politik
Jan 19, 2010
politik
Jan 7, 2010
Student Talk / How much can students earn during summers? [9]
Am I eligible for federal min. wage?...being international student and all...
Am I eligible for federal min. wage?...being international student and all...
politik
Jan 5, 2010
Student Talk / How much can students earn during summers? [9]
How much can i expect to earn in summers as an Indian undergrad in America?
I need an estimate for the collegeboard CSS/profile
How much can i expect to earn in summers as an Indian undergrad in America?
I need an estimate for the collegeboard CSS/profile
politik
Jan 1, 2010
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
FINAL EDIT:
I will read yours if you read mine..
School Pupil Leader. I still recall my feeling of incredulity when these tidings were brought in by my close friend Srujith. After all, it is the dream of every boy in the 10th grade to be elected to the coveted School Pupil Leader (SPL) position. My thoughts were torn asunder by conflicting emotions of elation on one hand and astonishment on the other. As I raced down the corridor towards the Administrative office to confirm the news, the single most dominating thought was 'How did I get voted in- the Principal doesn't even have a good opinion of me'.
Three years earlier in the 7th grade, I had outperformed all others in my class and did the school proud through my academic excellence. Soon after, I engaged myself in other pursuits like reading science fiction and encyclopedia, rather than the school text books. I had thus unwittingly let go of the academic position to my peers, and since I wasn't grade-conscious, wasn't too mindful of it either. The Principal attributed this behaviour to arrogance and her opinion persisted thereafter.
However, many teachers liked me for my all-round performance in academics, sports and literary activities and as the SPL at the school is elected through a ballot among teachers, I was elected as the SPL.
Every child seeks recognition from the one they admire; and so I set forth to getting into her good books, organizing various school events, trying out innovative ways like spot quizzes to get students to study seriously during the study hours and lobbied to extend the games hours. But the Principal was never impressed with me. Her noncomittal responses disappointed me greatly.
I sought the advice of some of my classmates on this issue, but they (unknown to me then), started to use my position to settle scores with others. Influenced by this group, I allowed myself to be swayed by their emotions and instigated a complaint against a warden. In my complaint to the Correspondent, I implicated the warden on (baseless) grounds and requested that he be removed from his position. The Correspondent did not relent, instead he advised me not to get caught up in personal issues but to address issues of greater good. His words dented my ego; my hurt soul leaned even more towards the 'group'. I continued to dwell upon issues brought forward by that small group of classmates and consequently neglected my duties of representing the larger group of students. With the final examinations of the 10th Grade, my role as as a Pupil leader drew to a close on a flat note.
After 10th, I left the school to study at a junior college. As I was settling into college life, a chance remark by one of my new-found acquaintances that he really envied my accomplishments as a SPL, sparked off a round of inner questioning. Did I truly 'accomplish'? I tried to analyse my behaviour, the underlying attitude and motivations. Why is it that I allowed myself to be influenced by others? What made me seek recognition from the Principal and why was she noncommital? My mother, a seasoned counselor, helped me put the pieces together. I realized that I had wasted an opportunity to demonstrate my leadership skills; failed to recognise that leadership is not about position but about values and responsibility, it is not about the self but about those we represent. My mother chuckled when the final piece clicked into place- my motivation! I had been worshipping at the altar of recognition, instead of being driven by a strong purpose. Perhaps this was what my Principal was in her own way urging me towards- to act for the higher purpose.
For me, this has been a humbling experience and this is what gives me the courage to stand tall and dream for the future of our world.
FINAL EDIT:
I will read yours if you read mine..
School Pupil Leader. I still recall my feeling of incredulity when these tidings were brought in by my close friend Srujith. After all, it is the dream of every boy in the 10th grade to be elected to the coveted School Pupil Leader (SPL) position. My thoughts were torn asunder by conflicting emotions of elation on one hand and astonishment on the other. As I raced down the corridor towards the Administrative office to confirm the news, the single most dominating thought was 'How did I get voted in- the Principal doesn't even have a good opinion of me'.
Three years earlier in the 7th grade, I had outperformed all others in my class and did the school proud through my academic excellence. Soon after, I engaged myself in other pursuits like reading science fiction and encyclopedia, rather than the school text books. I had thus unwittingly let go of the academic position to my peers, and since I wasn't grade-conscious, wasn't too mindful of it either. The Principal attributed this behaviour to arrogance and her opinion persisted thereafter.
However, many teachers liked me for my all-round performance in academics, sports and literary activities and as the SPL at the school is elected through a ballot among teachers, I was elected as the SPL.
Every child seeks recognition from the one they admire; and so I set forth to getting into her good books, organizing various school events, trying out innovative ways like spot quizzes to get students to study seriously during the study hours and lobbied to extend the games hours. But the Principal was never impressed with me. Her noncomittal responses disappointed me greatly.
