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Posts by Huynh Anh
Name: Huynh Anh
Joined: Oct 7, 2016
Last Post: Oct 26, 2016
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From: Viet Nam
School: The University of Argiculture and Forestry

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Huynh Anh   
Oct 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / Modern form of communication such as email and messaging have reduced people time spending [2]

Write about the following topic:

Modern form of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives:

Our social lives have changed since since electronic email and messaging have appear. However, it is not at all certain that our social lives are worse at the result. In many ways, they are better.

In the past, people communicated with phone and letters us to see and meet our friends when we have time. Due to the busy life, often we did not have any occasion to have directly communication with our friends or relatives who stay away for months or years. As a consequence our relationship suffered.

Nowadays, thank to the modern technologies we can contact with other people for work and daily activities through social websites and messages without get out. As a result, our social relationships are much better. For example, in my case, I and my closest friend stay in two different city far away from each other. By chatting on computer, we can know what she is thinking and how her life is going. In the past, this is impossible , as the result our friendship may be further.

In conclusion, I disagree with the statement in the question and believe that modern communications have greatly improved people's social lives.
Huynh Anh   
Oct 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / People have to be more careful for choosing their clothes because it may cause some problems [5]

Hello, here's my suggestion

Beside that there is A person GIVING comment about their appearance.
SEVERAL FEATURES CONCERNED...
EmployeeS wearing formal clothes SHOW THEIR RESPECT TO SURROUNDINGS.
they can BE easily remembered by many people.
the habit of OTHERS just directly judged them USING the same clothes AGAIN
THE FACT THAT, people haVE many collections
they do not know about THE CHARACTERISTICS OF OTHERS.

So sorry if my correction has something wrong. I hope it will help you!
Regard!
Huynh Anh   
Oct 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Effects of modern forms of communication such as email and messaging [2]

I'm an English learning beginner so please help me correct it! I need as many correction as possible to improve my skill. Thanks for your help!

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives.

Going with the development of information technology, electronic message and email become very popular and play an important role in the way people communicate with their friends. However, it is not the reason for the modification of our social lives in the unwanted sides. Even they are better in some circumstances.

Long time ago, people mostly communicated by letters or calling. There were not many changes for them to come and see each other because of not only the distance impediment but also not much free time. Because of those things, sometimes people did not have any opportunities to stay with their relatives and friends. And their relationships are worse as a result.

Nowadays, by using social website, we easily contact with our friends even on around the world after few seconds and instantaneous messaging without going out of our rooms. That leads to the closer relationship between people. For example, in my case, I usually free at nearly midnight after studying time and I do not have my parents' permission to hang out with my friends at that time so email and messaging help me a lot in chatting with my friends through computer without going outside. It is very interesting that I am still in my room but I can talk with them, share my opinions and know what they are doing. On the other hand, in the past, there were not many changes for me to communicate with my friends even in several months no talking.

I think we should not blame modern forms of communication for reducing the people's meeting time. Actually, it increases the opportunities for people to see each other by going outside for doing some activities, picnic or camping by this chances people will have occasions to make friends through their friends.

Overall, I totally disagree with modern modes of communication causes bad effects to human relationship and I strongly believe that in near future social network will bring everybody on around the world stay together.
Huynh Anh   
Oct 21, 2016
Undergraduate / My village and its customs that changed my life! [25]

I remember promising... ==> REMEMBERED
the shock she received on ==> the shock CAUSED BY
... ritually passed on from one generation to the next==> passed THROUGH generation.
He has always been supportive of my ambitions==> He has always been MY AMBITIONS SUPPORT
I think your writing is good and I hope that these things will help you!
Good luck!
Huynh Anh   
Oct 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Describe some jobs positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem [2]

This is the first time I write essay so please help me correct it! I need as many as possible (at least 3). Thanks so much for your help!

Now, time of Artificial Intelligence (AI) is coming. Going with the development of information technology, people are producing more and more modern equipment for replacing people doing some works. Although it does not have any skill or experience as human, it still completes everything very good even better than people.

At present, there are many works controlled by computer system. In some companies, the employers want to reduce employees' payment so they invest in some hi-tech equipment for controlling their businesses. For example, it is very convenient for booking goods through internet or buying online so do not need salesclerks for make appointment, receiving customers' requirements and place for distribution. Not only reduce the money for employees' salary, but also save time for customers' purchasing and lessen unwanted mistake.

In addition, in the near future, call agent (telephonist) will be gradually lost because of the replacing automatic answer machine. This replacing will give customers better perception on the way they are served. For example, automatic answer system will be programed with very interested and light voices that satisfy on kinds of customers. While sometimes, telephonists give bad behavior to people calling to the Call center because of overloading of working frequency.

In overall, the replacing of technology in our life reflects the development of humans' science and technology level. In the near future, there is not many position for people working because of reducing workers policy in the company leads to the results of competition between labors in finding jobs. It is very good if we use hi- tech equipment in processing for reducing people strength. But sometimes this makes people gradually become passive and lazy. So we have to make sure that people play the most important role in working.
Huynh Anh   
Oct 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / Bringing enjoyment. Movies take us to the world of imagination. [4]

By providing the context when language is used, movies support us so that we can study the language faster and remember it longer.
Comment: I'm not sure about this. This is true when viewers already have very basic foundation of grammar to understand the meanings of the movies because it's pretty difficult for viewers who are just at beginning stages of improving english.
Huynh Anh   
Oct 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / PTE - Essay writing practise : Parents should be held legally responsible for their children's acts. [6]

In my opinion, I believe that children's like a blank state and ...
==> It should be " I believe that children like a blank state and are in developing stages so parents play an important role in children's behaviour and awareness.

Comment: I'm not sure about parents claim responsibility for their children's actions because it's better for children are responsible for their actions. Just small ones.

it legal ==> it's legal

I think you good at writing. Try your best!
Please check it for me!
Thanks a lot!

I need three corrections from other people so please forward it to another if you can. Thanks so much!
Huynh Anh   
Oct 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / People from small villages or remote areas are trying to seek a way to live and work in large cities [2]

Advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community

In the pace of life now, most of people live in small villages or remote areas try to seek a way to live and work in large cities and they hope that they will have better life there. Besides, there are many advantages and disadvantages to being citizens of a big city.

There are three benefits that I want to mention. Firstly, it is not difficult for people to find a suitable job in a large community. This means people can earn money to meet their needs. Besides that, in modern cities, not only adults will have a chance to progress their careers, but also children will have a better education. There are many chances for them to contact with the global knowledge for improving their abilities. In addition, healthcare and medical services are also in higher standard for satisfying the citizens. And, going with the development of life, the requirement of people for entertainment also changes a lot. Because of this changing, people have opportunities to approach many modern techniques. By a reason that makes people more creative and active.

On the other hand, live in the big cities, the busier the people are, the colder the people will be. They do not have much time for going around their neighborhood to talk each other. As a result, they have less time for taking care of their children even though themselves. And the children, they have to study a lot. After school, they just stay at home and play video games no chance for running around or play with other children.

In my opinion, living in the small villages, people have much free time for looking after their family but their income sometimes is not enough for their demands. In modern cities, there are many opportunities for people to enjoy many types of amenities of life and they do not feel lonely any more.
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