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mahrou   
May 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL iBT-Inventing something new (machine to read people's thought) [8]

If you could invent something new, what product would you develop? Use specific details to explain why this invention is needed?

Each of us has different wills and likes to have the especial devise for getting our wishes. Actually, if I could invent something new which will be useful for me and other people, I want to invent the machine has ability to read the people's thoughts. It is very beneficial invention and can help us determining our friends, satisfying them, and understanding the people who can't speak. As far as I'm concerned, I expand my reasons for this idea.

Suppose that you can be informed what your co-workers think about you, or if the persons who flatter you are really have the same interest to you or not. It is very critical for us to distinguish our real friends from people who just want to abuse us to reach their goals. For example, if we know that our co-workers don't have good intention about us we never propose them to share in triggering the business with us because it is probable they cheat in our partnership.

Besides, by such devise we can find what things will be made happy our friends or spouse. Indeed, we can buy the gift or do the work which we sure our darling will be so satisfied and by such way we'll improve our friendship or relationship more than before.

Moreover, we generally can find the baby's intentions with his/her crying or laughing and make correlation with disabled persons who can't speak, but we don't exactly know about their thoughts and feelings. In fact, by inventing the machine which could read the people's thoughts we can make close connection with such people. Really, it will be so amazing we know what baby's thought about his/her parents or other people around his/her.

All in all, I think inventing the machine which informed us about people's thought can be very popular through people. Who doesn't like to find his real friends, delight his dears, and make connection with his baby or his dumb sibling?
mahrou   
May 4, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL iBT- More important to study mathematics or literature? [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for student to learn to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Many people believe that study of history and literature is more important for students than study mathematics and other sciences. But I believe that students should learn about both of these fields because as they need to learn sciences and mathematics as to history and literature. Thank to they need spending some time to increase their information about their country or other parts of the world and dealing with literature to feed their soul. In fact, the education of students not should be limited to mathematics and science. Here I enumerate some of my reasons for this argument.

Students should learn many sciences such as chemistry, biology, mathematics, and so forth because they want to continue their educations in future in one of these fields. Also, they want to do activity or research in this area to improve the science and create more convenient life for people by some achievements. On the other hand, they should learn about their culture, ancestors, and many important historical events which had occurred in their countries or in any corner of the world. So, they should study in history and literature too.

Moreover, study the science and mathematics alone cause to tire the student's mind and lose their motivations to study such lessons. Furthermore, they need study some amazing subjects near these lessons. Indeed, study of literature and mathematics always is interesting for students and they enjoy from doing that.

Additionally, many students have incredible talents in the literature aspects such as poem, writing Romans or other styles, while they don't like to solve the mathematic questions or research in laboratories. So, by learning some lessons in the literature subjects in their school, they can find their real interest and follow it as one of their activities or as their major job in future.

All in all, by noticing to my statements I mentioned above, I believe that teaching literature and history besides study in mathematics and other sciences can be trained the complete students in future. Also, they can find the better field which more compatible with their personalities.
mahrou   
Apr 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / I always be interested to meet by Jenifer Aniston, one of the best American actresses [NEW]

If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Actually, entertainers and athletes are the most favorite groups among people. In fact, each of us is to be fond to some famous actors or actresses, pop stars, and athletes so that has a dream of visiting such persons. Indeed, I always be interested to meet by Jenifer Aniston, one of the best American actresses who have had been famous because of playing in the Friends series. As far as I'm concerned, I explain my reasons for this choice.

In my idea, Jenifer Aniston is one of the best entertainers who can play each role especially in the comedian's one. I never forget her role as "Rachel Green" in "Friends", one of the best comedians which have been showed from 1990 until 2004 in the US. Aniston has great act in this series as a role of a rich and pampered daughter who became more popular in Friends TV show. She can express their emotions very dramatically or become fun very interestingly. In fact, besides her beauty she is a real actress. I really enjoy from her two movies, "The object of my affection" and "The good girl".

Also, I always admire her styles because she is so dressy and her hair style is popular among women.

Moreover, she has many humanism feelings and I admire her personality. Aniston is the 10th rich American woman who spends most of her money in many charities and now supports many orphanage foundations in the US. Also she supports some medical research centers for cancer disease and so forth.