I sought the advice of some of my classmates on this issue, but they (unknown to me then), started to use my position to settle scores with others. Influenced by this group, I allowed myself to be swayed by their emotions and instigated a complaint against a warden. In my complaint to the Correspondent, I implicated the warden on (baseless) grounds and requested that he be removed from his position. The Correspondent did not relent, instead he advised me not to get caught up in personal issues but to address issues of greater good. His words dented my ego; my hurt soul leaned even more towards the 'group'. I continued to dwell upon issues brought forward by that small group of classmates and consequently neglected my duties of representing the larger group of students. With the final examinations of the 10th Grade, my role as as a Pupil leader drew to a close on a flat note.
After 10th, I left the school to study at a junior college. As I was settling into college life, a chance remark by one of my new-found acquaintances that he really envied my accomplishments as a SPL, sparked off a round of inner questioning. Did I truly 'accomplish'? I tried to analyse my behaviour, the underlying attitude and motivations. Why is it that I allowed myself to be influenced by others? What made me seek recognition from the Principal and why was she noncommital? My mother, a seasoned counselor, helped me put the pieces together. I realized that I had wasted an opportunity to demonstrate my leadership skills; failed to recognise that leadership is not about position but about values and responsibility, it is not about the self but about those we represent. My mother chuckled when the final piece clicked into place- my motivation! I had been worshipping at the altar of recognition, instead of being driven by a strong purpose. Perhaps this was what my Principal was in her own way urging me towards- to act for the higher purpose.
For me, this has been a humbling experience and this is what gives me the courage to stand tall and dream for the future of our world.
politik
Jan 1, 2010
Undergraduate / MIT activity Essay---Reading [13]
Final Edit:
I will try to edit yours in turn...
"I want the TV back!" I was pleading with my parents. I was just 9 when they took the momentous decision to replace the idiot box with a full Encyclopedia set. Disgruntled tentative steps into the world of Akbar and Livingstone were soon transformed into rapturous voyages led by Tolkien and Asimov. Books lovingly welcome me in with the stories of travelers, wizards, dragons, nazguls, and futuristic worlds with human-like robots and, humans of course. And when I have something to read in my hands, the only thing that moves is the page.. me? I'm lost to the world..
Final Edit:
I will try to edit yours in turn...
"I want the TV back!" I was pleading with my parents. I was just 9 when they took the momentous decision to replace the idiot box with a full Encyclopedia set. Disgruntled tentative steps into the world of Akbar and Livingstone were soon transformed into rapturous voyages led by Tolkien and Asimov. Books lovingly welcome me in with the stories of travelers, wizards, dragons, nazguls, and futuristic worlds with human-like robots and, humans of course. And when I have something to read in my hands, the only thing that moves is the page.. me? I'm lost to the world..
politik
Dec 26, 2009
politik
Dec 25, 2009
Undergraduate / Princeton Supplement---my teacher [2]
Does anyone know which topic this can come under?? Significant person or Experience that changed me?? Please suggest any other quote if you can..Too simple??Generic??
One's first step in wisdom is to question everything - and one's last is to come to terms with everything.-- Georg Christoph Lichtenber
Does it fit either of the prompts??
'So, can you guys solve this problem?' asked the new physics teacher, Sudheer. Someone in the class said, 'Of course...easily', as this was on Friction- a topic we had completed. He started right off with the tricky topic of dealing with multiple blocks placed on each other vertically and asked us to solve a problem. We had all solved a similar problem but we could not solve this one. It was then that we realized that he had tweaked it a bit. This changed the problem in a major way and we could not solve it because an extra factor had come in which we did not know how to account for. But we could not do it. We all got the wrong answer. So, he proceeded to give us the solution. Rather, he asked us about twenty or so questions about the problem most of which we weren't able to answer. By then, time was over and he left the class. We all mutually agreed the new guy was 'crazy' and that we would all be mad by the time he would be done with us.
2 months later-
Turns out we all were wrong. We were all addicted to physics now courtesy our sir. Earlier, physics for me meant learning a new concept and its formulas and then mix and match formulas for solving problems. Predictably, I used to get more problems wrong then right. The course in our state did not really have any practical work. So, we did problem-solving most of the time. I hated physics because it took an awful lot of time to solve problems and all of them were complicated. Sudheer sir gave me the right guidance. He taught physics by asking questions. He would give the outline of the topic and then ask us questions that would take us deeper into it. This way, we had a better idea of what we were dealing with and did not face 'blackouts' while solving problems. This approach cleared out our doubts at the initial stage itself and solving problems became much easier we were no longer did 'mix-n-match' but understood the actual physics going on. I was able to solve very complex problems using this approach and developed solid concepts. This way of learning changed my approach to science and math and caused me to go deeper into each subject.
Does anyone know which topic this can come under?? Significant person or Experience that changed me?? Please suggest any other quote if you can..Too simple??Generic??
One's first step in wisdom is to question everything - and one's last is to come to terms with everything.-- Georg Christoph Lichtenber
Does it fit either of the prompts??
'So, can you guys solve this problem?' asked the new physics teacher, Sudheer. Someone in the class said, 'Of course...easily', as this was on Friction- a topic we had completed. He started right off with the tricky topic of dealing with multiple blocks placed on each other vertically and asked us to solve a problem. We had all solved a similar problem but we could not solve this one. It was then that we realized that he had tweaked it a bit. This changed the problem in a major way and we could not solve it because an extra factor had come in which we did not know how to account for. But we could not do it. We all got the wrong answer. So, he proceeded to give us the solution. Rather, he asked us about twenty or so questions about the problem most of which we weren't able to answer. By then, time was over and he left the class. We all mutually agreed the new guy was 'crazy' and that we would all be mad by the time he would be done with us.
