Writing Feedback / Toefl essay "such as: improvement in their reading and writing skills, helping " [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who do not work because they have enough money are rarely happy.
Give specific examples and reasons to support your position.

Although some people say that they should get a lot of pressure to stimulate themselves to keep going in modern society, others say that when people earn enough money, they should quit their job and start to enjoy their own life. I disagree with the statement that people who do not work because they have enough money are rarely happy. My reasons are as follows.

By enjoying their rest life, people who own enough money can get happy. They can pursue a lot of things which were fascinated them. When they started to work, they must pay attention to it and spend less time on what they really like. They loosed a lot of chances to pursue their dream, because they must get more money in order to have a good live in this high tempo era, especially in urbane areas. If they have enough money to support their lives, they can quit their work and pursue what they really want. My grandfather, for example, did not have a lot of time to enjoy surfing, because he should afford family expends until my father started to get money and lower his burden. Thus, he takes me to go to beach and enjoys surfing almost all sunny days and gets a lot of fun.

Moreover, although it is necessary to get pressure to force people to do more things, it not means people who do not work will rarely happy. People can find a lot of friends who already rich to play together. Not only does it enrich their social life, but it makes them happy as well. For instance, my friends' mother, Jane, always find some friends to go shopping together. Sometimes they share their own daily experience with others and enjoy their lives. When they run into difficulties, such as how to teach their children or help them get great grade at school, they can think a lot of new ideas and solve those problems. Thus, they always laugh.

For the reasons above, rich people not equal to unhappy people. They can gain a lot fun if they find the correct ways to recharge themselves and get happy in their daily lives. Therefore, I disagree that people who do not work because they have enough money are rarely happy.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay: Governments should pay more attention on health care issue than .. [7]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should pay more attention on health care issue than environmental issue.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Actually, I did not have great idea during 30 mins. a bad performance :(

In modern society, many people tend to focus on health care issue; however, I disagree with this statement that government should pay more attention on health. Here is why.

First, environment becomes worse in modern society. If governments can not pay attention to environmental issue and provide a clean environment for residents. It may be a real reason to effect residents' health conditions. For example, I live in Taipei, a highly develop in manufactories city. Taipei has a great number of vehicles which emit a great amount bad air and pollute this city due to the fact that government does not concentrate on public transportation issue so that city's environment becomes worse; in addition, it causes a lot of people suffer from disease because they inhale too much bad air. Therefore, it is more important to pay attention to environmental issue than health.

Moreover, putting a lot of waste water to the river directly, factories avoid paying money to deal with waste water. If government does not limit them to pollute city's water resource, it may cause residents to drink waste water. Kaohsiung, another big city in my country, has a huge problem in water pollution. People, in Kaohsiung, afraid of drinking tap-water, so that they must pay more money to buy water in convenient stores; however, it is not convenient and unfair for them. If they drink a lot of tap-water, it may harm their bodies and force them to pay more money to go to hospital. Therefore, to handle the basic health problem, government should eliminate the environmental problems first.

For the reasons above, paying more attention to health issues, government can not solve the real health problems. A lot of people exposure to bad environment, especially in urbane areas. If government does not pay more attention to solve the basic environment problems, it is difficult to attain the achievements that enhance residents' healthy. Thus, I believe that government should pay more attention on environmental issue.

Writing Feedback / Toefl- Kids playing computer games; What the parents did, what their children do [5]

Hello, I need some feedback from u ^^

I am not a good writer, and I hope I can learn more.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.

Give specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

With the advance of technology, the ages of people who touch the technology become lower and lower. At the same time, almost all of the parents face the same problem. Is playing computer games waste children's time? I disagree with this statement that playing computer games waste their time.

First of all, it is necessary for children to gain more chances and experience. Playing computer games, children can learn how to face the false and challenge themselves through trials and errors until they attain the goal in computer games. For example, when I was a child, my mother always allowed me to spend time on playing computer games. Although it may lead me to addict in the computer games due to the fact that I lose many times, I gain a lot of sense of achievement, because it urged me to think lots of strategies to beat other players.

Moreover, to enrich children's social life, children get more opportunities to interact with their friends. In modern society, almost all of children tend to share their experience with their friends. One of the experiences is how to get the goal in computer games. If parents disallow their children playing computer games, it may deprive their opportunities to discuss those games with others. For example, my elementary school friend, Joe, did not have any chances to play computer games so that he was lonely no matter where it was, because he did not know what topic he could talk with his classmates.

Last but not least, providing a safe environment for children, parents should enable children to play computer games. In this high tempo era, many parents tend to play computer games on the weekend; however, they do not enable their children playing computer games. What the parents did, what their children do. Prohibiting children playing computer games may give them more excuses to find other occasions playing its. At the same time, they may meet bad friends in diversity of occasions. No people can promise that children will not do wrong things together. The safe way to avoid those problems is that decrease the opportunities to exposure in those bad occasions. Therefore, parents should allow children playing computer games in order to give them safe environments.

