Undergraduate / 'I am a delegate for Model United Nations at my school' - United Nations Model [3]

Could someone read this and give input / edit ?

I am a delegate for Model United Nations at my school. I can not say I enjoyed every minute of my membership, but I can say it has taught me a lot. Being a member for four years has taught me how important world issues really are.

Every session, I have represented a different country other than my home countries such as the United States and Korea.
At the most recent session, I represented the country of Iran on the topic of, "Iran's Nuclear Program." I had an instant feel of trepidation. I wasn't the best delegate out there, and certainly not the best speaker. To no surprise, the session went unresolved. Although the M.U.N delegates did not come up with a resolution that all the countries could agree on, I believe I tried my best to follow what the real representatives of Iran might have done.

MUN has taught me it's not easy being a country most people have a prejudice notion on; it has opened my eyes to the bigger world out there with the issues people are trying to resolve.

Undergraduate / 'I want the whole thing' - Stanford a good place for you. [2]

this is a superrrr rough draft and it's not really for stanford, its a class assignment essay.
i dont really want to lists clubs and activities that stanford offers because it seems like everyone is doing that, so is there anyway i can take this approach but make it seem like stanford is the place for me? thanks!

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Exhausted, I sit in my chair and brainstorm. I begin to think, "I am just one person among six other billion people. I am just one person among millions of other people who are applying to Stanford. What would make Stanford a good place for me and not the other millions?"

Throughout my life I have moved around, not state to state, but from country to country. I went through the pain of moving and leaving my friends, and the fear of making new friends and fitting in. Almost all my life I have lived overseas, whether it was in Japan or Korea. I have not yet experienced the lifestyle of most American teens. Even though the DoDDS Schools try to replicate state side schools as much as possible to make it feel like home, it is still not the same. During the summers, I am able to sample a small taste and a feel of what it would be like to live in the U.S. and go to school there. I don't want a taste anymore, I want the whole thing.

The opportunity is just around the corner and I am ready to make the final leap into full independence. I am finally at the end of my High School career and the acceptance of a college will make or break this opportunity to live the lifestyle I dreamed of.

Stanford isn't just one of my colleges among a list of others. I believe Stanford is a good place for me because it'll let me be the individual that I am, and I say this because it led founder, Leland Stanford to create a prestigious universities because he wasn't able to be the individual he wanted to be at another school. Stanford's overall community, especially the clubs they offer, seems to be a tight-knit family. Being a part of the student life at Stanford will let me develop as a person and I truly look forward to that.

Student Talk / Do SAT scores really count? [63]

Hi, So i just received my SAT scores and they're PRETTY bad ..
and i was wondering if SAT scores will SERIOUSLY hinder my chances at going to UC schools :/

My GPA is above 3.8 and i take AP courses, but my SAT score is below 1800 and i'm not sure
if this means i shouldnt apply ...

please help!

Student Talk / Common app - I only 150 words, but a minimum was 250. [16]

i know this is going to sound really stupid, but on the writing section of the common app
i accidentally submitted an essay of 150 words and not a minimum of 250 words
i already submitted this application to one of my colleges and i cant make anymore changes on the common app because they grayed out everything.

what do i do!? PLEASE HELP.

if there is nothing i can do, what do you suggest my next step be?!

Undergraduate / 'Organized, social, passionate' - BU Essay -- three words that describe me [3]

Hey, This is a rough draft -- and im not exactly sure how to end it, please help! :)

Prompt: In an essay of no more than 500 words, please select three words that describe you best and tell us how you will use these qualities/characteristics to contribute fully to the BU community.

It was April 17, 2009, the night juniors and seniors all waited for.
It was prom night.
I was a part of the junior class officers, helping with the rigorous months of preparation and planning it took to get prom the way we all envisioned it. All the fundraisers we went through, such as bake sales, pancake supper, and raffling, were worth it. As public relations officer, I had to make sure the word got out; this would be one of the best proms junior class has arranged.

I am organized.
Not only was I in charge of getting the word out, but I was also in charge with organizing the list of students who paid for their ticket and was attending prom. I created a separate list in alphabetical order for seniors and juniors. When the students approached the entrance, I simply highlighted their name, checking them off. I believe organization is vital to a successful outcome of work. Without it, things would become a mess, papers would be lost, and deadlines wouldn't be met. I plan to contribute my organization skills to the BU community. Teachers, students, and employers can rely on me to turn in things by deadline, organize group projects, and finish my work.

I am social.
To our relief, the junior class's prom night for seniors went a success. I had helped organize on of the most social event of the year and we, as a whole class of 2010, was proud of our accomplishment. It was teamwork that brought the success in our wonderful prom at the Millennium Hilton Hotel. My social skills taught me to become a better Public Relations officer, not only for the prom, but for other fundraising and junior class events as well. My social skills would benefit the BU community, because I am willing to work with others and I am team player.

I am passionate.
In all I do, I give it my best. I do not simply do the minor requirements of an assignment; I go all the way and a little further. I was dedicated to make prom work, even through all the disagreements and backfires on our prom plans, I didn't give up. I take my work seriously, especially if it is something I enjoy. I am passionate about my work.

My qualities show I am a student who is devoted to their education and society. My passionate, social, and organized nature will surely benefit the BU community, because I am a well-rounded student.

Undergraduate / NYU SUPPLEMENT - summer, college, poem, movie - edits required [3]

Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.

[please help me shorten this]

I love options. I am confident that I will receive a great education from NYU, regardless of the major I choose. The College of Arts & Science offers a multitude of choices that are suitable to my broad range of interests, such as the study of psychology and English. My English teacher has helped me realize that English is not solely a language, but an intricate form of art. Also, taking 5 years of French classes has widened my culture perspectives and invigorated my interest to understand the rest of the world. The College of Arts & Science provides various paths for me to explore my interests and develop a well-rounded foundation for my major. I know that NYU and all the opportunities I will experience there will construct a successful outcome in my life.

Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.

It is eleven fifty-nine
One minute until application deadline
I strive, struggle, and succeed
I'm nervous, but I click "proceed"

I have worked hard for my goal
I am passionate in my work, with all my soul
Determination, dedication, and devotion
The three words are my representation

(the last two lines i just randomly put in i need to edit those)

In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.

"Everything Happens for a Reason," a movie about Levana Lee's entire life from her birth to her 50th birthday. It reflects all her experiences and incorporates her belief that everything does happen for a reason. The film provides a different perspective on life and a imaginative journey through the eyes of a girl who grows up to see the world as it changes rapidly around her. Series of flash backs will create a puzzle that will become a whole in the end.

In addition to any work experience that you listed on your application, please tell us how you spent your most recent summer vacation.


I was home alone for most of my summer vacation. My parents had left a week earlier to travel together. I learned to travel by myself and had the chance to experience the world on my own. I visited my sister in California and experienced the famous Castro Street in San Francisco. I then flew to Maryland to spend time and bond with close relatives. There, I studied and prepared for the SAT's and went to Ocean City. I traveled to Washington to experience the city life in Seattle. I came home having explored new worlds.