2 months later-
Turns out we all were wrong. We were all addicted to physics now courtesy our sir. Earlier, physics for me meant learning a new concept and its formulas and then mix and match formulas for solving problems. Predictably, I used to get more problems wrong then right. The course in our state did not really have any practical work. So, we did problem-solving most of the time. I hated physics because it took an awful lot of time to solve problems and all of them were complicated. Sudheer sir gave me the right guidance. He taught physics by asking questions. He would give the outline of the topic and then ask us questions that would take us deeper into it. This way, we had a better idea of what we were dealing with and did not face 'blackouts' while solving problems. This approach cleared out our doubts at the initial stage itself and solving problems became much easier we were no longer did 'mix-n-match' but understood the actual physics going on. I was able to solve very complex problems using this approach and developed solid concepts. This way of learning changed my approach to science and math and caused me to go deeper into each subject.
politik
Dec 25, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
hey Kevin...it was over-confident...i absent-mindedly typed self-confident..
Do you think I should drastically overhaul the essay like colourfulloving said??
I am working on a new draft where I have reduced most of the school stuff and concentrated on me..
hey Kevin...it was over-confident...i absent-mindedly typed self-confident..
Do you think I should drastically overhaul the essay like colourfulloving said??
I am working on a new draft where I have reduced most of the school stuff and concentrated on me..
politik
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / MIT activity Essay---Reading [13]
Well...if you say so...that practically cuts my problem down...then the essay will read 100 worrds;;:D
Well...if you say so...that practically cuts my problem down...then the essay will read 100 worrds;;:D
politik
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / "weaknesses have turned out my strong points" - The world I come from MIT Essay [5]
Hey...you are doing great...I suggest you end with something about your dreams and aspirations and how all the above factors have influenced you
Hey...you are doing great...I suggest you end with something about your dreams and aspirations and how all the above factors have influenced you
politik
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / MIT activity Essay---Reading [13]
'I want the TV back!'. I was just 9 when my parents decided to replace the idiot box with a huge collection of books. So, while my other friends watched cartoons, I was busy learning interesting facts about plants, animals and continents. Later, I discovered the wonderful world of fiction and dived into the Narnian delights of C.S.lewis and the Multiverses of Philip Pullman. I was fascinated by Tolkien's tale of Middle Earth in Lord of The Rings. Later, I read Ayn Rand and George Orwell.
Howard Roark taught me the importance of our 'self'. I learnt how to face adversity with a positive attitude from Legolas of Lord of The Rings. Showing courage and leading people in dangerous times was taught to me by Roran of the Inheritance trilogy. Reading books has helped me develop different perspectives of looking at the world and people. By getting into the shoes of different characters, I learn how people tend to behave under various circumstances
'I want the TV back!'. I was just 9 when my parents decided to replace the idiot box with a huge collection of books. So, while my other friends watched cartoons, I was busy learning interesting facts about plants, animals and continents. Later, I discovered the wonderful world of fiction and dived into the Narnian delights of C.S.lewis and the Multiverses of Philip Pullman. I was fascinated by Tolkien's tale of Middle Earth in Lord of The Rings. Later, I read Ayn Rand and George Orwell.
Howard Roark taught me the importance of our 'self'. I learnt how to face adversity with a positive attitude from Legolas of Lord of The Rings. Showing courage and leading people in dangerous times was taught to me by Roran of the Inheritance trilogy. Reading books has helped me develop different perspectives of looking at the world and people. By getting into the shoes of different characters, I learn how people tend to behave under various circumstances
politik
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / MIT activity Essay---Reading [13]
Here is the edit...however it is very long and disjointed...Please help me out...
'I want the TV back!' ,I was pleading with my parents. I was just 9 when they took the momentous decision to replace the idiot box with a huge collection of books. So, while my other friends watched cartoons, I was busy learning interesting facts about plants, animals and continents. As I became older, I progressed on to reading about world history and famous persons. This helped improve my ...
this curently is 200 words...I need to cut it down into half...help me out!!
Here is the edit...however it is very long and disjointed...Please help me out...
'I want the TV back!' ,I was pleading with my parents. I was just 9 when they took the momentous decision to replace the idiot box with a huge collection of books. So, while my other friends watched cartoons, I was busy learning interesting facts about plants, animals and continents. As I became older, I progressed on to reading about world history and famous persons. This helped improve my ...
this curently is 200 words...I need to cut it down into half...help me out!!
politik
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
@Tuhina
Hey!!
I am working on this essay right now...Will you also read my other essays??
@Tuhina
Hey!!
