Writing Feedback / [IELTS 1] Time Spent in different media by teenagers and US Adults. [4]

This is my first writting in here, please help me friends.

The line graph below shows the time spent wit different media by children and teenagers per day. The table below shows the average time spent per day with major media by adults from 2010 to 2013.

summarise the information in both the graph and table by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph present data about teenagers who spend the time with five variant media per-day in hours and the table illustrates about United State Adults who waste the time with plenty of media per-day in minutes over a four year period, from 2010 till 2013.Overall mostly inhabitant watch television as the best choice to spend their time, it shows between line graph and table.

According from the graph, music and audio are quite popular with 3 hours per-day and become the second options to spend the time among teenagers between 18 years old, in contrast with US Adults prefer spend the time approximately 170 minutes each day with internet than audio visual with 89 minutes in 2013.

Print media such as Newspaper and Magazine are less popular than other media. US Adults spend the time with below 45 minutes each day for over four years and teenagers spend their time with read print media just under an hour each day.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: children should studying hard or playing sport? Both can improve their future [3]

it is important that children should study hard at school. time spent playing sport is time wasted.
to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that studying hard is essential part for children, otherwise others people think that playing sport is waste of time. In my point of view, both of studying hard and playing sports are part of life to children.

On the other hand, studying hard will give children a better future. Studying hard gives children with a plenty of knowledge and skills for their future. Naturally, children will be growing up and looking for their job. For instance, children who always studying hard and getting high achievement, it will be easy to pass qualification for work and they are more likely to find great work at multinational company. If they working at multinational company as the result is they can earn higher salary. The message is when you always studying harder than others you will get best results.

At the same time, playing sports will give good effects on children. There are many popular sports among children such as football, basketball, and volleyball. Also, there are many benefit when children doing sport. Firstly, children who always playing sport like football, they will be active as a person and learn to become team-player. It will be good for children, because indirectly they will learn how to socialize each other as a team. That will make children getting lots of friends, so they can contribute positively to community. Secondly, playing sport makes children getting healthy and become children's well-being.

In conclusion, both studying hard at school and playing sports can improve children's future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; having purpose of life and being helpful as the main factors to achieve happiness [4]

Happiness is considered very important in life.
Why is it difficult to define?
What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Mostly people want to be happy because happiness is the essential part of human being. However each people have different to describe about happiness, there is common point to reach your happiness.

Happiness is difficult to define because each inhabitant has their standard to be happy. Some people believe that having amount of money can bring your happiness and completely give what you want. For instance, you will be happy when you get your limited exclusive bag with your money and you can travel around the world without feeling worries although you spend lots of money. It means that your goal oriented in your life is all about money. On the other side, people choice family and health are more important than money. Family will give you extraordinary happiness because they are the closest people in the world with you and never replace with other. Health is one of the important things in life, without health life you cannot get your overwhelming career and make your family proud.

Meanwhile, it is difficult to describe happiness because people do not have the same answer about being happy. However, some people agree there are plenty of points to be happy. Firstly, it becomes harder when you have no purpose of life. You should create your goals in your life, for example you want great career with big salaries for your education, for your better future, for food and drink and safe place. As the result, you will be happy when you reach your goals. Secondly, people are the social creature that is normally they want sharing and caring with other people. Your feeling will be better when you more often spend your time, money and power to help each other.

In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because people have a different perception, but in my view you will be happy when you have the main point of happiness such as purpose of life and help each other.