To sum up, I can say that Jenifer Aniston is one of the most favorite stars for me in the entertainers' world and I wish someday can meet her. She is so beauty, dressy, and has many talents for playing different roles especially comedy and emotion's. Besides, she has benevolent character in the real world which I acclaim its.
mahrou   
Apr 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / Machines have many advantages for us; works faster, better and safer [NEW]

Some people like doing work by hand. Others prefer using machines. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Today by advancing the industry and technology most of works are carried out by machines so that hand working is so limited in our society. While yet many people prefer to do works by hand, I think machines can do activities more precisely, efficiently, and quickly than people. Also, in many times machines can guard people in dangerous activities. So by using machines people can save their times to spend it to their interests such as reading book, having entertainment, and visiting their friends. As far as I'm concerned, I enumerate some of my reasons in this article.

Machines can do works carefully and without any tiredness. But people after some hours activity become tired and can't continue their acts as well; they need to rest for gaining more energy to complete their works and this delay cause to do activities more slowly and in end they'll get low yield in their works. For example, in past producing many food products and packaging them was done by workers in factories, but today all these processes are done automatically by factory's machines; this issue lead to increase the rate of productivity and improve the health condition of such processes in factories.

Moreover, people besides their working need to have some recreations in their life; they every day go to their work place in the morning and back in night, so they want to have some times to read their interest book, talk with their spouse and children, and go out with their families or friends at weekend to get more energy and become cheerful. Indeed, machines have had great effect in our life for saving our times. For instance, we don't need to waste our time to wash the dishes or clothes, cleaning our home, or staying at line in the bank for giving money or paying our bills; all these works can be done just by machines in limited time.

Besides, dealing with many dangerous materials in laboratories or factories are so harmful for people and in these situations machines can protect the people's health by doing some activities in these places instead of persons.

In conclusion, as I have mentioned here in my point of view doing activities by machines have many advantages for us and can help to do our works faster, better, and safer than do them by hand.
mahrou   
Apr 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / Mahmud Hesabi - building a statue of a famous person in your country [3]

Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Many famous people have been living in my country who all of them possess their own great characteristics. In my point of view, one of the most honorable persons which were living in my city is professor. Mahmud Hesabi that I think his statue should be built in my city. Prof. Hesabi was not only a famous scientist in my country but also he had eminent personality with great beliefs. Indeed, this person is one of the best epitomes for all people in their life. As far as I'm concerned, here I enumerate some of my reasons for this choice.

Professor Hesabi was the greatest physicist in my country who was teaching the quantum physics in Tehran University, the best university of my country, and he was famous as the father of physics science in Iran. He was one of the best students of Professor. Albert Aniston and afterwards he trained many eminent professors in this field.

Additionally, as I said above he had great thinking near his teaching. He believed in many ethical principles in live and always was teaching these worthwhile beliefs to his students. Today, his valuable statements are followed by many students and other people.

Moreover, Prof. Hesabi put many efforts out to improve the graduation status in my country. For example, he was cause to build new buildings and laboratories in universities, and increase the amenities for sending students to abroad for reaching more knowledge and technology. In result, all of these activities lead to remarkable progression in science and technology in my country.

In conclusion, by noticing to my explanations if to be supposed to build a statue of a famous person in my city, I think Professor. Hesabi, because of his great characters both as a scientist and as an open-minded personality, will be the best choice.
mahrou   
Apr 19, 2011
Writing Feedback / Grading students and test scores - are they benefitial for improving students? [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (Marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Many people think that getting grade is not beneficial for improving the students because they have stress for getting the good scores. But in my point of view getting the scores is not only not prevent their progression but also help them to get motivation for study more, achieve more success, and gain better job position in the future. As far as I'm concerned, I enumerate some of my reasons for this statement.

Students always need to some motivations for doing their homework and study their lessons. In fact, getting good scores which follow with many privileges for students can be an appropriate motivator for them. For example, they know if they get high scores in their courses they will get gifts, be encouraged by their parents and teachers, and have more chances to enter in upper grades at university.

Additionally, giving exams and getting scores for students is one of the best ways for appraising their knowledge and finding their weakness points in lessons. Indeed, through this way teachers will inform from graduate status of their students and put out their efforts for eliminating their weaknesses.

Moreover, grade is the standard measurement for appraising the students and for admission in any company, university, and so forth they are evaluated with their scores. So, getting good marks is an encourage factor for students because they know with high scores they can gain good position with high facilities in a company or enter to the good university in the future. In the other words, they are motivated for getting good scores to change their life in future.

All in all, by noticing to all the advantages which I have mentioned above although generally taking exam and getting good score is stressful for students, the advantages of getting it are more weight than its disadvantages and can encourage the students for following their education by more motivation.