I am working on this essay right now...Will you also read my other essays??
politik
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / UVA Engineering Prompt- [4]
hey!!your essay is nice except for the fact taht you totally forgot about the 'why UVA engineering' part...i think you should answer this too...you can do engin anywhere else...why UVA is what u shud tell thru this essay...you only talk about the interest in engineering in an indirect sort of way...but u show your interest and the satisfaction u gained by building things.
hey!!your essay is nice except for the fact taht you totally forgot about the 'why UVA engineering' part...i think you should answer this too...you can do engin anywhere else...why UVA is what u shud tell thru this essay...you only talk about the interest in engineering in an indirect sort of way...but u show your interest and the satisfaction u gained by building things.
politik
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / MIT activity Essay---Reading [13]
Prompt:We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)
Reading!! I was introduced to reading in a big way in my 9th year when my parents replaced the idiot box with a huge book collection. I drown myself in the fantastic worlds of Tolkien, Asimov and Philip Pullman. I enjoy the feel, color and energy of these fictitious worlds by putting myself in the shoes of the different characters like dragons, balrogs, nazguls and live in futuristic worlds with human-like robots.
I see the world in exciting and unusual ways through the eyes of the characters which has helped me develop different ways to look at a situation. I have been able to enlarge my perceptions and understanding of many issues by reading books.
Is it generic?? Tell me your views..
Prompt:We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)
Reading!! I was introduced to reading in a big way in my 9th year when my parents replaced the idiot box with a huge book collection. I drown myself in the fantastic worlds of Tolkien, Asimov and Philip Pullman. I enjoy the feel, color and energy of these fictitious worlds by putting myself in the shoes of the different characters like dragons, balrogs, nazguls and live in futuristic worlds with human-like robots.
I see the world in exciting and unusual ways through the eyes of the characters which has helped me develop different ways to look at a situation. I have been able to enlarge my perceptions and understanding of many issues by reading books.
Is it generic?? Tell me your views..
politik
Dec 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
@Tuhina...My junior college was as bland as hell...it was all classes and nothing else...classes,solve problems,exams,classes...
Do u suggest I scrap this essay and start afresh??
How do you suggest I get rid of the self-depreciation bit??
@Tuhina...My junior college was as bland as hell...it was all classes and nothing else...classes,solve problems,exams,classes...
Do u suggest I scrap this essay and start afresh??
How do you suggest I get rid of the self-depreciation bit??
politik
Dec 23, 2009
Student Talk / What is more important? Common application essays or supplement essays? [9]
Both of them are Important...the supplements are more of why you want to go that college while the main thing s more of about your personal life...thats why supplements mostly ask you for essays on which program you want to study and stuff like that...BOTH are important..Dont worry about the word limit...anything is fine as long as it isnt too long like 1200 or so...
Both of them are Important...the supplements are more of why you want to go that college while the main thing s more of about your personal life...thats why supplements mostly ask you for essays on which program you want to study and stuff like that...BOTH are important..Dont worry about the word limit...anything is fine as long as it isnt too long like 1200 or so...
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Cornell Engineering Essay--My City [14]
Thanks...I will incorporate ur feedback...
Will you look at my other essay too??
Thanks...I will incorporate ur feedback...
Will you look at my other essay too??
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Cornell Engineering Essay--My City [14]
I meant that I not only want to apply my knowledge to plan projects for people..I also want to do research..
Should I rremove the whole bit about 'Cornell has a vibrant...' or remove only the 'socialy and philosophically' part?
I don't understand this sentence?
I meant that I not only want to apply my knowledge to plan projects for people..I also want to do research..
Should I rremove the whole bit about 'Cornell has a vibrant...' or remove only the 'socialy and philosophically' part?
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Tufts self identity - Ke$ha and Bushido! [12]
OOK...I get you now..never mind my earlier comment...i think your essay is fine..
OOK...I get you now..never mind my earlier comment...i think your essay is fine..
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Listening or Speaking? - Common App essay [8]
Hey...will you read my common app personal essay and cornell supplement??
Hey...will you read my common app personal essay and cornell supplement??
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Dickinson students shall become globally engaged citizen leaders [5]
The topic is great
I think you should explain what you have learnt at Kibbutz Tzuba instead of just saying that you see the reality of peace...tell why and how you saw the reality
The professor's mention is also good in the last para..shows you know what you want to do..
Hope this helps...
Will you read my common app essay and cornell suppllement?? Just comment on the basic idea and wheher it has life or if it just seems like a boring rant..
The topic is great
I think you should explain what you have learnt at Kibbutz Tzuba instead of just saying that you see the reality of peace...tell why and how you saw the reality
The professor's mention is also good in the last para..shows you know what you want to do..
Hope this helps...
Will you read my common app essay and cornell suppllement?? Just comment on the basic idea and wheher it has life or if it just seems like a boring rant..
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Tufts self identity - Ke$ha and Bushido! [12]
You definitely dont need to define that...
I thought the description of the artists pronunciation and all was a little weird..but wait for someone else also to comment on this...but...why is ur immersion in hiphop and rap a 'geekiness?'...isnt it supposed to be realted to intellectuality,computers and that sort??
I know I didn't help much but I am also writing essays right now and am really bonkered out...will u read my personal essay and engineering supplement and give feedback about the idea and whether it provides any insight into me??
You definitely dont need to define that...