For the reasons above, I disagree that playing computer games waste children's time.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay, People with different interests and personalities cannot be friends [12]

Hello, I'm a learner. I know this essay has some flaw. please give me some feedback ^^

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who have different interests and personalities cannot be friend?

In modern society, every one has their own experience and personal qualities. I disagree with this statement that people who have different interests and personalities can not be friend. The followings are my reasons.

First of all, learning a lot of different experience, people can get more aspects to solve a diversity of difficulties. Sometimes people do not have enough ideas when they run into difficulties. If they can acquire many different opinions from others who have different views, it may help them and provide more manners for problems. For example, when I was a college student, I did not know how to enrich my social life; however, my roommate, John, give me a lot of his experience about how to interact with other people; in addition, he invited me to join a lot of parties together. Therefore, he helped me meet more friends and enrich my social life.

Furthermore, learning a lot of different interests, people can expand their horizons. Nowadays, a great amount of people should pay attention to their work in this high tempo era, especially in urban areas, so that they do not tend to develop new interests in their leisure time even they want to try, because it may spend too much time to learn it. Therefore, if you have friends who not around you, it may give you different chances to develop your new interests. For example, my friend, Sam, always likes to hike on the weekends. Due to the fact that I am too lazy to hike, I know I have to do more exercise. Thus, Sam likes to invite me hiking together. At the same time, we can exchange our different experience in our daily life and I get a lot of fun.

Last but not least, interacting with a lot of different personal qualities, people can learn how to handle different kinds of others. All of people have their own qualities. However, sometimes people may not know how to handle different people's temperature. If we can meet more different personalities of people, it may lead us easy to join a team in our future work. Moreover, not only does it help us learn how to manage people, but it helps us learn how to become a good leader as well.

For the reasons above, I disagree that people who have different interests and personalities can not be friend.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay "The main task of universities is to offer the students with the...D [5]

Hello everyone, I need u to help me correct my essay :)
I think that maybe I have sth wrong

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The main task of universities is to offer the students with the knowledge and skills which are essential for their future career or give them the access to the knowledge itself.

Undoubtedly, providing students more practical or academic education become a great issue in modern society. For students' future work, practical education is really important; however, I agree with the statement that universities should offer the students with the access to the knowledge itself. My reasons are as following.

First of all, to develop the basic abilities, students should acquire theories in the beginning. If students do not gain any basic knowledge in their field, it may lead them run in to difficulties before they start to do their own projects. For example, when I was a college student, I major in computer science department. In the beginning, I did not have any ideas in how to build my project. I did not know what can I do and how can I do. After I finished those basic theories courses at first year, I gained more experience and expanded my horizons. At the same time, I read a large amount of information through the Internet which developed my basic views in computer science. Therefore, I can find the way and do a great job as better as I can.

Moreover, it is difficult to implement what students learn in the universities when they are freshmen in businesses. The major reason is that no people can guarantee what students will do in their future work. Although I, for example, will hunt my work which is related to computer science, it can not say that the work what I do that I've learn. If students can acquire more academic theories than practical methods, it can help them change the theories and implement it to different ways.

Last but not least, although practical education is important, it should be combined with academic knowledge. If students mere learn a lot of practical manners and gain a large number of practical experience in the universities, they will lose their basic abilities to develop new knowledge by themselves. Practical methods are based on knowledge. On the other hand, using academic knowledge to create the real things is students' final goal.

For the reasons above, I agree that universities should offer the students with the access to the knowledge itself.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL "Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done." [4]

Hello, everyone
I prepare for ibt writting, I need some feedback plz ^^.

Topic : Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do you prefer?

I prefer to go places and get things done than other. My reasons are as follows.

First of all, living in the hurry tempo in my daily lives, I gain more pressures to let me finish the work more efficiently and effectively. If people do not suffer from enough pressure to lead to do things more quickly, it may waste a large amount of time. For example, when I was a student in college, I tend to finish my jobs as quick as I can. I used to check my jobs again and again until that I thought the best jobs I've did. After that, I can do a lot of things what I want and totally enjoy my leisure time without any things that may bother me.

Second, it help me gain achievement and kudos. One of the major reasons is that I always suffer from pressure, so that I can train myself to taste pressure through trials and errors no matter it is heavy. I, for one, usually try to limit time to achieve one goal under pressure which may decrease my failures in the future work. Because if people always live life at a slower pace, they will suffer from a lot of vital problems, such as doing jobs ineffective. Eventually, it will let their abilities to drop down at the moment just because of they must finish their own work in the limitation of time; however, if they do not, they will be fired and lose a great number of advantages in hunting jobs.

Last but not least, to expose themselves under pressure, people can learn more useful things and gain more experiences from their daily lives. People can acquire more knowledge when they are in schools and know how to control their timetable in efficient ways. Not only can it help people do their jobs systematically, but it also helps them do their jobs more aggressively. So that living in the high paces, people can gain more beneficial in their daily lives.

For the reasons above, I prefer to go places and get things done than other.
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