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Name: ALMAJID
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Last Post: Sep 14, 2016
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ALMAJID14   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Why you should experience a home stay in Thailand? [3]

I am going to talk about the place which is interesting foreigners to stay there, why many people should experience a home stay in Thailand because everything that is in Thailand can spoil visitors who come to that country. however, you can spent more than a week in home stays, or local family-run lodging, ranging from day trips to three-night stays. This style of travel is part of the country's ongoing push toward community-based tourism, where locals run the activities and profit from them.

We do not worry to look for the way how we can get about it because some agent of travel have provided, which is good services of traveling in Thailand. those not only provide about travel but also we can get everything what we need during we stay in Thailand, such as , accommodation, meals, activities, and English-speaking guides. Finally, we will feel enjoy during stay in Thailand with providing which they offer for tourists.
ALMAJID14   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summarize TED video : Al Gore, New Thinking On The Climate Crisis [2]

hallo :)
overall your writing has been good but there is a little error sentence.

On that video, he explain about a lot of problems during human ...
He believe , when people have (...), many dispute can be solve ( because passive use v3) more easily because ...
ALMAJID14   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Several holiday makers in New Zealand prefer to do such activities like walking, sightseeing, etc. [3]

International visitors to New Zealand; Reason for visit. IELTS Writing Task 1

The bar chart illustrates percentage of reason for the tourists who visit to New Zealand. Overall, several holiday maker prefer to do activities indoor like walking, sightseeing, visiting volcanos, and boating then another movement which does indoor.

Firstly, the most activities which are always done is walking 80%. Next, there is a similar things which act in outdoor that is holiday which is more 70%, and then another activity that the people have reason to do enjoying view have percentage which is too far from walking. Besides there is activity which come from tourists which have reason that those do visiting volcanos have a distance too far percentage if we compare with the others activities before.

The last activity which also does not do indoor is sailing which has slight larger then visiting volcanos which is more 45%. It is clear that tourist choose more activity which is act indoor while we can see that those who come to new Zealand have s little percentage to do activity indoor that is proved by the figure under 40%.




ALMAJID14   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / What can you do about the climate crisis? Al Gore talk about the climate [4]

Summarry of TED Video, The title : Al Gore-Averting the climate crisis

I want to focus on what many of people have said you would like me to elaborate, what can you do about the climate crisis? I am going to show new images. I update the slide every time and add new images. I learn more about it whenever I want it. Now in United states, we got new temperature about 31 degrees and last month was 39 degrees.

Cars and trucks which caused our climate like this, is called global warming pollution which come from building than transportation. Public transportation is one of trouble maker to global warming in this day. We have to care about problem which threaten our life with doing some positive activity like efficiency in transportation, conservation, electricity. It is not true activities but it is true activities.

Furthermore, it is good solution to solve the problem that we have to be a green consumer. You have choices with everything you buy, between things that have a harsh effect, or a much less harsh effect on the global climate crisis. Make a decision to live a carbon-neutral life. It is easier than you think. It really is. A lot of us in here have made that decision, and it is really pretty easy. It can reduce the big problem anything about climate which is this condition not good for our health in these days.
ALMAJID14   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / Oceans Given Boost as Nations Agree to Protect a Third Worldwide - Summary Article [4]

Hello,, these are my suggestion which focus on grammar and structure

... many things that must be protect (protected) like ocean. Recently, an idea from IUCN ... (complete your sentence). This program will be continue Use V3 because passive) until 2030 with gradually . Development the ocean for do (preposition+v-ing =Gerund) some new creature (use s because plural). But (there is no but in first sentence) there are some nationality who ...

The reason is(use complex sentence) they want to focus not just ...
Because it is big potential from ocean side can be explore.( there is no conjunction)
There are many aspect (use S because plural) to focus such as ...
If the temperatur (spelling) too high it can impact from ...
... make change the environment that must to ( after modal there is no conjunction) keep for future called World Herritage (spelling).
ALMAJID14   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / Have Three Weeks for a Vacation? There Are Trips for You (Summary of article) [3]

Have Three Weeks for a Vacation? There Are Trips for You

Currently, we should not worry if we want holiday a long time because there is travel companies offer a nicest destination that span three weeks or more. In addition those spare the time for a longer gateway which have plenty of time. Thus, we have the number of good choices for holiday everytime and as long as you want it.

Spending your time in quality where that is hoped all of people when those have leisure time and make it nicest holiday because of interested services specially for vacation. However, holiday is a activity which can make someone enjoy, relaxed, happy and refreshing of your brain. It is clear that this service of treveling which cause several companies create innovative the way to pamper someone more comfortable and satisfied during those spending vacation with a long time. In the same way, it provides variety wonderful destination which are in Australia, Canada, New Zealand.
ALMAJID14   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / This Teenager Just Came Out to Her Family at Disneyland in the Most Amazing Way - Summary Article [5]

Gina as an adolescent from California who spend her vacation (...) would like to surprised her family.
... she braves herself to prove with a grateful ways .
... how to surprise her mother, father and brother .
... woman that has uncommon habit, so to show up her immediate family how really she love them by give the memorable time.

Please pay attention about ( singular and plural, gerund, preposition and use of complex sentence.
ALMAJID14   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / Overall, the most travellers come from a place which is near to the visited country. [2]

International Visitors to New Zealand, IELTS Writing Task 1

The pie chart depicts information about where people who travel to New Zealand come from.
Overall, the most visitors come from a place which is near to this country. However, there are also people who depart from extremely far, even though it is a very small percentage.

The highest percentage of New Zealand tourists is Australians with forty percent, and then followed by other groups, which there is no list of the country from. The next percentages come from British and Americans, at 12 and 9 percent in the same occasion. The Chinese, which takes 5%, appears as one of the lowest visitors. The Japanese and South Koreans are tending to be the lower visitors that go to New Zealand, with only 4% and 3%.

Furthermore, it can be seen from the chart, that the most common visitors who are interested in New Zealand is speaking English countries such as Australia, United Kingdom and United State, with total just fewer than seventy percent. The East Asian countries for China, Japan, and South Korea are smaller range visitors who travel to New Zealand, with total twelve percent only.




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