Undergraduate / I CAN RELY ON MOM; PERSONAL STATEMENT - person with Significant influence [NEW]

Essay Topic - Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

Providing life lessons, creating a path and leading through example are the qualities of a role model. God places every person in our lives for a purpose. My life has been blessed with numerous number of influential people. All through life, I have had close friends and dear family that have been there for me and made me be what I am today. However, there is one remarkable person whose influence on my life is greater than everyone else put together, my mother.

My mother has always been the incomparable supporter in my life. She has always wanted the best for me. She sees great potential in me even at times when I barely see potential in myself. Throughout high school, my grades were not outstanding and they never really met my expected standards, however, mom constantly encouraged me, kept me motivated and optimistic

Mom is the one person who I can rely on for hope and reassurance. She at all times motivates me to improve each aspect of my life and has without fail been my cheerleader when life put me down and I didn't feel good enough.

I remember one of the lowest times in my life when I fell into depression because I felt I was not meeting my expectations in life. My grades were low, I lost confidence in myself, and I had no friends to turn to and no one to look to. But my mom came through for me. She became my best friend and my closest confidant. She fought with me in the fight to getting back on my feet, giving me hope and diligently pushed me to find strength and focus. Following this, I came out a different person, a stronger person

Thanks to her, I am different today. I am happy, optimistic, carefree, confident and full of desire and capability to make myself a better person.

Many at times people idolize famous athletes, actors, musicians and their likes, but I was blessed enough to have a role model living in my home. From her I learnt that through careful and efficient prioritizing you can easily achieve anything worth being proud of. Following in her footsteps is the true path to happiness and turning my dreams to reality.

I personally think I did well with writing my essay however, I think I'm falling into the trap of talking more about my Mom and how she impacted me that I'm not talking enough about myself. Is it just me or am I idolizing her too much in this essay? I tried my best to discuss how I'm a changed person and how I look up to her. But is this really answering the question? I would love any advice that would help me make this essay better.

Undergraduate / My mother's influence; Person with Significant Influence [5]

MY MOTHER'S INFLUENCE
The role played by role models in one's life cannot be downplayed. They are integral in providing life lessons, offering directions, and taking lead roles for those people looking on to them. There is always a reason as to why God brings some people in our lives. In this regard, I must confess that my mother has been the greatest influence in my life. Her significance in my life cannot be matched to any other person I have ever come across. Since my tender ages, she has stood by me in several circumstances, offering prerequisite guidance whenever I needed it the most. Life has not been that smooth to me especially when it comes to my academic pursuits. There is that time where my performance in class had hit the rock bottom. I contemplated giving up as it had become apparent that I was not fit to be a capable student. Out of all the advices and criticisms I received, the voice of my mother was the only reason for me to keep on trying.

My mother has taught me the quality of determination and sacrifice. I recall a particular instance where I performed dismally in my sixth grade. The results were not only a shame, but also an utter shock for me considering the effort I had put in while preparing for the exams. I expected to pass. Unfortunately, this was never to be. Discouraged, I tore the results slip into pieces and threw it away. Education did not matter any longer for me. I could not imagine that those grades were the best rewards to offer my mother after all years of sacrificing her hard earned money on my school fees. Contrary to my expectations, my mother understood the challenges I was facing. Instead of pointing an accusing finger to me, she told me that I do not have to kill myself every time I feel unhappy about life. This statement always lingers in my mind whenever I face challenges. It boosted my self-esteem and determination to this very day.

The characters I portray currently are all linked to the positive influence my mother has had in my life. She always reminds me that life offers us a number of options to pursue. As such, the choices one make has consequences that accompany them. In this view, she encouraged me to pursue the causes that only have positive impact on my life and to the lives of those people surrounding me. I have learned to be honest and to act with integrity in all circumstances. She has also taught me to accept the things I do not have the power to change and emulate the behaviors that are positive to my well-being.

My mother remains the most significant person to ever influence my life. When my world seemed to be tumbling down and everybody turned their faces away from my predicaments, my mother proved what motherly love really means. A recollection of such moments draws me even much closer to her. The sacrifice she has made in so far as my academic pursuits are concerned is simply incredible. I acknowledge the fact that there are several other people who, in one way or the other, have also touched my life positively. Nevertheless, among them all, my mother is outstanding.

I really tried to make this essay as much as about me as it does about my Mom. However I've gotten some critiques saying that i need to talk more about myself. I think i did a pretty fair job in trying to balance the essay out between my Mother and I, so that colleges want to accept me more than they want to accept my Mom. I need some help because I've heard many people who write about influence essay's and fall into the trap of not talking enough about themselves and end up talking more about why this person has influenced them in their lives, when the essay is really supposed to be talking about how you used the influenced you gained from the person and the impact it had on you. I will appreciate any helpful advice. =]