Fadhilahumar91
Aug 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Results number of vistors to Ashdown Museum [7]
Hi....
I hope you attach a picture of diagram, because i don't know about the data. Diagram can help to check your essay for reading task 1
Your paragraph very short so i suggest you to combine the second paragraph and third paragraph become one.
And i think you must enrich your essay because in IELTS task 1 you must use 150 minimum words and i think your essay not enough words
thank you
Hi....
I hope you attach a picture of diagram, because i don't know about the data. Diagram can help to check your essay for reading task 1
Your paragraph very short so i suggest you to combine the second paragraph and third paragraph become one.
And i think you must enrich your essay because in IELTS task 1 you must use 150 minimum words and i think your essay not enough words
thank you