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Auto-biography and serious advice [25]
they have a separate boxes for you to check if you went to AP, or IB because apparently Universities recognize the 'superiority' of the IB program.
2 things here. AP should be different cuz here, it's like classes. There's no program you go to for 24/7 where you just do AP, but rather they are high leveled classes you can choose to take.
Also, they're bullshitting as far as i'm concerned. colleges don't really go through the efforts of "boxing" IB programs and putting them separately cuz they're superior...that's purely for marketing purpose. Well...it depends on what kind of college, but i can assure you that where you want to go (assuming it's somewhere good) won't do that. good colleges are WAYYYYY too pretentious to care about IB programs, plus, it'd be like...a huge box.
yea...programs are like businesses, and the info night people are like salesmen...THEY LIE
I think your ideas are good, so I'll just point out every repetition you've got.
Then I had to search up unknown words from the definition.
This skill had stayed with me and the dictionary has been immensely helpful.
Books are an addiction to me now; I always have a pile of books on my nightstand.
5
Four of my friends had already decided to drop out of Mini School
Above are things that you either need to take out, or merge with the next/previous sentence.
I was 8 so I could
eight so that
search up
look up.
found it hard
found the workload
At first I felt I didn't have any free time, and frustration often took over me
i think i said this already,
when you only have 2 elements, you don't put a comma before andI love sports, and I joined
sports and joined...same prob
but I love new experiences
hmm...i missed this, but it's unnecessary.
4
btw, it's FOUR
everyone thought I would be terrible
so everyone
I hated it when people under-estimated me; it only made me try harder. Though I was not great, I listened carefully to the coach and never missed a practice.
Since I hated being underestimated by others, I decided to try my hardest to gain their respect.
Although I was not a great player...
When it came down to sports, I fought through injuries and discrimination to play my best on the floor. Basketball taught me cooperation and teamwork.
kill these
By the end of the season, I was not only a strong player, but I also earned the team's respect and the Most Inspirational Award and MVP.
I became a strong player and earned the MIA (what you had) and MVP. Basketball taught me to persist and do my best even when odds are against me.
I'm also a big fan of art, from textiles to painting because I'm a creative person.
idk, i'd leave this out simply cuz the fact that you're creative doesn't mean that you have to be a fan of art
Just this year, I realize I'm passionate about Theatre Arts and hope to join a school's theatre company.
This year, I realized my passion for Theater Arts and hoped to join...btw it depends on your preference but i'd use theater since it's an english word as opposed to its french version.
I participate in many things. I'm in the International Action Club that fundraises to build a school in Ecuador. I'm also a big fan of art, from textiles to painting because I'm a creative person. Just this year, I realize I'm passionate about Theatre Arts and hope to join a school's theatre company. Performing just feels natural and exhilarating to me.
this entire paragraph feels...weird. it's like you're simply trying to add stuff to sound more diverse and passionate. I prefer quality over quantity, so since you don't actually have anything to say about those activities, i'd suggest dropping it or integrate, very concisely, into your conclusion. Like say: I also participate in many other activities such as blabla and blabla. All these passions of mine culminated into the forming of a girl who is motivated to learn and try new things. I hope that with blabla, I'll contribute... add another or 2 sentences for your conclusion to sum it up. This way, I feel that your conclusion can be less...frivolous and more concise.
btw, this thread is out of place. that's why i misunderstood you for a senior at the beginning.