Graduate / I am an experienced software engineer - apply for ANU master degree, self- statement [10]

would any kind soul be good enough to check my poor essay? i will really appreciate that.

Personal Statement

I have been working in AA company as a senior software engineer for about three years, and before that I had worked in a cell phone company for another three years. So I have about six years' experience about software engineering and development. I found I really enjoyed how an intractable and complex problem is located and is finally addressed.

However, the world is changeable and fast-paced and sometimes we are likely to be out of date because of millions of new and exotic ideas generated every day. Future has become unpredictable. At this time, data science, as a new field and full of numerous potential commercial chances, has become a promising choice. It has fabulous application prospects such as machine learning and automation and I can definitely benefit from it. So I spend a lot of my spare time in learning the basic knowledge of data mining. I learnt almost all classification algorithms such as logistic regression and decision tree. Coincidentally, my project manager had a chat with me where I expressed my decision and intention of switching to a new subject to him. He was so nice that I was put into AA team after that. The activities of attending several sessions about data mining and my involvement in some data mining projects invigorated me to achieve a new career in this brandy new field.

Another reason that drive me into this field is that this subject is also an exciting and interesting field to me. There are some engineering knowledge that I can leverage from my previous working experience and I am also good at math during my tertiary school. So I am sure I can be competent for such a new challenge. By applying data science, I will be able to extend my career path to a brand new level, as well as to achieve self-satisfaction and self-accomplishment.

I have chosen ANU for several reasons. Firstly, it is located in Canberra. The environment of ANU campus is good enough in comparison with some famous tourist resorts. The water would be sparking and rapping gracefully, and I can also imagine the rolling hills within the walking distance. The students there can be benefit from picturesque campus, thereby easily focus on studying. Secondly, with the rapid growth in economics of the world, a people person is increasingly needed. While I was staying in the United States for a several weeks' business trip last year, I was deeply impressed by the people who is easily to express their ideas. So studying aboard can provide me an opportunity to be exposed to many students with different cultural background, which will definitely boost my ability of being a cultivate person. Thirdly, I have known from your home websites and many other online resources that ANU is a prestigious school which is strong at engineering. This will be the right place where I can sharpen my brain as well as my skill.

In a nutshell, I am an experienced software engineer and I have already experienced many hard but interesting projects before, and I will be glad to challenge myself to be adapted to an advanced analyst in the next few years.

Writing Feedback / Contrast people of your age with those of your parents' generation; beliefs, values, goals... etc. [5]

Topic:
Contrast people of your age with those of your parents' generation. Think about beliefs, values, goals, traditions, language, etc.

Guidance:
- Please use the "Point-by-Point" format.

- Introduce your essay in an interesting way and create a clear thesis statement at the end of your introductory paragraph. Keep the introduction short.

- Make sure you have 3 body paragraphs of similarities OR differences. Also, make sure they are well supported with details and examples.

- Make sure your body paragraphs have clear topic sentences with transition words.

- In your conclusion, remember to briefly summarize the main ideas you have presented in the body paragraphs and then take your ideas further to their logical conclusion, but don't introduce any new ideas. Keep the conclusion short.

My essay:

What is the difference you can find and seek from your generation and your parents'? If you ask a man on the street and chances are that he will say something like "they have been behind the curve while we are not." There are three major differences between these two generations, and this essay will discuss all of them.

One huge difference between these two types of people is the ability of manipulating electric devices. In my parents' time, they didn't receive any training about how a person use those difficult machines such as computers, cell phones, and ipad. Thus, it is less likely for them to retrain this skill when they are old. When my parents need to search on the internet or to buy something on Amazon, they always resort to my suggestions. On the other hand, there are millions of electric devices these days, and young people use them at school or at work. In the other word, we have enough chances and resources to prepare ourselves as an information man. Finally, young people always have a strong idea and a better operation in comparison with their parents.

Another difference between these two types of people is our priority in family members. Most of people of my parents' generation have a frequent contact with their siblings, aunts or uncles. They have a party when a special festival happens. During these occasions, my parents prefer to share their working experience, lifestyle, or even their children stories with all others in the party. However, young people are more likely to live and work within our own place. We choose limited friends, who should be very familiar with our hobbies, rather than relatives to share our ideas, and we tend to communicate with them on cellphone or on internet.

Finally, the biggest difference between the elder and young people is our philosophy of life and values. The elders disprove that people can change too much in today's world, and they believe that people can barely break the mould. In contrast, young people think that we can create and build anything, and many of us like to follow fashion.

In conclusion, young people and their parents have many differences in terms of their beliefs and traditions. These two types of people have two different brains because they are living in different times.

Writing Feedback / English is no longer a foreign language; it is now a global language. IELTS TASK 2. [7]

Question: The advantages brought by the spread of English as a "global language" will outweigh the disadvantages. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

Respond:

It is no doubt true that English language has already played a dominant role in the world. Some people argue that this social phenomenon is not a good trend while others hold an opposite idea. This essay will discuss both of these two opinions.

On the one hand, English language is essential in our daily life in terms of work, study, and life. Many international corporations choose English as their business language during numerous commercial conferences; a lot of prestigious universities select English as their main teaching language; English boards and signs can be found everywhere in a big city. People use English to transfer their ideas and feelings, to achieve business targets, and to gain more teaching resources. Needless to say, English is very important, and users should give priority to learn this language.

On the other hand, it may also be harmful to the cultural diversity. There are millions of countries with diverse languages. If citizens all over the world used the same language, they might lose their valuable cultural heritage. For example, many American Indian languages have permanently vanished after cultural assimilation because stronger and bigger language has a huge impact on smaller countries. This could definitely be a huge loss to all human beings.

In conclusion, by introducing English language, people can be provided with the opportunities to talk to and learn from each other; however, people should also take action to preserve or revive their mother tongue.