Writing Feedback / Wiriting Task 2: Problems associated with the internet and what solutions ? [3]

Using the Internet is the means used to share information and exchange data more easily, but also can cause problems.
Firstly, the internet as a way of information can be used as suggestions of fraud on the Internet that can harm the user internet. For instance, sales mode online that sells not accordance with goods.

Secondly, the Internet can cause dependence to lose track of time in his life. For example, if someone is addicted to social media and online gaming, if the day just does not use the internet for sure they feel something is missing in their lives.

Finally, Internet usage can cause health problems to the wearer. This disruption caused by the device used by the user. Computers are a lot of benefit in many ways. Some people even become like to linger in front of the computer. However, this turned out to be a case of behavior can cause side effects. Some users complained of pain in certain body parts, just as pain in the hands, arms, shoulders, neck, and back, or fatigue on the eyes.

The solution to overcoming these problems are: The first, The need for law enforcement with the establishment of internet police are responsible for determining the standard control operation and application of information technology. The second must be able to set the time between being in front of a computer or playing games with the portion of learning and rest, and the last is more able to maintain health while using the Internet for health more than anything.

Writing Feedback / Global Population growth, box by box - new analog teaching technology [2]

Hans Rosling was launching a brand new analog teaching technology that he picked up from the box. the blue box contains one billion people that were for the industrialized world, and the green box has two billion people that were for developing countries. There was a big gap between the one billion in the industrialized world and the two billion in the developing world where In the industrialized world, people were healthy, educated, rich, and they had small families, but in developing countries was contrast , in the developing world was far away, the aspiration of the average family there was to have food for the day and they were saving to be able to buy a pair of shoes.

But the world has changed, and it's overdue to upgrade that mindset and that taxonomy of the world and to understand it. The years ahead the development of the world's population will continue to increase that it can be done, the population can have a much more just world with green technology and with investments to alleviate poverty.

Writing Feedback / There were three secondary schools that declined the interest of children [2]

The table gives information about the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types during 9 years. Overall, there were three secondary schools that declined the interest of children: Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled school and there were ones that were community schools increased from 2000 to 2009.

According to the data, the proportion of specialist schools decreased every period by 1 percent and for grammar in each period was experiencing a decline of 5 percent. Besides that, there was a very significant of proportion decrease was voluntary-controlled school by 8 percent in each period. From three secondary schools were increased although there was a decrease in significant and not.

And then there was one that has increased dramatically, namely community schools rose by 20 percent, which meant a residual interest to this pretty sizable. And additional, it was Initially only 12 percent in 2000 and then 58 percent rising in 2009.

Writing Feedback / Alaa Murabit, a young Muslim woman, highlights her experiences and participates in peace processes [5]

Alaa Murabit was nominated to address the UN General Assembly including the Commission on the Status of Women, and was nominated to address the UN Secure she works to amplify the voices of women and to highlight experiences and participation in peace processes and conflict resolution, and she recognizes that the only way to ensure the full participation of women globally was by reclaiming religion.

As a young Muslim woman, she very proud of her faith. It gives her the strength and conviction to do her work every day. Initially, she focused on the economic and political empowerment of women. She thought that would lead to cultural and social change. In 2012 and 2013, her organization led the single largest and most widespread campaign in Libya. She entered homes and schools and universities, even mosques. She discussed taboo issues, like domestic violence. She spoke to 50,000 people directly, and hundreds of thousands more through television commercials, radio commercials, and posters.

Writing Feedback / Summary TED: Let's design social media that drives real change [3]

Wael Ghonim was an anonym who created helped spark the Egyptian revolution in social media. In June 2010, the internet changed his life forever. While browsing facebook, he saw a terrifying photo that it dead body of a young Egyptian guy. He shared in facebook page and called it "We are all Khaled Said". In just three days, the page had over 100,000 people, fellow Egyptians who shared the same concern.

Social media was crucial for this campaign which helped decentralized movement and made people realize that they were not alone for revolution. In Wael Ghonim view, there are five critical challenges facing today's social media. First, we don't know how to deal with rumors. Second, we create our own echo chambers. Third, online discussions quickly descend into mobs. fourth, it is hard to change our opinions, because of the speed and brevity of social media, we are just forced few characters, and the last, our social media experiences are designed in a way that favors broadcasting and posts over discussions. Wael Ghonim said, "If you want to liberate the society, all you need is the Internet."