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Name: Nanda
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Last Post: Jan 13, 2017
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nandasharma   
Dec 25, 2016
Undergraduate / I am an elastic and completely down-to-earth guy. A note to my future roommate. (250) [12]

@Holt
I'm extremely sorry if my previous response offended you by any means. I just wanted your further suggestions for editing some specific parts of my essay. That's all. You needn't apologize to me. I'm the one seeking help from you. :) How can I add some aesthetic touches to these kinda responses ?
nandasharma   
Dec 25, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Personality of Candidate Requirement in Recruitment of the Company [3]

It is the opinion of some views that the recruitment process is aimed....

who has the certain personality such as an innovative thinkingthinker and easy to workcapable of working individually

or the individual who can competentcompete to finish his/her works by work teamteam-effort and can obey the rules of his/her jobs.

As we know, each company often be demanddemands for

@SarlindaDS_27
Sarlinda, there are plenty of grammatical errors and subject-verb disgreements in your article which can be hopefully corrected by yourself after 2-3 through reviews. Please, do post the article again after your self-correction
nandasharma   
Dec 25, 2016
Undergraduate / I am an elastic and completely down-to-earth guy. A note to my future roommate. (250) [12]

@Holt
As far as I'm concerned this essay is meant only for the Admissions Committee to review my other extra capabilities/interests rather than for matching perfect room partners at dorms. I respect your thoughts on inserting the sentimental connections that I'd develop with my future mate, but the word limit denies any changes and I'm also very satisfied with this. But, if you think I could insert your words somewhere in between my current text, then I'd be more than happy to do so. I think the statement "Conclusively, we both shall have a lot of fun despite XXX's rigorous curriculum." will do your job.

Thanks.
nandasharma   
Dec 25, 2016
Undergraduate / COLLABORATION AND THE TECHNOLOGICAL REVOLUTION [9]

@Holt
I think I've clearly mentioned the Voice Delivery system as the major issue for our robot, and also I learned several important skills from my partners

as I soaked up diverse skill-sets regarding apt coding platforms for robotics with the embellishment of system architecture and exteriors.

;However, I've made the following changes.

I was unsure about the configuration of the Voice-delivery modules for my Information-bot.

I lacked the knowledge of the Voice-delivery modules for my Information-bot.

Science Club buddies (from High-school): ...

Science Club buddies: which proved to be one of my wisest decisions as I implemented diverse skillsets from my friends regarding apt codes for voice-delivery and the embellishment of system architecture with exteriors for the finalization of our bot. After a fortnight of restless collaboration for constructing our robot
nandasharma   
Dec 25, 2016
Undergraduate / I am an elastic and completely down-to-earth guy. A note to my future roommate. (250) [12]

Virtually all of XXX's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate -- and us -- know you better. (100 to 250 words)

Let's have fun together - letter to my eventual roomie



Dear future roommate,
I am an elastic and completely down-to-earth guy. I can adjust at any viable circumstances you wish for. If you are much of an anti-social nerd then I could study like a madman with you or I could organize a mini-hackathon inside our dormitory featuring only you and I tackling various mathematical/computing challenges-just like I used to compete with my siblings back at home. However, if you are an outgoing fellow who shares his ideas/imaginations with colleagues to venture on an ambitious academic/extracurricular pursuit, then I'm the roomie of your dreams. I love playing music-I hope you won't crush my guitar someday- and I'm looking forward to having several jam-sessions after our long hours of study/assignments for our recreational purpose. At our leisure, I could briefly introduce you to the diverse cultural fiestas of Nepal and momentarily you may also find yourself chatting with me in Nepalese since I'm a 'brilliant tutor'- as quoted by my classmates, students and teachers-, so you needn't worry a pinch even if you get flustered by a professor's lecture or a complex numerical: I'll always attempt my fullest. I'm also a sports enthusiast-be it an indoor board game or an outdoor athletic adventure, you can always count me in. I believe in working smart than working hard so I adhere to going to bed and getting up early for my academic pursuits rather than burning midnight oil. Conclusively, we both shall have a lot of fun despite XXX's rigorous curriculum.
nandasharma   
Dec 25, 2016
Undergraduate / 'Can I be the next team captain?' A bizarre situation and my reaction [3]

@shuprova
When the prompt asks you

a problem and/or an unfamiliar situation.

, then you gotta take the demand of it seriously. Your essay seems extremely common among several related articles I've seen. Think about a major upheaval of your life. Something that was a bit devastating not only for your academic life but also for your beloveds. This way the reader will pay more attention to your article. Please do revise your essay more seriously.