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mahrou   
Apr 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / Planning all works alone or in group? - iBT [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Most of people prefer to plan for all their works alone and never ask the idea of others about their decision, but in my view we should consult with our friends or other people especially in our important decisions. In many times we don't have enough knowledge and experience about the ways which we want to do some things while our friends maybe have had better suggestion for us. Some of my major reasons for this idea are listed follow.

Each of us has knowledge and experience in some fields, but we can't expert in doing all things and inform from the results of doing many works in different situations. So, when we want to do new works or make a critical decision in our life we should consult about our aims with people who have had experienced in the same way or had been studding in such field. With sharing our decision with these persons they can inform us about advantages and disadvantages of our purpose; also, they maybe have had opportunities in a company or elsewhere which can provide some facilities for us. For example, when I wanted to go overseas to follow my education, one of my families in abroad, who is professor, have advised me to take some special exam and apply for the universities which she know that they are more appropriate for my situation; her suggestion was so beneficial for me and opened my eyes to new ways to make my decision.

Moreover, when we consult with other people, they can suggest a better idea to us so that we don't have need to waste our time in wrong way; so, we can make a good decision in which are more possibilities to get our success.

last but not least, Indeed, one of the features of human being is communicating with other people and consulting with them to improve their personal life and in end their society; when we talk about our problems with our friends or any people who closer to us, we can relief our pain so that we can think in true way along with their guidelines in helping us to solve our problems.

In conclusion, because of countless reasons which I've explained some of them in this article, I believe in making a decision consulting with other people is one of the most important factor in success.
mahrou   
Apr 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / "One should never judge a person by external appearances" - TOEFL iBT- subject [5]

One should never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Many people use to judge others from their clothes, faces, and families but in my opinion we should not judge people only via their external appearances. Beautiful faces or handsome persons are very appealing for us but these features are not related to their insides. Traits such as righteously, honestly and so on are the worthwhile features in each person which have superior to any beautiful eyes or modern cloth. Here I explain some statements to justify my opinion.

As I concede, it is natural that fitness, fairness, and so forth always preferable in society. People who have these features more than others attract other eyes, but could we say these persons have attracting behavior too? We never should judge persons on their appearances. For instance, Napoleon Bonaparte, who was very short guy, is one of the famous people in the history; besides, many of scientists and great men in the world have had inappropriate faces or clothes but they always stick in our mind because of their admirable characters.

Moreover, we never could determine the intelligence or fitness of people in terms of their families or living place. For example, some of people who have high IQ maybe had been growing in a poor family, or a skillful doctor maybe has the addicted father.

On the other hand, many of artists and famous persons who are very popular among people have the character in their family life which too deferent from the roles that they have played in the films or theaters. The important features of people are their internal characters and we can find these features by long relationship with them and not by just a glance at them.

To sum up, I know that always the appearance of people is very impression in our mind but I believe that we should not permit the external factors of persons have affected our judgment about them, as we don't like to be judged just by our clothes.
mahrou   
Apr 8, 2011
Writing Feedback / "What is a good son or a good daughter?" - TOEFL iBT sobject [7]

What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities change or remain the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

A good son or daughter should have several merits especially in related to their parents that some of these important qualities are respecting to their parents, obedience from them, and caring them in their old ages. These qualities always have maintained during the times among most of cultures as mine. Some of my explanations for this belief listed below.

We always owe our parents because of their countless efforts and devotions for growing us. So, it is our duty that obey them in all their true commands although their commands are in opposite on our willing. Also, a goon son or daughter should respect to their parents and never do the works or say the statements that annoying them.

Moreover, our parents brought up us to the world and grew up us with all difficulties in the life; they woke up during all the nights when we was ill, they helped us to learning our lessons during our education, and whenever we need help they supported us in critical times of our life. So, in their old ages that we leaved them and became the independent life we never did forget care and support them in this period. A good son or daughter even lived in far from their parents, most of the times go to their home or telephone to them to show their concerning about their parents and inform from their healthy and situation.

Additionally, although we select our future wife or husband for living with her or him, we should respect to the idea of our parents about our selection and if they opposite with it we should convince them with good reasons and correct behaviors; of course if they have false.

In conclusion a good child, son or daughter, should have many good traits in related to other people specially their parents. They should have obedience and respect to their parents and take care of them in the old. This believe never did change in times in our culture.
mahrou   
Apr 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Why are people attracted to dangerous sports, activities? 'to expose themselves' [2]

Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Today people especially juveniles attracted to some new activities and sports that seem weird or dangerous but they like to do them. There are many reasons for why they like these dangerous activities that here I mentioned to some of them.

