Writing Feedback / PTE: Over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco. The long term health costs are high - for smokers [8]

Prompt:

Do governments have a legitimate role to legislate to protect citizens from the harmful effects of their own decision to smoke, or are such decisions up to the individuals.

harmful effect of tobacco

My essay:

Tobacco is a popular drug attracting over a billion adults every day, mainly in the form of cigarettes. However, long-term consuming tobacco will harm our health, what is worse, will have negative effect on wider society in terms of health care and lost productivity. Some people argue that smokers should take responsibility to quit smoking in order to protect people from the harmful effects of smoke. In my opinion, it is more of governments' responsibility to legislate to restrict the spread of tobacco use.

Some people believe that smoking is a personal decision, and as long as people are educated and aware of tobacco's harmful effects they will choose to quit smoking. However most smokers are addicted to the smoking habit, and tobacco has become a vital food for them both physically and mentally. Also they doubt the harmful effects as there is no obvious impact can be seen shortly. So it is usually too challenge for people to quit smoking by themselves.

On the other hand, the governments can use legal power to legislate through a range of measures and educate public. Comprehensive tobacco control policies should be established, smoking in public area including workspace should be forbidden, selling to children should be banned, effective health warning on all tobacco products should be a must. At meantime, campaigns to promote healthy life and awareness of tobacco's harmful effects should be run regularly, and keep young generation away from smoking.

In conclusion, harmful effects of tobacco can be eliminated when both the governments and smokers take action immediately. The governments legislate to protect public from smoking damage. and educate people about the negative impact of tobacco, the smokers use will-power to quit smoking more actively.

Writing Feedback / PTE essay: Is it foolish to get married before completing studies [7]

The prompt (word limit: 200-300)

It is usually foolish to get married before completing your studies and getting established in a good job. Do you agree or disagree?

I am trying to practice essay writing for PTE, please kindly help review. Thank you!

marriage vs diploma

With the rapid development of the society more and more people are getting married before finishing studies and settling good job. Some are in favor of getting married before finishing studies is foolish, considering that there is no stable income source and the young students are not mature enough. But I disagree with that, in my opinion, by getting married in college the two people can benefit a lot from a range of measures, for example take responsibility, get closer and so on.

It is usually true that students do not have good income source and depend on parents financially, but this should not be an issue for getting married in college. The marriage is more about live together happily instead of money. Students have a lot of time to study together, build common interests and so on, all these will help them to strengthen the connection.

Moreover, getting married means the two people will take responsibility for each other and behave differently from before. Such change will get the couple to think and plan their future life and career more carefully, they can get mature during the process. The earlier the couple learn taking responsibility the better will they behave in the community, this in turn will benefit the society. And it is obvious nice having the two people study and discuss questions together, that can boost the efficiency of studying.

Taking considered measures, getting married in college should be supported and encouraged by the society, since it can benefit not only the two students but also the whole society. With more happy and good marriages in college were our life and the society to be better.

Writing Feedback / PTE Essay: should age discrimination be made illegal [3]

Should write 200-300 words on the prompt:
"Age discrimination occurs when a decision is made on the basis of a person's age. In the workplace, these are most often decisions about being employed in the first place, winning promotions or being unfairly dismissed. Should discrimination against older workers be made illegal. "

Please help review my essay below, thank you :)

too old for this job or not?

Today, there are more and more age discrimination in the workpace, older workers are treated unfairly in a various ways. There are arguments about whether it is legal to discriminate older workers. As far as I am concerned, the country should set up law to make discrimination against older workers illegal. This essay will discuss about more details.

It is usually true people may get sluggish when getting older. However, whether one is capable for a job depends more on his/her skill set, attitude and ability, rather than simply the one's age. For certain jobs, it is not required to be prompt physically, such as financial accounting and teacher.

More over, older workers make great contribution to their company and are more experienced in their area. Firing older workers just because they are old is not wise. Experience is priceless, it can help the company to work better and can help new comers to grow rapidly. Lastly, age discrimination will cause negative effect on young workers, since they can forecast their unfair treatment in the future, they will lose passion on their job and become less dedicated.

Taking considered measures, it is critial to establish laws to make age discrimination illegal in order to protect older workers, and promote competing fairly in workplace according to one's capability. By doing so it will help the older workers and encourage people to be more engaged in the work he/she is doing.

Writing Feedback / PTE Summarize written text in one sentence. IT and blue-collar workers [3]

Prompt: summarize the article in one sentence within 70 words.

IT divides society

For those political analysts whose main interest remains class divisions in society the biggest split these days is that between those who control and work with informational technology (IT) and those we might still call blue-collar workers. (...)

Summary sentence:

Due to information technology development in the late 20th and early 21st centuries, the society can be divided into two classes today, people who work with information technology and blue-collar workers, which is completely different from the old class divisions in the past.

Letters / Coffee vs. Tea for the English - an attempt for summing-up the text into one sentence [6]

An accurate summary

Summarize in one sentence within 75 words:

The essay:
The English have the reputation of being a nation of tea drinkers, but it wasn't always the case. By the end of the 17th century, the English were the biggest coffee drinkers in the Western world, and coffee houses became the places to be seen. As well as gossip, you could pick up talk of the latest intellectual developments in science, politics, and so on, in this age of scientific discovery and progress. At first coffee houses were very basic, a room with a bar at one end and a few plain tables and chairs. Customers paid a penny for a bowl - not a cup - of coffee. A polite young women was usually in charge of the bar because it was thought her presence would ensure that the customers didn't use bad language or cause any troubles. An added attraction was that coffee houses provided free newspapers and journals.

But people didn't go to the coffees just to drink coffee. They went to talk. They soon developed from simple cafes, where anyone with a penny could go for a drink and a chat, into clubs. People started to go to coffee houses where they would find other people who had the same jobs or who shared their interests and ideas, to talk and conduct business.

The great popularity of coffee houses lasted about a hundred years. In the later 18th century, increased trade with other countries made such luxuries as coffee cheaper and more easily available to the ordinary people. As a result people started to drink it at home. Also at this time more tea was imported from abroad, and the century of coffee house was replaced by the domestic tea-party as the typical English social occasion.

My summary:
Since the end of 17 century, coffee house, which was developed into a typical English social occasion for people to talk and conduct business while drinking coffee, appeared in England and gained popularity for about a hundred years, and in later 18th century it was replaced by domestic tea-party as result of increased international trading, which made coffee cheaper and more affordable by ordinary people, and more tea was imported.

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