Best.
nandasharma   
Dec 25, 2016
Undergraduate / COLLABORATION AND THE TECHNOLOGICAL REVOLUTION [9]

XXX students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development. (100 to 250 words)

Collaboration and the technological revolution



I aspired to build a robot the day I watched the sci-fi fiction 'Robocop'. With random electronic parts and junk wires, which I had procured from my family's junk box, I began soldering the greenish electric kits without anyone's knowledge. The machine didn't really do anything-other than get me into trouble. My brother informed me that those "random" parts were rather costly RCA tubes. Still, such household fiascoes didn't hold me back from participating in Yantra, a National Robotics Competition featuring robotic moguls & brilliant high-schoolers with their sophisticated machinery, unlike my homemade recreation toys. Although I was acquainted with the programmability of microelectronics, I was unsure about the configuration of the Voice-delivery modules for my Information-bot. I was always a solitary techie getting my hands dirty in diverse technical entities: from making a bulletin software for my high-school administration to designing UX for an application of Junior Jaycees humanitarian foundation. However, this time the state of helplessness urged me to collaborate with some handy Science Club members and after a fortnight of restless collaboration, the bot was ready. Ultimately, although my team seemed disappointed for just securing the 'Innovative-bot' honor, I was gratified to the nth degree after witnessing the dominance of team-effort over my technical insularity. Without my team's backing, my participation would have been a shaggy-dog story. Watching our creation do something as simple as speaking few instructions was exhilarating, particularly when we had built it with praiseworthy team-spirit. Collaboration is the soul of contemporary technological revolution.
nandasharma   
Dec 24, 2016
Undergraduate / Lehigh Essay. What do you and Lehigh have in common? [8]

@alexgzm
Alejandro , here is the thing, you should be writing a straightforward comparison essay of the commonalities between you and the university that you have chosen to apply to. This is an introspective essay. For me, I think that this was not a recommended response to answer this type of question. Thus, my suggestion is that it is better for you to directly state the answer briefly in the beginning of your answer and elaborate / explain the details afterwards.The similarities between the two will come from the way that you share some ideologies with the school.
nandasharma   
Dec 22, 2016
Essays / My impact on communities. Help me to understand the demand of the following supplemental essay . [9]

@Holt
Here, I've stuffed in the following phrase to highlight my impact in locale. What do you say ?
. I would return to Nepal not only to deescalate the national illiteracy by launching an education web portal- something like Khan Academy, but more accessible to the geographically remote regions of Himalayas- but also to exploit my XXX-blessed skills to shield the infectious Government mainframes and datagrams with topmost priority from disastrous cyberthreats.
nandasharma   
Dec 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing 2: people think that men and women have different qualities to certain jobs [3]

@Arlen
I found following Grammatical inconsistencies.

Due to the various characterscharacteristics ....,

However, I stand on the opposite towardside of this issue.

to cause some stereotypestereotypical mentality that men are much qualified

... there are some jobs are suitable for specific gender...

I still hold the againstan opposing attitude that any gender could beis capable of a job asthat he/she is willing to do it.

nandasharma   
Dec 22, 2016
Essays / My impact on communities. Help me to understand the demand of the following supplemental essay . [9]

@Holt
I prepared the following essay by incorporating words from my earlier article for engineering college. Hope this will work ?

As my neighbor, Mr.Shakya, had already threatened me a couple of times to not mess with his private (highly secured) network, I-a mischievous 8th grader- used to hole up in my bedroom when he frequently complained my parents about his dysfunctional ADSL router: by plotting a simple brute-force attack to the Subisu's(a National ISP) network-bridge being incognito in the workgroup, I had gained access to his Wireless Nanostation and traced the family's entire devices' MAC addresses following the restriction of access from their own wireless network by activating the built-in MAC filtration protocol. With diverse technical skillsets regarding network topologies, I, however, never practiced severe cyber felony which could critically injure several institutions' database and privacy as well as lead me behind bars. This juvenile delinquency of manipulating wireless networks in vicinity-which bummed out my family and neighbors-was maneuvering my enthusiasm towards something groundbreaking in Wireless technology: Extreme Strengthening of Digital Security. From controversial incidents like Russian intrusion in American election to global economic treachery of Panama Papers, this omnipresence of vulnerability in cyber security psyched me up to enlighten myself with exclusive technical knowledge on Cyber Forensics as well as dedicate my time and labor for tightening of network security in my locality rather than the usual commitment towards cyber-infraction. I have concluded that for strict maintenance of upright cyber-world, classical digital communication paradigms ought to be revised for the nanoscale with Artificial Intelligence (A.I) capabilities.

