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Microsoft & Apple: Differences, Similarities & Best Interest of Users in Mind [3]
Back in the 1940's and '50s, after one buys a car, fridge, house, and microwave, what more did one need?
I couldn't find a way of linking this sentence with the rest of the paragraph. Honestly, to me, the paragraph looks better without it.
One may argue that Microsoft also uses the planned obsolescence tactic, pushing out operating systems only to be replaced by better ones.
This sentence is redundant. The first two sentences of the para make the same point.
can't
I'd advise against using contractions.
The "performance" of the software depends on the hardware inside the computer such as the processor
speed and the random-access memory (RAM) -- the "processor" is a hardware, not "processor speed."
Otherwise, you can remove the word "hardware," and write the sentence like -- "The "performance" of the software depends on the processor speed and the random-access memory (RAM)"
A really fast processor will allow you to load Windows pretty fast and the user will be happy, however with a slow processor Windows will take ages to load and the user will complain.
Why did you suddenly use the second person?
manufacturers'
Misplaced apostrophe -- "manufacturer's"
Microsoft has been
so successful
because mainly because
they haveit has licensed out the Windows OS
, allowing multiple manufacturers such as Dell, Sony, and HP to use Windows and build their own computers.
Apple, being one of the largest technology companies, also exercises more control over what its consumer can and can't do than
does Microsoft.
You need a semi-colon in this sentence: "Software developers will keep developing for the most popular operating systems
; thus many programs will not work on Linux"
Hello, Parth!
You write well. I hope I was of some help. Since your essay is due, so I restrained from criticizing the content. I just wish I had seen this essay a few days earlier.