I thought the description of the artists pronunciation and all was a little weird..but wait for someone else also to comment on this...but...why is ur immersion in hiphop and rap a 'geekiness?'...isnt it supposed to be realted to intellectuality,computers and that sort??
I know I didn't help much but I am also writing essays right now and am really bonkered out...will u read my personal essay and engineering supplement and give feedback about the idea and whether it provides any insight into me??
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / '...shook his head, sadly' - You have just completed your 300-page autobiography; page 217. [21]
sht dude...they should have realized u were joking when u asked if it would be any better if u were a shift leader...and again adding that it might get better if u added that u coached little league for some time...No one got your attempts at humoring them...every1s taking u and themselves too seriously...
P.S:Neither did I..:D
sht dude...they should have realized u were joking when u asked if it would be any better if u were a shift leader...and again adding that it might get better if u added that u coached little league for some time...No one got your attempts at humoring them...every1s taking u and themselves too seriously...
P.S:Neither did I..:D
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / Listening or Speaking? - Common App essay [8]
Hey!!your essay is great...and the last paragraph's nice..the way you brought it all down to connect with teaching...You actually dont need to that normally...but in your case the topic u wrote about is a very important characteristic of who u want to be...Good Luck with this essay..I hope you will do great!!
Hey!!your essay is great...and the last paragraph's nice..the way you brought it all down to connect with teaching...You actually dont need to that normally...but in your case the topic u wrote about is a very important characteristic of who u want to be...Good Luck with this essay..I hope you will do great!!
politik
Dec 22, 2009
Grammar, Usage / a disgusting sentence -wording grammar question [7]
The real-world education that I value is exemplified here as the physicians are also professors.
The real-world education that I value is exemplified here as the physicians are also professors.
politik
Dec 21, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
Well..this another edit with changes only to the last paragraph..so the moderator can probably remove the essay part from the earlier post...
I now realize that to be a good leader is to be responsible to those I represent and address their issues and well-being. I am confident that this lesson in humility will hold me in good stead in future leadership roles
@yang:I hope this cleared up the timeline ambiguity.Also,I was wondering if this essay is worth it or should i scrap it and begin a new one??
Do u get to know anything about me from it??Is it any good??
Please help me as to how to make the conclusion...the previous one was bland as hell..
Also...with this edit..the word count came down from 894(the first draft) to 569...I will be happy to cut more if u feel there is some more unnecessary information...
PLEASE PLEASE help me with the CONCLUSION!!
Why are the moderators not commenting on my threads?Are my essays that bad??
Well..this another edit with changes only to the last paragraph..so the moderator can probably remove the essay part from the earlier post...
I now realize that to be a good leader is to be responsible to those I represent and address their issues and well-being. I am confident that this lesson in humility will hold me in good stead in future leadership roles
@yang:I hope this cleared up the timeline ambiguity.Also,I was wondering if this essay is worth it or should i scrap it and begin a new one??
Do u get to know anything about me from it??Is it any good??
Please help me as to how to make the conclusion...the previous one was bland as hell..
Also...with this edit..the word count came down from 894(the first draft) to 569...I will be happy to cut more if u feel there is some more unnecessary information...
PLEASE PLEASE help me with the CONCLUSION!!
Why are the moderators not commenting on my threads?Are my essays that bad??
politik
Dec 21, 2009
Essays / Secondary School Report or Final Report?/ Preparing for Uni Entrance [4]
I had completed my 12th grade in May 09.I AM joining college an year late because i am preparing for a university entrance here in India...
I was wondering what School Forms I have to submit along with the common app..
Should I submit both the Secondary school report(SSR) and final report or only the final report??I am assuming I dont need to submit the midyear report.
Also,I studied in a school till 10th class and then shifted to a junior college to stufy 11th and 12th..Should I get 2 separate SSRs and Final Reports??
Can I get one of the teacher recommendations from the 10th class school??
I had completed my 12th grade in May 09.I AM joining college an year late because i am preparing for a university entrance here in India...
I was wondering what School Forms I have to submit along with the common app..
Should I submit both the Secondary school report(SSR) and final report or only the final report??I am assuming I dont need to submit the midyear report.
Also,I studied in a school till 10th class and then shifted to a junior college to stufy 11th and 12th..Should I get 2 separate SSRs and Final Reports??
Can I get one of the teacher recommendations from the 10th class school??
politik
Dec 21, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App Short Answer + Essay: Indian dance + elderly caretaking job [4]
The second comes under option1...significant experience and its impact...
this essay was nice and you concentrated on the 'impact on you' part.I think its a balanced essay..
Have you reached the word limit for the 1st one??...If not..you could describe more about what you feel when dancing than the stage description...I dont know what the prompt for the first one...
Just my thoughts..
will u read my commonapp personal essay??
The second comes under option1...significant experience and its impact...
this essay was nice and you concentrated on the 'impact on you' part.I think its a balanced essay..
Have you reached the word limit for the 1st one??...If not..you could describe more about what you feel when dancing than the stage description...I dont know what the prompt for the first one...
