Writing Feedback / 'everything appears to be fun' - childhood is the happiest time of a person's life [3]

In my view, childhood is the happiest time in the whole time of people's lives. In this regard, the rest of life is not as enjoyable as childhood because in this period, there is no responsibility, gaining anything appears to be easy, and everything seems entertainment. Mainly, children in their life don't have any responsibilities. Their parents care about them, and pay attention to their needs and requires. Also, the children's mind generally concentrates on their toys and plays, so they don't worry about anything around themselves. In addition, following the previous point, they have no stress, or get angry about a certain job. For example, they study at school without any stress about their examinations' results. Moreover, children think that gaining anything seems easy. Indeed, they think that obtaining anything is not difficult because their mind is not similar to an adult's mind. In addition, their wishes and desires jog them to ponder that their environment is convenient and comfort. Also, they think that for gaining everything there are no problems or difficulties. For instance, finding a friend is so easy, and they can trust to anyone. Last but not least, children think that everything is fun. They consider that everything is entertaining and fun because they don't have any knowledge about it. Additionally, children try to know the rules of objections or people's relations, and they think about anything as a way of having fun. For example, they want to make a group of friends around a certain game, like a football team, thus they intend to learn the rules of football then biased on these rules they will play for their entertainment.

To sum up, childhood is a period that human don't have any responsibility, obtaining everything seems easy, and everything appears to be entertainment. That's why I agree to this statement that childhood is the happiest time of a person's life.

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Writing Feedback / The media should consider famous people's lives [7]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television,
newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to
the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and
celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

I disagree that the media pay too much attention to the famous people's lives. From my point of view, the media, such as televisions, newspapers, magazines, and so on, should consider the famous people's lives because people pursue their private lives to know more, the media's producers want to provide such programs, and governments desire for organize the society through role modeling.

Mainly, people as audiences would like to enlarge their information about the famous people's lives. People consider these kinds of programs as the best ones on the TV or other media, so they expect more programs about celebrities or public figures. In addition, many people regard several famous people as their heroes or heroines, such as some artists or some sports stars. Also, many people consider knowing about their heroes or heroines as a way of having fun or entertainment. Thus, people wait eagerly for these types of programs.

Moreover, the media's producers yearn for providing such programs. They are avid for exhibiting the positive qualities of famous people's lives for their audiences due to produce fine works. In addition, they create such programs for make more money through huge projects. The importance of these kinds of programs refers to the weight of audiences' interests because a lot of people would like these programs, so the interests of people are significant for producers.

Finally, governments desire for organize their community through role modeling. They try to maintain values and beliefs by role modeling in their society, especially among young people. Also, they attempt to conduct thoughts of their people by signifying a few famous people's lives, like religious well-known people in my country. In addition, governments pay attention to the next generation beliefs, and planning for them through role modeling.

To sum up, I believe that the media should pay attention to the famous people's lives in the way of people, producers and governments desires. Therefore, I think that these sorts of programs should be provided in each society.

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Writing Feedback / Why do not enjoyable things: necessity, importance for the future, families and friends in our lives [5]

Some people try to avoid some things that they dislike or don't enjoy doing them. From my point of view, we have to do some things that aren't favorable because these things are necessary for us, are linked to our future, and are related to our families or friends.

Mainly, there are many things that seem essential in our lives. There are some things that could be identified as our requirements and needs; so, if we keep away from them, we might lose some other things that could be more significant for us. In this regard, avoiding our requirements and needs sometimes could cause of losing things that related to our lives. For example, I may dislike my job, but I cannot find a new appropriate job, so I have to continue my job for a long time.

Moreover, some things that we have a negative view about them are linked to our future because we maybe get better position in the next few years. Also, doing these things that are disliked, beside the cause of improving our positions, may be increased our prestige in the future. For example, mathematics as a difficult lesson among other ones is not a favorite lesson for many students, but it is helpful to become a professional engineer in the time to come.

Finally, we have to do some things that appear to be not enjoyable for us, but are related to our families or friends' lives. They occasionally ask us to do some things for them inasmuch we like them; we perform for them; on the other hand, they maybe have done some things so that they are expecting us to compensate for them. For instance, I lend some money to my friend because I really like him, or I lend money because he lent me some money formerly.

