Writing Feedback / Replacing Factories : The map below shows the alteration in an US town between over 62 years [3]

Review of changes in an American town

The maps illustrate regarding to comparing the alteration of American town in 1948 and 2010. It can be seen that both left side and right side of the canal had changed since commercial sector.

In the past, there was enormous number factories, residential, garden and local supermarket setting up at the left side of the canal which is replaceable. In 2010, however, almost these sectors have rebuilt into a specific function such as commercial building were replace from local supermarket. Also, Airport was constructed by replacing several factories. Besides, the garden in which a side part of factory was turned into the supermarket. Finally, commercial building opposite road was erected by replacing residential and local supermarket.

On the other hand, at the right side of the canal. There was a slight alteration of buildings in 2010. Only church which is located in a corner side canal and road has replaced on sports stadium. Henceforth, the number of residential houses all remained stable

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Writing Feedback / Two Shops: The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010 [3]

Two Shops

The map illustrates regarding to altering the Stoke village in 1930 and 2010. It can be seen that both in the western and eastern of the village had changed.

In the past, 1930, the western land between the River Stoke and a long side road had dominated by Farmland and two shops. By the time, in 2010, not only a long side farmland but also two shops had removed due to erect housing. Furthermore, it is clear that expanding some little road has constructed also.

On the other hand, instead of at opposite the road, there are three changes in eastern side of the road in 2010. Firstly, similar to western side, farmland which located behind the primary school had constructed into houses and expanded on the road. Secondly, the primary school had expanded on three buildings. Lastly, the large house that was located in behind garden had turned into retirement house.

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Writing Feedback / The alteration of expenditure in local government of Someland over 30-year period [3]

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 : The three charts below show the changes in annual spending in Somelands

The pie charts compare the alteration of expenditure in local government of Someland over 30-year period. Overall, almost all features were dominated by higher education but the smallest proportion of fund had spent by other parts. The total amount of expenditure decreased dramatically from 1980 to 2000 by both K-12 education and other features while environmental service increase gradually.

At the beginning of the 30-year period, the figures for higher education and K-12 education spent just over a half. By the end of 30 years, the former had risen by 5 percent while the latter had fallen dramatically. Moreover, the amount of expenditure had decreased steadily about one in twenty such as other parts while environmental services had risen gradually.

A more detail looks at pie chart reveals that the number of transportation and number of human resources fluctuated. Between 1980 and 1990, the former decreased while the latter increased. Furthermore, from 1990 to 2000 the number of those outgoing to transportation had risen, while the number of those spending on human resource had sharply fallen.

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Writing Feedback / Criminalism and various measures to lower this anomaly [2]

QUESTION: Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what the measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

an effective solution for very important issue

Criminalism still exist in almost countries in the world. In contrast, if a country established a well-standard sentence, it might happen. It is no doubt that many crime agents commit more crime after got the first sentence. I personally convince that this notion and claimed had caused by the lack of sentence standard. Hence, improving the punishment of quality can deter this problem.

The lack of standard in prison tend to generated resistant villain - a crime agent does not afraid of punishment so result in offender again. According to some news that I read, they had a resistant to prison because it preserving an enjoyed there. As a result, they did not feel some punishments, after got the punishment they will come to natural behavior. Taking my friend, Mr. Swandy who was a robber wallet as an example. He reveals to me after he caught, a prison is a comfortable place, everything basic necessary was preserving there. In fact, after got the sentence over 2 weeks, he robbers a laptop again.

Improving and adding punishment quality is the best way to tackle the problem. Reliance on the evidence, a significant effect of deterring this problem is enhancing sentence. In term of pretty crime, many countries give equal with the heavy of crime. Imprison offender during 3 months is common punishment for petty crime such robber. Hence, a national government might create or increase the punishment standard make longer stay in the prison and create a physic punishment like cut off man's hand as punishment for stealing - a sentence already had established in the kingdom of Arab Saudi, effective to reduce robbing cases.

All in all, reliance on the evidence, the lack of sentence standard will trigger or made a resistance characteristic to an offender committed the crime. On the other hand, Improving and adding punishment estimate an effective solution that carried out by the government.