Just my thoughts..
will u read my commonapp personal essay??
politik
Dec 20, 2009
Undergraduate / 'Asian in New York' - Cultural Differences Essay. [3]
Nice one...you answered the prompt though it needs some elaboration and you should go into detail in the last paragraph...
will you see my essay and tell me your opinion on the overall idea and if you can get some insight into me..
Nice one...you answered the prompt though it needs some elaboration and you should go into detail in the last paragraph...
will you see my essay and tell me your opinion on the overall idea and if you can get some insight into me..
politik
Dec 20, 2009
Undergraduate / Residential school for underprivileged childen, common application essay option [3]
I did not check the grammar and all...But...you should focus more on the 'impact on you' part of the essay prompt..Also...the essay needs tight editing and i noticed some gramatical mistakes..Your idea is very good...but you should concentrate equally on the experience and its impact on you...the second part is the most important thing..I dont have enough time to do the editing because I also have essays to write...so..Good Luck!!...
and...FYI...if you want moderators to help edit your essay...you should first edit a few other peoples essays...
I did not check the grammar and all...But...you should focus more on the 'impact on you' part of the essay prompt..Also...the essay needs tight editing and i noticed some gramatical mistakes..Your idea is very good...but you should concentrate equally on the experience and its impact on you...the second part is the most important thing..I dont have enough time to do the editing because I also have essays to write...so..Good Luck!!...
and...FYI...if you want moderators to help edit your essay...you should first edit a few other peoples essays...
politik
Dec 20, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
so...here is another edit...i cut down on some parts and added yang's suggestions..
critique it indiscriminately...tell me evrything u dont like about this essay
so...here is another edit...i cut down on some parts and added yang's suggestions..
critique it indiscriminately...tell me evrything u dont like about this essay
politik
Dec 19, 2009
Undergraduate / Cornell Engineering Essay--My City [14]
you bet yang...in fact the collegeboard did not have enuf space for my full name...so...my name in the SAT reports appears as SthitaPrajna S Kandarpa...real pain i tell you..
Thanks for the comments guys...i just uloaded the first draft to see the initial reactions...i will have to do a lot of work i guess..anyway i am applying to either environmental or mechanical engineering..mostly environmental
hey yang...will u also check my common app personal essay and give your feedback...please
you bet yang...in fact the collegeboard did not have enuf space for my full name...so...my name in the SAT reports appears as SthitaPrajna S Kandarpa...real pain i tell you..
Thanks for the comments guys...i just uloaded the first draft to see the initial reactions...i will have to do a lot of work i guess..anyway i am applying to either environmental or mechanical engineering..mostly environmental
hey yang...will u also check my common app personal essay and give your feedback...please
politik
Dec 18, 2009
Undergraduate / An Intellectual Experience:Stanford Short Essay [8]
Hi!!
I realized that you must have been looking for feedback on the idea rather than the grammar..:D..i did the grammar because it was easy for me..I myself am bad at essays...
I do think that you have answered the prompt by describing an incident which provoked your mind to look for answers..
Hi!!
I realized that you must have been looking for feedback on the idea rather than the grammar..:D..i did the grammar because it was easy for me..I myself am bad at essays...
I do think that you have answered the prompt by describing an incident which provoked your mind to look for answers..
politik
Dec 18, 2009
Undergraduate / Autobiogaphy Essay - University of Pennsylvania [6]
Hi,rmsurprenant..since you are done with your essay...will you look at my essays and give me feedback regarding the ideas and the structure???I really need some feedback..
Hi,rmsurprenant..since you are done with your essay...will you look at my essays and give me feedback regarding the ideas and the structure???I really need some feedback..
politik
Dec 18, 2009
Undergraduate / Cornell Engineering Essay--My City [14]
Prompt: Engineers turn ideas (technical, scientific, mathematical) into reality. Tell us about an engineering idea you have or your interest in engineering. Explain how Cornell Engineering can help you further explore this idea or interest.
"I hate this smell!!, says my mother as she comes into the house after a weary day at work. I just nod my head and keep on reading the newspaper. The smell she is talking about comes from the canal flowing beside our apartment. Now why would a canal smell bad? Well, that is because this is not a freshwater canal. It is an erstwhile tributary of a river called Musi in the city of Hyderabad. But with the passage of time, the Musi has become the unofficial sewerage network of Hyderabad. Many of its branches criss-cross the city, albeit no longer flowing and mostly filled with garbage, organic and inorganic wastes thrown by almost every house that is on its banks. Potentially hazardous wastes from the chemical industries in and around the city also land up here. The result? A river heaving with biological, physical and chemical pollutants which contaminate the underground water sources and cause health hazards to people. I want to apply what I learn in Engineering to arrest the pollution of this once-beautiful river and restore it to its former glory.
Coming from a family of social entrepreneurs, civic responsibility is something I learnt at a very young age. Hence I am particularly passionate about improving the living conditions of thousands of people in Hyderabad. The plan I have in mind incorporates the setup of an extensive network of underground drainages and strategic placement of sewage treatment plants. The sewage treatment plants will be constructed near water bodies into which the underground sewage is let out so as to reduce the amount of toxic material being released into them. Planning the new underground sewers and modifying the existing ones so that they are all connected to sewage treatment plants is the most important part, To accomplish this, I need to have knowledge of town planning and environmental science.