Young people have much more energy than other people and always they seek the way to expose themselves. For examples they like dancing in the parties for several hours without tiredness or going to the sports clubs for exercising. Also the other types of activities that they more attracted to do them are some dangerous sports such as bungee jumping, cliff climbing, or rally that have high thrill. In fact they don't much care to their dangerous and more thinking about enjoying of these sports; for one moment close your eyes and thinking that you jump to the earth from a high altitude or driving a car with a high speed, they are so exciting.

On the other hand the young people sometimes have betting among themselves for doing some weird or dangerous activities that shows them strongest. Although they may be afraid of these sports, their pimples don't let them to shirk from carry out these activities because their friends think that they are coward and humiliate them; it seems foolish but is suitability for their age.

At last but not at least, they may be do these sports not for exposing themselves for their friends or to empty their energy, but only for their interest and love to do this activities.

In sum with noticing to some explanations said above I think that doing dangerous sports which more appropriate to juveniles than other people are because of their interest and high exciting to do; besides, showing the power of young people in front of their friends.
mahrou   
Mar 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / Some people like to communicate by e-mail and voice mail. Less face-to-face action? [4]

The twentieth century is famous to communicate century because of extension of communication technology such as email, satellite, mobile, and so forth. Even though these progresses to gather with more convenience for people and saving their daily time but they have some disadvantages for them too. In the case of communication for instance, these advance means lead to less the face-to-face contact among people that I believe this direct communication among people is so necessary for them. My major reasons for this idea are listed below.

At first, all of us need to contact with our friends or families to express our feeling about our problems or happiness. For example, when a person has a problem in his job with his boss or in home with his families, he needs to talk about these difficulties with his nearest friend to relief himself; saying these issues by e-mail or voice mail has not enough effect on the opposite person and so he cannot appreciates his upsetting; then, it is not useful for creation a sympathy.

Additionally, communication via e-mail or voice mail is to gather with some problems. For instance, in voice mail may be the voice is not received clear by another or may be has trembling that opposite person thinks that his friend who speaks with him has upsetting or illness and as a result he will concern about him. Also, in e-mail if the writer doesn't write the sentence as clear and correct it can create some misunderstandings for its reader. While in direct speech by phone or face-to-face the person can restate his opinion until who he talks with him gets his mean.

In conclusion, although using e-mail or voice mail has many benefits in connection among people in specific times, with noticing to the reasons mentioned above I prefer to related to my friends and families via phone or face-to-face rather than e-mail or voice mail.
mahrou   
Mar 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Some people spend the entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times. [3]

Some people prefer to stay in one place in all their lives while others like to move another place and searching new area. I believe that moving to other places during my life provides many good opportunities for me in my job, relationships, and other parts of my life. The following statements express my basic reasons for this opinion.

At first, when I go to other places I can be familiar with new people, new culture, and new believes that all of them is so amazing for me; I can see the people and cultures that before I just reading in books or watching movies about them. Also, I can make new friendship with these people and increase my friend numbers.

Additionally, I want to continue my education at higher degree so if I go to other countries I can consider their universities and choose one of them which more appropriate with my condition. Also, I can get good opportunities in my interest job that never could I get it in my hometown. These situations can change my life greatly and help me gaining my wishes.

Moreover, as my grandmother says, the traveling can build the persons with worth full experiences achieved in their moving. There for, with moving more to other places I can earn more skills and knowledge.

With noticing to the reasons that I mentioned above, even though these travels sometimes gather with separate from my family, I believe that moving to other places and don't stagnant at one's, has more benefits for me. Besides, my family always supports me to going to new places and improving my experiences.
mahrou   
Mar 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Investing on public transportation is preferable! [8]

Hi Kevin
Thank you very much for your correction, Whould you please tell me that how is my writing? and what score you think that i can get in my TOEFL exam?
mahrou   
Feb 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / Investing on public transportation is preferable! [8]

Nowadays with increasing the population in the entire world, need of people to transporting vehicles is increased. So, I believe that spite of importance of improving roads and high ways, developing the buses, trains or subways is more critical that governments should spend more money on it. My basic reasons for this idea are listed below.