XXX's prestigious science and engineering department equipped with state-of-the-art technology and pioneering approach towards education is what I need to kick off my pursuit of lessening cybercrimes, not to mention perfecting database management with flawless web transmission. By offering interdisciplinary science program, XXX provides a unified platform for engineering and computer science not available in any other institution, and forges fundamental links between modern mathematics and technological engineering. Under the supervision of world's finest educators and researchers like Takunari Miyazaki and Nancy M. Fleming, I will not only be getting mileage out of top-notch laboratory facilities from my early freshmen days, but I'll also be teaming up with Nanoscience & A.I. enthusiasts from other science/engineering faculties. Apart from getting my hands dirty by designing molecular transceivers and motors for short-range calcium signaling or crafting electromagnetic channel models and protocols for an efficacious long-range pheromonal Nano networking, XXX's Electron Microscopy Facility equipped with the recherché infrastructures of Transmission & Scanning Electron Microscopes along with several sophisticated computing courses, particularly Artificial Intelligence(CPSC 382) & Computer Security(CPSC 385) could enlighten me about the futuristic technologies regarding their sustainable employment towards conglomeration of Nanoscience and A.I for Cyber Security: synthesis of a Nano-scientifically Intelligent Computer Network.

After an epoch of miscellaneous scientific explorations at XXX, I am looking forward to being professionally involved in a major A.I project for substitution of contemporarily dumb networking entities with nanoengineered smart technology and revolutionizing the conventional digital storage and processing mechanisms for the sake of cybersecurity, not to mention my mission to deescalate the national illiteracy by launching an education web portal- something like Khan Academy, but more accessible to the geographically remote regions of Nepal. On a bigger picture, by following a biologically-hybrid principle of miniaturizing microelectronic and micro-electro-mechanical technologies accompanied with the realization of smart nanomachines from the molecular components, I am determined to invent invulnerable systems, which are superbly optimized in terms of architecture, power consumption, communication, and motivate their utilization as the building blocks for new energy-efficient and eco-friendly initiatives. This undertaking will ensure a breakthrough in economics, sustainable commercial growth, homeland security, healthcare accompanied with the lessening of devastating cyber offenses in today's digital empire, simultaneously, via heavily encrypted mechanisms buttressed by nanotechnology and A.I for every online business. Despite being an unprecedented communication paradigm, Intelligent Nano-networking demands an interdisciplinary approach with backings from highly experienced and qualified group of elites equipped with satisfactory infrastructural commodities, which I readily discover at XXX's engineering department.
nandasharma   
Dec 21, 2016
Undergraduate / 'I am determined to invent invulnerable systems' - Engineering College Supplemental Essay. (650) [5]

@Holt I made the following change for clarification of my "Merging Nanoscience with CyberSecurity" purpose.

Moreover, the infrastructures of Center of Advanced Computing-Red Cloud, DataDirect Networks- along with those dedicated for Nano-scientific researches could enlighten me about the futuristic technologies regarding their sustainable employment towards conglomeration of Nano-engineering and Cyber Security: synthesis of a supreme Nano-scientific Computer Network.
nandasharma   
Dec 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Higher fuel price to solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world [2]

@krempetkov
George, No offense but hiking up the price of the fuel sounds ridiculous/childish and also not quite practical. Behind the process of increasing the price, there comes several conventions and arrangements regarding the share market. So, if you wish to mention those informations then your article would be a little more acceptable.
nandasharma   
Dec 20, 2016
Undergraduate / 'I am determined to invent invulnerable systems' - Engineering College Supplemental Essay. (650) [5]

XXX Engineering celebrates innovative problem solving that helps people, communities...the world. Consider your ideas and aspirations and describe how a XXX Engineering education would allow you to leverage technological problem-solving to improve the world we live in.

