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Posts by Fadhilahumar91
Name: Nur Fadhilah Umar
Joined: Aug 10, 2016
Last Post: Oct 28, 2016
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School: Cokroaminoto University

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Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Results number of vistors to Ashdown Museum [7]

Hi....

I hope you attach a picture of diagram, because i don't know about the data. Diagram can help to check your essay for reading task 1

Your paragraph very short so i suggest you to combine the second paragraph and third paragraph become one.

And i think you must enrich your essay because in IELTS task 1 you must use 150 minimum words and i think your essay not enough words

thank you
Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / TED Video by Negin Farsad: Taxonomy of Haters [2]

Much social problems in America, for example nature, waffle and healthy. And, there are three categories of American inhabitants that is 90 percent is Wonderful people, 3% from Florida and 7% is Haters. Wonderful people is kind of citizen has polite, good personality, friendly, etc. Florida is the Florida citizens who live in US. And the last is Haters. Haters has 7% from American inhabitants, but provide impact to extra loud for American inhabitant. It is a complex demographic problem, because they ignore what they are hate and the comedian create the hater as materials of kidding. Negative outcome occurs by haters is racism and violence.

Negin Farsad found with the highly scientific taxonomy of haters conclude, firstly is haters 2.0. Secondly is drive by haters, and the third is the mission oriented bigot whose group affiliation gives them for hating haters and the last is swing haters. Swing haters is very interesting because they swing vote to like and dislike the people or community without more data what they hate. The result of information regression analysis shows 90% people to haters just for fun by comedy.

Comedy is popular for hating. Comedy work with social justice, when comedy make you laughing you will be openness for say something, what you like and dislike. Openness is good moment to invite you for hating something. There four parts social justice of comedy rules that is not partisan, inviting but warm, funny but sneaky and occasional pants but sneaky. Overall, all thing in social comedian justice are not funny. So, it is time to train a really proof of joke.
Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary an article : Parents Giving Unproven IQ-Boosting Drugs to Kids with Down's [3]

Recently, some families choose to provide drugs for their children with Down's syndrome, because they think if that medicine can be alter the part and chemistry of the brain. Alteration of the brain by drugs can be improve the people intelligence with Down's syndrome. But, Mara Dierssen at the Centre for Genomic Regulation in Barcelona, Spain says if that idea was absurd. Because in methodically not yet to tested for the Down's syndrome.

Down's syndrome happen when a fertilization process, the egg produce extra chromosome. Also impact with baby's healthy. The IQ of the Down's syndrome is about 50 less than the normal people. But, the researcher founded that consume the bumetanide drugs be able to block particle of Down's syndrome in mice brain.

Carol Tamminga at the University of Texas Southwestern Medical Center in Dallas originate that many parents would rather try Prozac themselves than the danger of the trial's placebo group. Also EGCG from the green tea decrease an enzyme activity in the brains of people with Down's syndrome. The result of placebo-tested describe that linking memory, thinking, and mental focus.

newscientist.com/article/mg23130864-100-parents-giving-unproven-iqboosting-drugs-to-kids-with-downs/
Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / There are three essential qualities of good parents: understanding, support and patience [3]

Form marriage to having have kids in order to create the next generation for the family, we all and will women/men will have to experience to be a mother and a father. To become a parentThe candidates of parents require a lot of qualities but I think there are 3 essential qualities and they are such as understanding, support and patience.

When we the parents understand our their children, it will lead to a healthy and smooth good relationship between us and them.
If parents and their kids don't understand ...

i'm interesting with your article, but you must give pay attention about singular and plural

thank yu
Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / It is actually agreed today that sports and social activities play a main role in students' life. [5]

hi...

It is actually agreed today that sports and social activities play a main role in students' lifeToday, sports and social activities has the important roles of the student life . aA lthough parents think that classes are more important than other activity and must pay more attention to classes in school, , because....... . iI t is important that school must ...

I hope you make effective sentences for your summary. Overall, i like your summary

thank you
Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary an article: Finding the right switch can solve the biggest problems [2]

United States government discovered badly behave about less nutrition problem in their citizen, during second war world. The meaty problem that happen in citizen is the part of meal problem. So, to control it. The citizen must to trying another meal like vegetable and healthy food by import of food from another country. But, until this program it is over. Many inhabitant stilled in short of nourishment.

Finally, United States employed new scientist in anthropologist, Margaret Mead and social psychologist, Kurt Lewin. Mead and Lewin researched what the psychological conflict happen in US society. The result of research is the citizen branded as the meal of the poor and they don't belief about the way of prepare it. So, they conclude offal lost is stigma, and we need for nutrition support.

Now, based on the research many psychologist to develop the therapy model as psychology intervention to change the behavior of society. They believe WPI is the answer for food problem in citizen in US by alteration of the mental blocking.
Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / SUMMARY ARTICLE : GLOBAL CITIZENS, HOW TO CHANGE THE WORLD? [2]

hi dina:

Maybe, i think, there is not many people in America Short of people in Amerika know about her...

What do you mean about "Global citizens is self identified", I think that not enough sentence, so you must complete the sentence

He made a big charity by mobilize so many people in the world with universal language, music....

they are try to make a different result about global ...

thankyu
Fadhilahumar91   
Aug 11, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary of Video: Wired Happiness [3]

Most citizen in urban society always say "Life to be short to unhappy". Happy is a word that many people search. But actually, the first question is "what do you have to get in order to be happy?". The psychologist research conclude if every people think if I will be happy when I get the good job, when I get the highest salary, when I have marriage, when I have a children, and if I all thing that I want. But after they get all thing that they want they still unhappy. What the problem actually?

Based on the Srikumar Rao as a happiness teacher say, actually we entire life learning to be unhappy. Every person have a mental model. The mental model is habitual wanting that every person leaning unhappy life. According to the Rao suggestion is you must think if outcome is completely outside of your control. Outcome is not guarantee to get happy. So forget about the outcome and focusing the process.

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