fellow Moroccan citizens. After my studies, I want to come back to Morocco and implement these changes. The main barrier to having political activism is education. Education has been historically correlated to democracy and political activism in a country. Unfortunately, Morocco is not a very educated country with a literacy rate of 67 percent. When I come back from my studies, the first thing that I would want to change in the society is the education. Our education is horrible with national high school dropout rates at a record high. My society does not believe that these changes can be implemented and to have a democratic and proper elections and government. I believe that these changes can and will be implemented.