As my neighbor, Mr.Bhattarai, had already threatened me a couple of times to not mess with his private (highly secured) network, I-a mischievous 8th grader- used to hole up in my bedroom when he frequently complained my parents about his dysfunctional ADSL router: by plotting a simple brute-force attack to the Subisu's(a National ISP) network-bridge being incognito in the workgroup, I had gained access to his Wireless Nanostation and traced the family's entire devices' MAC addresses following the restriction of access from their own wireless network by activating the built-in MAC filtration protocol. With diverse technical skillsets regarding network topologies, I, however, never practiced severe cyber felony which could critically injure several institutions' database and privacy as well as lead me behind bars. This juvenile delinquency of manipulating wireless networks in vicinity-which bummed out my family and neighbors-was maneuvering my enthusiasm towards something groundbreaking in Wireless technology: Extreme Strengthening of Digital Forensics and Security. From controversial incidents like Russian intrusion in American election to global economic treachery of Panama Papers, this omnipresence of vulnerability in cyber security psyched me up to enlighten myself with exclusive technical knowledge on Cyber Forensics as well as dedicate my time and labor for tightening of network security in my locality rather than the usual commitment towards cyber-infraction. I have concluded that for strict maintenance of upright cyber-world, classical digital communication paradigms ought to be revised for the nanoscale.

XXX's prestigious engineering facility equipped with state-of-the-art technology as well as interdisciplinary and pioneering approach towards education is what I need to kick off my pursuit of lessening cybercrimes, not to mention perfecting database management and web transmission. Under the supervision of world's finest educators, researchers and industrial moguls, I will not only be getting mileage out of top-notch engineering facilities, but I'll also be teaming up with Cyber Security & Cloud Computing enthusiasts from other well-rounded institutions and private tech partners. I was hold spellbound when I discovered David Lifka's disclosure of Red Cloud, an on-demand research collaboration cloud platform, which would not only allow junior techies like me to exploit multiple highly functional network infrastructures economically, but also promote the smart investment on technological quests by discouraging redundant investigations and availing open access to exceptional hardware/software platforms. Moreover, the infrastructures ofXXX Center of Advanced Computing- likethe Red Cloud, DataDirect Networks- could enlighten me about the futuristic technologies with their sustainable employment for the upliftment of Cyberspace as well as construct an ideal framework for me to work on the modelling of a supreme Nano-scientific Computer Network. XXX's celebrated personalities of Nanoscale Science & Technology facility like Richard Hennig and Greg Fuchs would be my apt mentors both in/out of the classroom as well as for the exploitation of sophisticated laboratory resources- be it for designing molecular transceivers and motors for calcium signaling of short-range or crafting electromagnetic channel models and protocols for an efficacious long-range pheromonal Nano networking.

After an epoch of miscellaneous scientific experiences at XXX, I am looking forward to being professionally involved in a major Nano-scientific project on substituting networking entities with nanoengineered technology and revolutionizing the conventional digital storage and processing mechanisms for the sake of cybersecurity. By following a biologically-hybrid principle of miniaturizing current microelectronic and micro-electro-mechanical technologies accompanied with the realization of nanomachines from the molecular components, I am determined to invent invulnerable systems, superbly optimized in terms of architecture, power consumption and communication, and motivate their utilization as building blocks for new energy-efficient and eco-friendly initiatives. This undertaking will ensure a breakthrough in economics, sustainable commercial growth, homeland security, healthcare accompanied with the lessening of major cyber offenses in today's digital empire, simultaneously, via heavily encrypted channels for online data transmission. Despite being an unprecedented communication paradigm, Nanonetwork demands an interdisciplinary approach with backings from highly experienced and qualified group of elites equipped with satisfactory infrastructural commodities, which I readily discover at XXX's engineering department.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / College Supplemental Writing: 'What is your dream ?' (250 words) [6]

@Holt
Here is the new version of my essay.

I am Wikipedia in flesh- always pondering over exclusive ideas and knowledge; I'm insatiably hungry. My dream is to become successful; however, I haven't marked accomplishments of humongous wealth via lucrative profession or a sound health as my life's milestones.

I dream of serving my nation with uttermost passion for busting the social evils that have haunted Nepalese society predominantly. As a Computer Science enthusiast, I dream of brainstorming on variety of technical entities- Artificial Intelligence, Security Loopholes, Machine Learning- for formulation of an invulnerable Web mechanism. I dream of creating an education portal-like Khan Academy, but more accessible to geographically remote locations- for securing the future of impoverished Nepal by educating the commanders of tomorrow. I dream of utilizing my technical knowledge to trigger Nepalese Industrial Revolution- the only hope of progress for agro-based Nepalese commercial market- through employment of futuristic A.I. technology with flawless monitoring and database management system. I dream about working on strengthening of cyber security and forensics with a mission of safeguarding the cyber-world from terrorists.