This is where Cornell can help me turn my idea into reality. At Cornell, I can major in Environmental Engineering and at the same time minor in Civil Infrastructure. I hope to gain the right kind of insights and work experience from Cornell's Co-op program so that I can prepare myself for real life problems and try out new and innovative ideas for time consuming tasks like the underground sewers.. Since I am also interested in researching alternate energy sources, I believe the Environmental Engineering degree from Cornell will provide the right foundation to delve deeper into research. I look forward to attending Cornell and inspire and equip myself to take up more projects that help social causes.
This is just a rough draft.Please give me any suggestions or opinions and the topic choice.Grammar mistakes and all are fine..I can do that later..
Prompt: Engineers turn ideas (technical, scientific, mathematical) into reality. Tell us about an engineering idea you have or your interest in engineering. Explain how Cornell Engineering can help you further explore this idea or interest.
"I hate this smell!!, says my mother as she comes into the house after a weary day at work. I just nod my head and keep on reading the newspaper. The smell she is talking about comes from the canal flowing beside our apartment. Now why would a canal smell bad? Well, that is because this is not a freshwater canal. It is an erstwhile tributary of a river called Musi in the city of Hyderabad. But with the passage of time, the Musi has become the unofficial sewerage network of Hyderabad. Many of its branches criss-cross the city, albeit no longer flowing and mostly filled with garbage, organic and inorganic wastes thrown by almost every house that is on its banks. Potentially hazardous wastes from the chemical industries in and around the city also land up here. The result? A river heaving with biological, physical and chemical pollutants which contaminate the underground water sources and cause health hazards to people. I want to apply what I learn in Engineering to arrest the pollution of this once-beautiful river and restore it to its former glory.
Coming from a family of social entrepreneurs, civic responsibility is something I learnt at a very young age. Hence I am particularly passionate about improving the living conditions of thousands of people in Hyderabad. The plan I have in mind incorporates the setup of an extensive network of underground drainages and strategic placement of sewage treatment plants. The sewage treatment plants will be constructed near water bodies into which the underground sewage is let out so as to reduce the amount of toxic material being released into them. Planning the new underground sewers and modifying the existing ones so that they are all connected to sewage treatment plants is the most important part, To accomplish this, I need to have knowledge of town planning and environmental science.
This is where Cornell can help me turn my idea into reality. At Cornell, I can major in Environmental Engineering and at the same time minor in Civil Infrastructure. I hope to gain the right kind of insights and work experience from Cornell's Co-op program so that I can prepare myself for real life problems and try out new and innovative ideas for time consuming tasks like the underground sewers.. Since I am also interested in researching alternate energy sources, I believe the Environmental Engineering degree from Cornell will provide the right foundation to delve deeper into research. I look forward to attending Cornell and inspire and equip myself to take up more projects that help social causes.
This is just a rough draft.Please give me any suggestions or opinions and the topic choice.Grammar mistakes and all are fine..I can do that later..
politik
Dec 18, 2009
Undergraduate / An Intellectual Experience:Stanford Short Essay [8]
I was certain she would emerge the winner
glimpse of nature's
Somehow,
doesn't fit in there.Think of something else instead of that.
Just asking..but do 7 year olds actually know about periodic oscillations?
I have been able to answer a vast...
This sentence could do with better editing...it doesnt ring out nicely.
I owe my never relinquishing desire to learn to these questions
fulfillment and a...
Why call Science 'her'?
using them
Just my tips.
can u read my essay and tell me if its any good?...not the grammar and all..but the main idea..
I was certain she would emerge winner
I was certain she would emerge the winner
glimpse of one of natures
glimpse of nature's
Somehow,
natures beautiful properties
doesn't fit in there.Think of something else instead of that.
Just asking..but do 7 year olds actually know about periodic oscillations?
A vast majority of these questions I have been able to answe
I have been able to answer a vast...
In answering them and observing other natural phenomenon other questions begin to arise.
This sentence could do with better editing...it doesnt ring out nicely.
It is to this questions I owe my never relinquishing desire to learn
I owe my never relinquishing desire to learn to these questions
sense of fulfillment, a certain satisfaction
fulfillment and a...
Why call Science 'her'?
wonders and using it to
using them
Just my tips.
can u read my essay and tell me if its any good?...not the grammar and all..but the main idea..
politik
Dec 17, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
here is the re-edited essay
Please tell me if this is any good..I am applying to cornell and princeton
here is the re-edited essay
Please tell me if this is any good..I am applying to cornell and princeton
politik
Dec 17, 2009
Undergraduate / Cornell AAP Supplement, why your chosen major? [4]
thecirclegame
As well, I am currently working with my school's Arts Council to
I dont think As well fits there.You should use something else to start that sentence.
overall,I really like the essay..especially the 1st paragraph.Its a simple and straightforward account.Also,you could elaborate on why you felt that affinity for cornell
Hey,can u please comment on my threads..
thecirclegame
As well, I am currently working with my school's Arts Council to
I dont think As well fits there.You should use something else to start that sentence.
