Writing Feedback / Ielts Task 2: Even though globalization affects the world's economics in a very positive way,... [2]

World is converting to the global village which shift world economics to become globalization. However, it does have certain merits but and demerits as well. Which are going to discuss in below paragraph.

Firstly the advantages of the globalization: this concept delivers the value of assurance to the people for getting quality goods with reasonable price. The prices remain almost same all over the world. So there is no chance of bribery or middle man commission. Which improvise the better product with good life to the people. For example, the multi-national brand soft drink coca-cola selling price is almost same in all over the world. Similarly, besides consumer's aspects, government gets the high ratio of foreign trade investment in the country. This leads to create new job opportunity, which addresses the certain aspects of the unemployment problem of the nation. For instance US based APPLE company open iphone manufacture plant in China.

Secondly, the disadvantages of the globalization of the world economics is quite realistic and prosperous for the nation. If nation fail to control, then it could be disastrous for the nation own industries because multinational or global industry have huge investment and strong consumer followers. It could make local consumes to divert from local product to the high brand value products. After all, everybody wants to use branded goods. Likewise, it could be quite tough for the local industries to compete, because of the cost of production would be quite cheaper than the local goods which make local company to lay back and may lead to the shutdown their business as well.

In conclusion, I would like to say that, the globalization of the economic for under develop or developing country could be dangerous, if government could not manage to monitor them. But it does have certain benefits for the nation people as well. This makes people to use the fine products with suitable price.

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Writing Feedback / Writing a letter requesting for the accommodation - Ielts Task 1: GT [3]

Ielts Task 1: GT:

Q: You and your family are moving to another country, and you are looking for rented accommodation there.

Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter
=introduce yourself and your family
=describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find
=give your preference for the location of the accommodation

Dear Sir,

I would like to write a letter requesting you to find accommodation in Australia Sydney nearby my office.

My name is XXXX XXX XXX I am married with two young children. Currently, I am living in India. My recent promotion relocated my job base location to Australia Sydney. Therefore I am looking for accommodation over there. It should have at least two bedrooms, one reasonable size garden so that children can find some space to play.

I would like to have a house near by suburban area which should not be so far from city market. Local transportation should be easily accessible and also children school should be not so far.

I have to migrate there within third week of this month. So I hope to get your response with reasonable list of your offers as early as possible.

Thank You

Your sincerely
XXXX XXX XXX
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Writing Feedback / Apology Letter - missed attendance at the birthday celebration (Ielts Task 1) [3]

One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
=Apologies for missing the birthday celebration
=explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend
=and say what you would like to do to show that you are sorry

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Dear Mike,

I hope you are well and you had a fantastic time on your birthday.

I am sorry that I could not attend your birthday celebration party and for letting you know beforehand that i wouldn't be able to come. I feel terrible that I could not contact you during these period.

The truth is I had a very important meeting to attend along with my boss with one of our valued customers, and i could not tell this to anyone because as my boss strictly instruct everyone to keep this meeting secret and it should not be leaked until we complete the task.

Therefore, despite of all of these, still I want to celebrate your birthday with you. So I would like to propose you to have a dinner with me along with your family and friend circle. Let's celebrate your birthday party once again. There is no harm to celebrate birthday twice in a year.

Hope you might like this idea and accept my sincere apologies.

Your friend
pdeep
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Writing Feedback / In your letter explain why and for how long you want to take time off from work [3]

IELTS TASK1:

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to take time off work
- give details of the amount of time you need
- suggest how your work could be convered while you are away
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Dear Mr. Smith,

I would like to apply for some time off from the work in next month, as you know my elder brother is getting married.

These days my brother is staying in Sydney Australia. He is getting married with Australian based Nepali women, who worked together. So they have asked us to come over there for their wedding celebration.

As per his marriage ceremony plan, I need at least 2 weeks of holiday. It includes the arrival and departure time as well. During these days, our plan includes first engagement party then shopping for wedding and one day for wedding. After that, 3 days later we will have wedding reception celebration party. In remaining two or three days I want to take my parents to some famous and beautiful place site seen.

For my work arrangement, I have already discussed with my colleagues. In my absence they agreed to look after my work and also already asked customers to cooperate with us for these two weeks. If urgent call me. I will send you my mobile number once I get new Australia telecom mobile sim card. Beside these I will manage some time to check my email at the evening.

I hope you have understood my situation and grant me two weeks holidays from Nov. 10th 2015 to Nov. 24th 2015 (i.e. 2 weeks).

Your sincerely
Pdeep

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Road problem near by my house. [3]

There is a problem in the road outside your house.
Write a letter to your local councilor. In your letter
=introduce yourself
=explain what the problem is
=tell the councilor what you would like to be done

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention regarding problem we are currently facing.

My name is Pdeep Tha. I am working as telecom engineer in national telecom and leaving in New baneshwor sankhamul radha road block no. 80 since 2000 along with my family.

Recently, due to last week heavy rain, a large hole has been observed on the almost center of the road in front of my house. During raining, the pothole fills with water and also not easily visible for the drivers. Due to this slowly other part of road is also being damaged.

Our local community member already tried to contact with road construction Govt. Org., but they are not responding. Therefore we would like to request you to look after this issue personally and take immediate action to heal the damaged road, to protect the possible casualties as early as possible.

Thank You
Your Sincerely,
Pdeep Tha

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Writing Feedback / On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item and you have no travel insurance - letter [2]

On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost.

Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter:
=describe the item you lost
=explain how you lost item
tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I would like to inform you that I have lost my belongings during my travel to Nepal.
I have lost my laptop along with bag pack which includes Lenovo 420 series laptop configured i5 4GB RAM SSD Hard Disk.

While I was travelling from Butwal to Bhairawaha on the local transportation, I put my bag-pack under my sit. On the Bhairawaha bustation, while I was getting out of the bus, the bus driver were so hurry that they did not wait for me to collect my bag-pack. I tried to stop them but they drove away. The bus number Ba. 2 Pa xxxx. I file the lost items information to local authority. They are still investigating.

I took travel insurance with your company and which include all my lost items as well. Therefore I would like to claim my insurance. For your further investigation I have attached the letter of registration in local authority and lost items snap shots for your reference. Please go through it for more details and let me know if you need any further inquiries.

I am looking forward for your kind cooperation and support.

Thank You

Your sincerely
Pdeep Tha

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