As I sense myriad potentialities in harvesting renewable resources, I visualize that the future civilization will not only conquer the feat, currently impossible, but it will also be equipped with eco-friendly alternatives nurturing our Earth's carrying capacity. I also have a dream to launch an environment friendly tech firm determined to promote infrastructural integrity. Ultimately, I dream of establishing myself as an altruistic cosmopolite collaborating with the greatest minds of our age for tackling the universal issues of mankind.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / College Supplemental Writing: 'What is your dream ?' (250 words) [6]

@Holt
From the way I see it, there's not enough space to talk more about my major (Computer Science). I'm afraid that even if I do that then I'll have to employ few technical terminologies (which the reader mightn't bother googling). So, I've shortened (not skipped entirely) the first paragraph as you said, but I still have some unused space, what do you recommend now ?
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / Something you do for pleasure of it MIT-dancing [6]

@lorna
Perhaps the best piece of advice I can give you about this prompt is to be genuine.You can opt for a straightforward description, or a short anecdote. The anecdote frequently is the more interesting strategy because it allows you to show off some writing skill (if executed correctly) in a way that the remaining prompts of MIT probably don't.

All the best.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / MIT Supplemental Writing: Something you do for the pleasure of a busy life. [2]

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (100 words or fewer)

Music and Sports are my two darlings when it comes to recreate myself. After hours of routine studies and assignments, simply picking up my guitar, playing it, and listening to the music I've created rejoices me-orgasmically; moreover, I feel even more proud after manipulating those recordings-through (Adobe) multimedia applications-and sharing them among friends and family.

I usually play Chess, Soccer, Cricket while I'm on the go as I know they can be good physical and mental workouts. Competing in a mini-hackathon(indoors) with my siblings at leisure is fun since I get to show off my technical skills amidst them.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / Something you do for pleasure of it MIT-dancing [6]

@lorna
As far as I'm concerned, this writing is asking about your routine hobby. Something you love to do after tiresome learning during your student life. Although your writing is pretty good, it is not that good for institution like MIT.

Good Luck.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / Stanford Intellectual vitality- Watching teletubbies [3]

@lorna
I completely agree with @Holt
You are completely going out of your way since there is no significant intellectual gain in watching a television series. Please come up with something unique and post it again in this thread.

Best.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / We have to depend on technology which makes our life easier, but we need to use it in a proper way. [5]

It is obviouslyobviousthat we dependingfor us to depend on technology in ...

it has both sides positive and negative effects ...
both positive and negative aspects of it will be discussed in the following essay.

I see a lot of errors of Grammatical Usage, Jone. Please go through your essay once again and look out for proper subject & verb agreement.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / Transition from Childhood: Mom and first generation college student [3]

@TechRinser
Raajev, the prompt vividly states "that marked your transition from childhood to adulthood within your culture, community, or family." . I feel like there is an excessive and unnecessary description of your mother's struggles than your own. I would suggest you to focus more on your own struggles through your student life.

Best.
nandasharma   
Dec 17, 2016
Undergraduate / College Supplemental Writing: 'What is your dream ?' (250 words) [6]

A dream is a blueprint of one's potential and pursuit. My pursuit is like the website Wikipedia- always pondering over exclusive ideas and knowledge; I'm insatiably hungry. My dream is to become successful; however, I haven't marked accomplishments of humongous wealth via lucrative profession or a sound health as my life's milestones. I dream to become genius in my forte and, at the same time, venture on an ambitious mission to eradicate global illiteracy as I believe it is the pandemic cause of contemporary terrors.

I aspire to serve my nation with uttermost passion for busting the social evils that have haunted Nepalese society predominantly. I dream of creating an education portal-like Khan Academy, but more accessible- for securing the future of impoverished Nepal by educating the commanders of tomorrow. I want to establish myself as an altruistic cosmopolite concerned about every worldly affair. I dream of collaborating with the greatest minds of our age for tackling the global issues like Energy Crisis and Cyber(Cloud) Security.

As I sense myriad potentialities in harvesting renewable resources, I visualize that the future civilization will not only conquer the feat, impossible at the present, but it will also be equipped with Eco-friendly alternatives nurturing our Earth's carrying capacity. As a Computer Science enthusiast, I dream of brainstorming on variety of technical entities- Security Loopholes, Artificial Intelligence, Machine Learning- for formulation of an invulnerable Web mechanism. In this unpredictable life, I dream of utilizing every precious opportunity to make our world a better place.

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