overall,I really like the essay..especially the 1st paragraph.Its a simple and straightforward account.Also,you could elaborate on why you felt that affinity for cornell
Hey,can u please comment on my threads..
politik
Dec 17, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App personal essay option#1-My Greatest Personal Failure--Feedback [18]
Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
My greatest Personal Failure
I was surprised when I came to know that I had become the School Pupil Leader(SPL) in 10th grade. My surprise was because I knew that the Principal did not have a good enough impression on me. Even though I used to read more of science fiction and encyclopedias than academics, I was school topper in 7th grade. In 8th grade, others who concentrated on academics got better grades than me. The Principal thought I had become self-confident and her impression stuck to me that way. However, many teachers also liked me because of my all-round performance in academics, sports and literary activities. Since an SPL is elected by a teachers vote, I got elected inspite of the Principal's dislike. I set out to get into her good books. My role model was the previos SPL who was a legend and was liked by everyone and especially by the Principal. I wanted to be a better leader than he was.
I spent much time for organizing various school events. I tried out spot quizzes as an innovative way to get students to study seriously during the study hours. I lobbied to extend the games hours. But the Principal was never impressed with me.
I was disappointed with myself and sought the advice of some of my classmates who wanted to use my power to get back at some other people with whom they had issues. Although I had a faint idea of what they were trying to do, I did not question their ways at that time. The school had a warden who picked on me all the time but I did not give him much notice until he was hated by my 'group' who made me complain against him. In my complaint to the Correspondent, I blew the whole issue out of proportion and requested him to remove the warden from the school. The Correspondent saw me for what I was really doing and advised me not to get caught up in personal issues when I had greater responsibilities. I took this as a blow to my ego which took me closer to the 'group'. I continued to dwell upon issues brought forward by that small group of classmates. Consequently, I neglected my duties in representing the larger group of students. My 10th grade drew to a close this way.
I left the school after 10th grade to study at a junior college. The new environment made me realize that I had wasted the opportunity to lead and be a role model. The fact that I wanted to only impress the Principal was an indication of my immaturity. Instead of being happy that I had done a great job at organizing the school events and bringing about changes in the school timings, I was caught up in seeking recognition from Principal. I realized that recognition is a consequence of good leadership
By trying to frame the warden with false allegations, I had demeaned myself. I had focused on getting into the good books of a single person rather than addressing the issues critical to students. I had been too muddled up in matters relating to my differences with certain individuals and neglected matters of real significance.
I now realize that to be a good leader is to be responsible to those I represent and address their issues and well-being. I am confident that this lesson in humility will hold me in good stead in future leadership roles
Please tell me your views on this essay.I think I muddled it up a little bit..Please help!!
Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
My greatest Personal Failure
I was surprised when I came to know that I had become the School Pupil Leader(SPL) in 10th grade. My surprise was because I knew that the Principal did not have a good enough impression on me. Even though I used to read more of science fiction and encyclopedias than academics, I was school topper in 7th grade. In 8th grade, others who concentrated on academics got better grades than me. The Principal thought I had become self-confident and her impression stuck to me that way. However, many teachers also liked me because of my all-round performance in academics, sports and literary activities. Since an SPL is elected by a teachers vote, I got elected inspite of the Principal's dislike. I set out to get into her good books. My role model was the previos SPL who was a legend and was liked by everyone and especially by the Principal. I wanted to be a better leader than he was.
I spent much time for organizing various school events. I tried out spot quizzes as an innovative way to get students to study seriously during the study hours. I lobbied to extend the games hours. But the Principal was never impressed with me.
I was disappointed with myself and sought the advice of some of my classmates who wanted to use my power to get back at some other people with whom they had issues. Although I had a faint idea of what they were trying to do, I did not question their ways at that time. The school had a warden who picked on me all the time but I did not give him much notice until he was hated by my 'group' who made me complain against him. In my complaint to the Correspondent, I blew the whole issue out of proportion and requested him to remove the warden from the school. The Correspondent saw me for what I was really doing and advised me not to get caught up in personal issues when I had greater responsibilities. I took this as a blow to my ego which took me closer to the 'group'. I continued to dwell upon issues brought forward by that small group of classmates. Consequently, I neglected my duties in representing the larger group of students. My 10th grade drew to a close this way.
I left the school after 10th grade to study at a junior college. The new environment made me realize that I had wasted the opportunity to lead and be a role model. The fact that I wanted to only impress the Principal was an indication of my immaturity. Instead of being happy that I had done a great job at organizing the school events and bringing about changes in the school timings, I was caught up in seeking recognition from Principal. I realized that recognition is a consequence of good leadership
By trying to frame the warden with false allegations, I had demeaned myself. I had focused on getting into the good books of a single person rather than addressing the issues critical to students. I had been too muddled up in matters relating to my differences with certain individuals and neglected matters of real significance.
I now realize that to be a good leader is to be responsible to those I represent and address their issues and well-being. I am confident that this lesson in humility will hold me in good stead in future leadership roles
Please tell me your views on this essay.I think I muddled it up a little bit..Please help!!
