Undergraduate / It is now 2013. How has the Macaulay Honors College changed you? (300/less) [6]

*I have to pretend that I am graduating from college.
In this essay i tried to explain my views. Is there anything I can change or need to edit.

ESSAY

That day I was again dreaming about building a house of my own. All those people around me were clapping until my dream was over. I dreamt about becoming an architect from my childhood. My lifetime ambition is becoming true. I am graduating from City College as an architect. I am excited, the same excitement I felt when I got the first report card in elementary school. I feel like a mountain climber who is almost at the peak of the mountain. I cannot wait to get my master's degree and get the first job as an architect. The biggest help is contributed by Macaulay Honors College.

Macaulay Honors College has given me the opportunity to consider myself as a determined person. I consider the scholarship and the opportunities I received from Macaulay as my pride. I have enjoyed all the essence of those beautiful places without even paying any money. A cultural passport, a laptop, internship all have made me feel like a person with high respect and pride. I never had to worry about paying in college or my low-income family background. I could reach my way but Macaulay has made my way easier.

The big change Macaulay has made in my life is the stereotyping of people about me. It has increased my self-esteem. Regardless of money there are a lot more achievements I have achieved from here. It is now 2013 and I am graduating from college. Macaulay has been my vehicle to this path. My journey in this vehicle has left a bigger image in my life. I can proudly say now "I know who I am and how I am".

Undergraduate / Essay about life - Pose a question and answer it. [8]

*Is my question interesting?
Do i need to mention Leo Tolstoy in the essay?
How is the opening sentence and the closing sentence? I feel it's all over the place.------------
ESSAY

When is the most important time? Birth or death; present or future, I do not know what is correct. I used to wonder about the question that made me think about the worldly life and the spiritual life. Is there any specific correct answer for this question? Leo Tolstoy posed the question in "The Emperors Three Question". After reading the article, I wonder about the truth. My own experience has made me understand the most valuable time of a person's life. I feel my experiences have given me the answer to this question.

Life is like a building. The more a person uses his time successfully the better the building becomes. Every building needs a strong base to have a better construction. Like the base of a building, a successful life needs a successful base. The base building of life is present. Present is the most valuable and important time for everyone's life.

Kazi Nazrul Islam is a legendary poet, musician, revolutionary and philosopher of Bengali literature whom I consider as a lodestar. His life lesson has taught me how to cope with present to visualize a bright future. He was very poor. He could not finish high school but his great works are still alive. He did not have money but he did not give up. He continued to write poetry and song to influence people. The Bengali society had many violations and he spoke out against everything. He was a rebel who made all people rebel along with his works. He worked hard for present, which has given us a good society. All the great people throughout history have made the best use of their present and existing time. That contribution made their life valuable and immortal.

Life has a different meaning for each person. "Forget about the calendar or watch, use your time as much as you can, who knows how long you are living, make the best out of what you have now, and don't wonder about a miracle to happen in life". This is the moral lesson I have learned from the question. I do not want to waste any time in my life and always wonder about the most important time of life. I am the person to choose the most valuable moment of my life.

Coming in this world as a newborn is an important time, last moment of earthly life is an important time but the most important time is only present. Past is a waste and Future is a mystery, Present is the time to create a history. All the great philosophers of history have utilized their present to get immortal life. I do not want to wonder anymore about a mystery. Present is real and I want to follow the real path.

Undergraduate / The most important activity of your life that teels something about you. [7]

*I think there are many grammartical mistakes. The sentence sturctures are bad. I really need help in this essay. I also think my closing is not interesting.

I was very nervous. My hands were shaking and my heart beat faster. I was praying to God for the best. I did not want to get embarrassed in that big platform. I was the next person to go up on the stage to perform. It was the first show of my life. It was 2001, a show arranged for the students of my school, which was to be broadcasted on TV. After few minutes my turn came. All those stage lights were blinding my eyes, and those cameras in front of my face were like monster to me. I started singing neglecting all my fear. I fought my greatest fear that day in front of that big camera and all those people standing around me. Everyone clapped until I left the stage.

I was only six years old when I started my singing. I remember the excitement of my first singing class. Singing has made me passionate, determined and confident. I still remember one of my audience's comments, which has influenced my life. After finishing my performance, she told me "You have the God gifted power to make others happy through your singing. Try to use that power and you will get love in return". This is such an influencing line to make me more confident in my work. I get the most happiness when everyone admires me after my performance.

My most favorite activity besides school is singing. It is the reflection of my soul. I am very passionate about my singing. I have learned many lessons from it. Participation in many competitions has taught me the importance of will power and the way to stand out in the crowd. It's not only good talent needed for winning. A winner needs strong will and own satisfaction. I have obtained those powers, which have made me winner.

I have gone through many experiences while singing. It has influenced my personal life. Every time I sing, I feel the same excitement as a four-year-old kid feels at the first day

of school. I learn new things every time from it. Singing is a part of my life. I can make others happy which makes me cheerful as well. I want to continue my singing. I always consider singing as my teacher. Music has shaped me today as a matured person. I have learned passion, determination and confidence from it. I will make the use of all the lessons learned in each step of my life.