To sum up, people should do some things they do not getting a pleasure from doing due to a necessity of doing them, importance of them for the future, and positions of our families or friends in our lives. Therefore, doing some dislike things can change our life to being beauty.

Writing Feedback / Improving public transportation could reduce air pollution in a city [NEW]

Some people believe that governments should spend more money on developing public transportation, such as buses, trains, and subways. In this regard, I think that governments should pay attention to public transportation because increasing convenience of the people, decreasing traffic and air pollution on streets.

Mainly, improving public transportation could bring the convenience for the people of a city. One kind of the convenience refers to cheapness of public transportation due to the fact that they feel tranquility and calmness. Also, during the route they can feel relaxed without any stress of driving by a personal vehicle, and even they can sleep in this time. In addition, when they drive a personal vehicle, occur an accident is possible, so this important for governments to develop public transportation.

Moreover, developing public transportation is, cause of decreasing traffic in a city. Enhancing of buses, trains, and subways could cause of decreasing the attendance of personal vehicles on the streets. For example, Enhancing buses in main roads cause that fewer cars attend on the streets because the people have to pay money for gasoline or other expenses. In addition, public transportation's vehicles are able to move faster in special roads that cause of decreasing traffic on the streets. Also, the noise from traffic would reduce through expanding buses system, trains system, and subways system.

Last but not least, improving public transportation could reduce air pollution in a city. In this regard, the fewer cars attend on the streets, the less smoke and fume would inhale on the streets. So, trees and plants would stand for more times, and the people in the margin of streets, especially old people and children feel healthy. Therefore, governments should give attention to public transportation as a way of reducing pollution in cities.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL: If no food at home we should have a restaurant in the neighborhood [4]

It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in
your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use
specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Although many people oppose to this plan, but I support of a new restaurant in our neighborhood. I prefer this plan as a fun, when we are in a hurry, and we need to eat foods quickly, and when there is no food at home.

Most of the people in a society, especially in these decades, go into the restaurants as a fun. Indeed, the varieties in the foods at restaurants are motivating the families. In this regard, I often go into the restaurants on the weekends, but if a new one be built in my neighborhood. I will go a week twice, and I can invite my friends in the restaurant.

Moreover, many people go into the restaurants when they are in a hurry, and they do not have enough time for cooking a meal. They sometimes can choose another way, waiting at home to be sent their foods. Nevertheless, it is possible that the food is not prepared, and we finally have to do our job without eating the food.

Furthermore, one of the most significant reasons for supporting this plan is, lacking the materials or the groceries at home, especially at night when most of the supermarkets or the grocery stores have closed and preparing them is hard. Also, I can not cook like many people. Therefore, I think our neighborhood needs to a new restaurant.

In conclusion, If we want to resolve our needs in our neighborhood such as when we are in a hurry, and there is no food at home or have a fun with the family. I suppose that we should have a restaurant.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay: Eating out or Eating at home? Home food is the best! [8]

Eating food at home is so better than eating food at restaurants, but some people have different opinions about it. Nevertheless, I prefer eating at home because of healthy food, variety of food, and quietness and tranquility of home.

When I'm eating at home, I'm certain the food is healthy, but when I enter to a restaurant, I'm not sure the food is healthy. A cook in the kitchen, for example, a mother cooking and the others in the family knowing that their mother paying attention whenever she is cooking. Also, the quality of materials, for instance, rice, meat, etc., can be better than the quality of materials at restaurants.

Moreover, the variety of foods is considerable at home, because any cook can cook from traditional foods to fast foods. For example, my mother can cook Kebab as a traditional food to Pizza as a fast food, while the restaurants divide to traditional or modern ones.

Furthermore, when I am eating at home, I feel tranquility and quietness, especially I can speak with my family and watching TV or the others act that I can do at the same time. Also, I can eat foods in a diversity positions such as standing at a counter to sitting on a carpet.

In conclusion, I prefer eating food at home rather than at a restaurant, because I feel healthy, and I'm able to tasting various delicious foods, and I feel tranquility or quietness at home. Therefore, I suggest everyone to choose home for eating foods, and trying to go to the restaurants less than one time in one month.

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