As I mentioned above, with increasing the population shuttling the people is turn to a big problem in community; every day people spend most of their time in traffic and when they arrive to their work place they are so tired to do their duty. So, these issue causes that quality of their work be decreased. But, with improving the public transportation rate of using own cars would decrease and most of the people going to their work or every place through these vehicles. As a result, traffic would decrease in streets and people could arrive at their work in time and without tiredness for driving in traffic.

Additionally, with industrialization the cities and increase the number of cars in every where pollution of the air is threaded the people's health. There for, investing more on public transportation help greatly for declining a mounts of polluted air and improving the health of people.

Moreover, many of people cannot afford to buy a car; the poor people that live in cities or countries and consist most of the community, need to use transportation systems that have low expense. So, developing buses, trains or so on is necessary for this population.

In conclusion, although improving roads and high ways is important in cities and countries I personally think that investing in public transportation area is preferable and government should spent more money on this field.
mahrou   
Feb 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / Universities are centers of growing scientists and produce the science [5]

Universities are centers of growing scientists and produce the science. So it is so necessary to supply appropriate condition for educating the students that will become the future scientists. One of the facilities that developed at universities is sports activities that help improve the study situation for students. Also, student s activities in sport field can increase the position of the university among other universities as a trained athlete center. My reasons for this idea are listed as follow.

At first, students should have place for studying and using computerize systems to doing their studies and searches; however, they need to have recreation and hobby during this time for resting their mind. The studies show the students that have no amusement during their education get low score in their course and most of them have depression in this period. So, they must have some recreations such as play sports. Additionally, playing the sports help students improve their health that this issue cause to ascend their abilities to practice and study.

On the other hand, with investing in sport's activity students can increase their sport competition among other universities and through this way they can ascend the position of their university. These competitions lead to given some gifts and grants to their university that can be used for buying many tools or creating some facilities for university.

In conclusion, I believe that although library is one of the most important centers in the university that have basic role in education and create so facilities to study and search for students, investing in sport's activity for students can improve the ability of students in learning and doing their research in their field.
mahrou   
Feb 11, 2011
Writing Feedback / "The role of luck in our success" - When people succeed, is it because of hard work? [2]

All of us know about many successful persons that have lived in our country or other sides of the world. Also, we always earring about their efforts and perseveres to achieve their goals in life. So, I believe this is not the true statement that luck is the agent of success in our life.

Luck Is Helping Achieving Success



As I mentioned above, we know about many famous people and their approach for attaining success. Most of scientists and famous artists or musicians always have noted that they got to their position with hard working. They have failure more and more in their ways of success until they have able to achieve their goals. Therefore, we can't say that their success has been achieved by chance even though in few times having the luck help them getting their results or goals to succeed sooner than lacking of it.

On the other hand, when we decided to have succeeded we should do some things to gain what we want. For example if we want to get good scores in our exams, we should study hard and is not achieved this goal only with having luck. Hard working is the main agent of success in graduation for each professor and scientist and is the main reason of becoming stars for artists or musicians. Without attempting, none of them could become prosperous in their major field.

In conclusion, I think although having luck could help us in some ways to attaining our goal faster or easier but it not has merely the important role in our success. Thus, we should work hard without expectation of having luck in the way of achieving wishes and goals in our life.
mahrou   
Feb 9, 2011
Writing Feedback / Television promotes propaganda and it destroyed the communication among friends and family? [7]

Now a day with advancing of technology, life style (lifestyle) and communication of people has (been) affected by many elements. One of these elements is media, especially television, which has an important role in people's life. I believe that this media not only not destroyed (has not destroyed only) the connection among the family and friends but also (has) increased linkage among them. My major reasons for this idea are as listed as follow (listed accordingly).

One of the major uses of the television is filling the leisure times of persons with amusing programs such as interesting films or music which make us happy. So, in the weekend (at weekends) or off days family and friends can gather together for watching some amusing programs in their home and through this way they can more visit themselves.

Also, today television has a critical role in the education of people. Educative programs have many followers among all the people from child to old; some channels have programs for teaching school lessons to students; moreover several channels are created for teaching cooking to viewers (correct it). Hence, in the at schools, party (parties) or anywhere that (where) friends or (and) family (families) meet each other they can share their information about special programs that they follow. Consequently, they have amazing topics for their conversation and these topics help them increase their linkage.

In conclusion, I think that television has good effects on the communication among family and friends. Of course, some people addicted to watch TV alone that this behavior is opposing to positive effects of TV in the connection among people.

It is a not bad starting, however try no think deeply, give better ideas. You have many grammar mistakes, work on it also.
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