katev
Jan 14, 2013
Undergraduate / Networking / Pacific National Exhibition; Why U Toronto?/Extracurricular activities? [3]
Try to vary your sentences, don't begin with "I ___" so much. Sure, they ask you to write about yourself and they give you some basic questions to answer, but it gets a little boring to read "I do this. I learned this. I hope to do this."
encourages me to not only appreciate the exterior of the objects, but also to understand how it functions
After familiarizing myself with engineering, I realized...
While taking the senior level of science at my highschool, I also tutored...
Just a few suggestions
Try to vary your sentences, don't begin with "I ___" so much. Sure, they ask you to write about yourself and they give you some basic questions to answer, but it gets a little boring to read "I do this. I learned this. I hope to do this."
encourages me to initiate investigates to not only appreciate the exterior of the objects, as well as understand how it is able to function the way it does
encourages me to not only appreciate the exterior of the objects, but also to understand how it functions
After having to familiarized myself with engineering, I realized
After familiarizing myself with engineering, I realized...
As I reach the senior level of science in highschool, I began tutoring
While taking the senior level of science at my highschool, I also tutored...
Just a few suggestions